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This fan fiction takes place in WWII.It is about how that bloody war was and what our grand fathers and/or great grand fathers went through.Enjoy:) and also if you see any problems or were bored by the story,please say so,i love to read others comments.


5:00 AM

Wake up!Hurry,do want to keep sleeping?The sun is almost rising.The captains went to every room and said that.
The soldiers woke up early in the morning and started jogging for about half an hour,then after that they did push-ups and so on.
12:00 AM

The soldiers go to the laundry room and wash their uniforms as well as take a shower.After that they eat lunch.
1:00 PM

After eating lunch they go and wear their uniforms and start training again until 3:00 PM.
3:00 PM

The soldiers have aiming practice until 7:00 PM
at 7:00 PM they sleep.
Its 5:00 AM again and time for the soldiers to get up.As the captains go to their rooms to wake them up,suddenly a very loud sound is heard and everyone wakes up in fear.It was like the sound of something big exploding,yes,it seems this is the sound of bombs.The captain of the 8th division tells his men to sound the alarm.Then suddenly the sound of a soldier is heard,it was CPL.Philips,he shouted:MAN DOWN,I REPEAT,MAN DOWN,CODE RED,EVERYONE TAKE COVER AND PREPARE FOR EVACUATION!HIGH SKY,HIGH SKY.
As the alarm was raisin and the sound was everywhere,the soldiers grab their gear and get on the trucks and get out of the base.


PVT.Jason: Whats going on here?

SGT.Ean: Its the Nazis,they're bombing the base!

PVT.Charles: So were are we goin now sarge?

SGT.Ean: Berlin idiot,were going to base Alpha.


The trucks were coming out of the base as hundreds of bodies were left at the base,trucks exploded behind them and they barley manged to get out of the base alive.
10:00 AM

They arrive at the base and the leader of the 8th division,Sampson talks to the leader of the 10th division,Tristan.

Sampson: Tristan the Nazis attacked base Bravo,we took heavy casualties and only about 500 of my men survived,Tell your men to contact command and tell them we lost the line.

Tristan: Alright,I'll tell my men,but in the mean time i want you to stay here.

Sampson: like i have anywhere else to go.


Tomorrow

*One of the soldiers knocks on the door*
Sir,may i come in?

Tristan: come in.

-sir we just received a telegraph from command.*hand over telegraph*

Tristan: you may leave.
*reads telegraph*

We have received a message that the 8th division was bombed by Nazis and was forced to retreat and give up the line.You are to help them take the line back ASAP because that is a very important line and losing it will cost us so you are to take it back by any means necessary.

Tristan tells Sampson what command has ordered and they begin making preparations for a long battle.
After five days you could see hundreds of trucks moving out of base Alpha,they were headed to take the line back but it seemed the enemy was expecting them.This,is the beginning of one of the bloodiest wars in WWII,the battle to take back base Bravo.The enemy was fully aware of what an important base this is.

SGT.Ean: The truck has been hit,get out or you'll die!

*the team jumps out of the truck and sees there allies taking cover behind a long wall*

SGT.Jonathan: Fall in guys,we need a plan to be able to make it past this wall.

SGT.Ean: I'll take my squad up the wall while your team provides us with cover fire.

-Alright.You heard the man,cover them.

*Eans squad climb the wall and make it to the other side with hundreds of other soldiers,they will be pushing forward while the others went from the flank and the tanks split up into two teams,each one went from a flank as Ean's squad was pinned down and could only get behind cover and blind fire.

To be continued.

In the next chapter the war will continue,can Ean's squad survive?For how long can they blind fire?
 
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You got a nice background for the story. Makes me want to read the whole story. The only downside I find here is that the way of writing the story does not catch me. Maybe If you could write it with more tension, more details it would appeal more to me. Look at the following part. The first few sentences are important for the background and starting point of your story. Though you do not pay attention to it that much. While when the bombs start falling, you tend to write like 100 pages down about one second of story. If you could balance this over the whole story, it would be a lot more appealing to read. I personally do not like short sentences without meaning, I made the parts about I was talking BOLD, so you it's easy to find.



