[Other] The Sad Tale of December

[Latios]

It was the winter of December where spirits were hustled about,
The good, the bad, the somewhat glad,
For Christmas was coming! All a cheer! (All a cheer meaning everyone is happy)
The snow flakes danced, the reindeer pranced, all was about in the snowy hemisphere

But twas' one spirit, we know not the name,
He came about in a pout, he wasn't very sane,
The spirit glared upon the poor souls, who knew not what was coming,

He grew a wicked smile, and thought a terrible idea,
The fellow walked by and knocked others over,
In an angered rage, no one could find out why,
Why was he so upset they thought?

But they soon knew why, during the winter of December,
He had no presents, he had no home,
He was left, all, all, all alone,

I will admit this isn't my best poem but it is my first one. (Please leave some constructive criticism ;_

 

[Ryóma]

It's a good poem. I can't think of any criticism right now.

 

[Kishi Uzumaki]

It's a good poem .

 

[noora00]

It's a nice poem I like it ... I really like " The snow flakes danced " .

 

[Mis]

This is beautiful, yet it saddens me a bit.
I guess beautifully sad would be a good description.

 

[Latios]

Thanks :3

 

[Ryu Kishi]

its good, try not to explain things in the poem itself, rather do it at the end of the poem.