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Chapter 1:
On A cliff a few miles away…
The aqua hair female in an Akatsuki cloak stood at the edge of the cliff watching all the battles transpire. “So it would seem that our soldiers are not equip to deal with someone of the Mizutoki'’s caliber. I wonder what master will think”
“It is of no consequence.” Appearing next the women known as ‘God’s Angel’ “I have completed my task. Jiraiya of the Sannin is no more.”
“So what about those five heading towards him? Shall we extinguish their light?”
Shaking his head “Negative, besides they will be our messengers” Pein turned and walked away from Konan.
“And the message?”
Her words froze him in his tracks. Pausing for a second, Pein turned around slowly, “Dawn is approaching.”
Looking up toward the Heavens, the day was slowly approaching. For this symbolized more than just day break, it symbolized the beginning of the end.
One hour later…
Natsumi landed on the dirt patch. It wasn’t evident that there was a battle here as. Being cautious, she drew her sword. Landing next to her were the rest of the group. Natsumi saw a figure in the crater. Slowly, she started to approach. The group didn’t follow the girl. Without reason, her sword fell from her hand.
Samaro, the leader rushed to the girl’s aid only to see what caused her to drop her sword. Looking down into the crater, he saw an old man with white hair barely clinging to life.
Jumping in the crater without hesitation, Natsumi was now gazing at the man she recognized as Jiraiya. “Jiraiya-jiji, wake up Jiraiya-jiji.”
“Na..Natsumi… is that you?”
A smile graced the girls face, “You’re okay. Jiji, what happened? It doesn’t matter save your strength I will take you to Konoha right now. We are only about 25 miles east right?”
Jiraiya stroked the girls cheek, “Don’t bother, I’m dying. Besides… Tsunade has been notified. You sure did grow up... To bad you’re not 18 yet.”
“Jiji, no more jokes, I’m taking you home.” Natsumi was trying to hold back her tears but it was next to impossible.
“Natsumi… Don’t worry, I’m on my way there.”
“Jiji… Naruto-nii is going to hate you.”
“I kno… I know.” Jiraiya was struggling to catch his breath, it was apparent that he only had a few minutes to live.
“We will make sure you are okay Jiji.”
“Tell Tsunade I’m sorry. Te..te..te..ll Naruto to summon Gamamikichi. I...I…”
Everyone watched as Jiraiya struggled to get out his last words. While he coughed up blood as he struggled to get the words out, Natsumi gaze on the man who was a grand father to her. “What is it Jiji”
The words never escaped his lips. Jiraiya’s battered body went limp in Natsumi’s arms.
Jiraiya, was dead.
Natsumi pulled the sannin close to her chest while tears escaped her closed eyes.
A few hours passed…
It was morning and Natsumi was still sitting with a dead Jiraiya in her arms. Samaro tapped her on her shoulder, “Natsumi, we should leave.”
“I’m not leaving him!”
Chosen his words carefully, “I don’t mean leave him behind no, what I mean is we need to get out of here. We are in enemy territory.”
“Too late” Ayaka readied her Kunai as Leaf shinobi surrounded the group.
The rest of the group got into a defensive stance. “Light Shinobi stand down! We mean you no harm”
The group turned to see a black spike haired Jounin with peach fuzz on his jaw line. With the standard Leaf vest, matching the color of the Light Shinobi, Konohamaru stepped forth with his group.
“How can we trust you Leaf vermin?” Ayaka asked.
“We are only here on Tsunade’s request. We will be taking Jiraiya-sama body back to the village for a proper burial. Kenta, Naoki please retrieve the body.”
Natsumi drew her sword, “Konohamaru-niisan, I’m sorry but I will carry him back. Please, Notify Naruto-niisan immediately.”
Konohamaru looked at the girl who gaze was focused on Jiraiya. “Okay. We should get a move on it. Naoki, lead our guest to the village, I will escort Natsumi back.”
“Yes Sir!” Naoki turned to the group, “Let’s move everyone”
All left the scene except Konohamaru and Natsumi. Konohamaru walked up to the girl and knelt next to her. When she looked up into his eyes, she broke down “Why Konohamaru-niisan? Who could have done this to Jiji?”
“I don’t know, but we will find out and make who ever did this pay. Come on Natsumi, we have to go.”
Natsumi didn’t want to move but she knew she couldn’t stay there forever. Picking Jiraiya’s body up and throwing it over her shoulder, she nodded informing Konohamaru that she was ready. The two left the scene, the next stop was Konoha.