5:00 AM

Wake up!Hurry,do want to keep sleeping?The sun is almost rising.The captains went to every room and said that. A bit more of the army feeling could be applied here. You know those movies in which the soldiers get sworn out of bed by some grumpy old veteran which tells them an old story? Look at this
You must be registered for see links
. It explains all;)
The soldiers woke up early in the morning and started jogging for about half an hour,then after that they did push-ups and so on.
12:00 AM

The soldiers go to the laundry room and wash their uniformsWTF?!? I thought they had people doing that for them? rofl:p as well as take a shower.After that they eat lunch.
1:00 PM

After eating lunch they go and wear their uniforms and start training again until 3:00 PM.
3:00 PM

The soldiers have aiming practice until 7:00 PM
at 7:00 PM they sleep.
Its 5:00 AM again and time for the soldiers to get up.As the captains go to their rooms to wake them up,suddenly a very loud sound is heard and everyone wakes up in fear.It was like the sound of something big exploding,yes,it seems this is the sound of bombs.The captain of the 8th division tells his men to sound the alarm.Then suddenly the sound of a soldier is heard,it was CPL.Philips,he shouted:MAN DOWN,I REPEAT,MAN DOWN,CODE RED,EVERYONE TAKE COVER AND PREPARE FOR EVACUATION!HIGH SKY,HIGH SKY.

As the alarm was raisin and the sound was everywhere,the soldiers grab their gear and get on the trucks and get out of the base. Uhm, is this really the way army bases respond to an attack?
 
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ElricBrothers said:
You got a nice background for the story. Makes me want to read the whole story. The only downside I find here is that the way of writing the story does not catch me. Maybe If you could write it with more tension, more details it would appeal more to me. Look at the following part. The first few sentences are important for the background and starting point of your story. Though you do not pay attention to it that much. While when the bombs start falling, you tend to write like 100 pages down about one second of story. If you could balance this over the whole story, it would be a lot more appealing to read. I personally do not like short sentences without meaning, I made the parts about I was talking BOLD, so you it's easy to find.



5:00 AM

Wake up!Hurry,do want to keep sleeping?The sun is almost rising.The captains went to every room and said that. A bit more of the army feeling could be applied here. You know those movies in which the soldiers get sworn out of bed by some grumpy old veteran which tells them an old story? Look at this
You must be registered for see links
. It explains all;)
The soldiers woke up early in the morning and started jogging for about half an hour,then after that they did push-ups and so on.
12:00 AM

The soldiers go to the laundry room and wash their uniformsWTF?!? I thought they had people doing that for them? rofl:p as well as take a shower.After that they eat lunch.
1:00 PM

After eating lunch they go and wear their uniforms and start training again until 3:00 PM.
3:00 PM

The soldiers have aiming practice until 7:00 PM
at 7:00 PM they sleep.
Its 5:00 AM again and time for the soldiers to get up.As the captains go to their rooms to wake them up,suddenly a very loud sound is heard and everyone wakes up in fear.It was like the sound of something big exploding,yes,it seems this is the sound of bombs.The captain of the 8th division tells his men to sound the alarm.Then suddenly the sound of a soldier is heard,it was CPL.Philips,he shouted:MAN DOWN,I REPEAT,MAN DOWN,CODE RED,EVERYONE TAKE COVER AND PREPARE FOR EVACUATION!HIGH SKY,HIGH SKY.

As the alarm was raisin and the sound was everywhere,the soldiers grab their gear and get on the trucks and get out of the base. Uhm, is this really the way army bases respond to an attack?
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i agree with u on all of it but on the last part they couldnt do anything because the anti-air missiles were destroyed but since i didnt say that,ur right.thanks:)
 
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