To Be Continued…
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Chapter 2
The Golden Legend: Tears
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The hourglass ticks...
Chapter 2
The Golden Legend: Tears
On A cliff a few miles away…
The aqua hair female in an Akatsuki cloak stood at the edge of the cliff watching all the battles transpire. “So it would seem that our soldiers are not equip to deal with someone of the Mizutoki'’s caliber. I wonder what master will think”
“It is of no consequence.” Appearing next the women known as ‘God’s Angel’ “I have completed my task. Jiraiya of the Sannin is no more.”
“So what about those five heading towards him? Shall we extinguish their light?”
Shaking his head “Negative, besides they will be our messengers” Pein turned and walked away from Konan.
“And the message?”
Her words froze him in his tracks. Pausing for a second, Pein turned around slowly, “Dawn is approaching.”
Looking up toward the Heavens, the day was slowly approaching. For this symbolized more than just day break, it symbolized the beginning of the end.
One hour later…
Natsumi landed on the dirt patch. It wasn’t evident that there was a battle here as. Being cautious, she drew her sword. Landing next to her were the rest of the group. Natsumi saw a figure in the crater. Slowly, she started to approach. The group didn’t follow the girl. Without reason, her sword fell from her hand.
Samaro, the leader rushed to the girl’s aid only to see what caused her to drop her sword. Looking down into the crater, he saw an old man with white hair barely clinging to life.
Jumping in the crater without hesitation, Natsumi was now gazing at the man she recognized as Jiraiya. “Jiraiya-jiji, wake up Jiraiya-jiji.”
“Na..Natsumi… is that you?”
A smile graced the girls face, “You’re okay. Jiji, what happened? It doesn’t matter save your strength I will take you to Konoha right now. We are only about 25 miles east right?”
Jiraiya stroked the girls cheek, “Don’t bother, I’m dying. Besides… Tsunade has been notified. You sure did grow up... To bad you’re not 18 yet.”
“Jiji, no more jokes, I’m taking you home.” Natsumi was trying to hold back her tears but it was next to impossible.
“Natsumi… Don’t worry, I’m on my way there.”
“Jiji… Naruto-nii is going to hate you.”
“I kno… I know.” Jiraiya was struggling to catch his breath, it was apparent that he only had a few minutes to live.
“We will make sure you are okay Jiji.”
“Tell Tsunade I’m sorry. Te..te..te..ll Naruto to summon Gamamikichi. I...I…”
Everyone watched as Jiraiya struggled to get out his last words. While he coughed up blood as he struggled to get the words out, Natsumi gaze on the man who was a grand father to her. “What is it Jiji”
The words never escaped his lips. Jiraiya’s battered body went limp in Natsumi’s arms.
Jiraiya, was dead.
Natsumi pulled the sannin close to her chest while tears escaped her closed eyes.
A few hours passed…
It was morning and Natsumi was still sitting with a dead Jiraiya in her arms. Samaro tapped her on her shoulder, “Natsumi, we should leave.”
“I’m not leaving him!”
Chosen his words carefully, “I don’t mean leave him behind no, what I mean is we need to get out of here. We are in enemy territory.”
“Too late” Ayaka readied her Kunai as Leaf shinobi surrounded the group.
The rest of the group got into a defensive stance. “Light Shinobi stand down! We mean you no harm”
The group turned to see a black spike haired Jounin with peach fuzz on his jaw line. With the standard Leaf vest, matching the color of the Light Shinobi, Konohamaru stepped forth with his group.
“How can we trust you Leaf vermin?” Ayaka asked.
“We are only here on Tsunade’s request. We will be taking Jiraiya-sama body back to the village for a proper burial. Kenta, Naoki please retrieve the body.”
Natsumi drew her sword, “Konohamaru-niisan, I’m sorry but I will carry him back. Please, Notify Naruto-niisan immediately.”
Konohamaru looked at the girl who gaze was focused on Jiraiya. “Okay. We should get a move on it. Naoki, lead our guest to the village, I will escort Natsumi back.”
“Yes Sir!” Naoki turned to the group, “Let’s move everyone”
All left the scene except Konohamaru and Natsumi. Konohamaru walked up to the girl and knelt next to her. When she looked up into his eyes, she broke down “Why Konohamaru-niisan? Who could have done this to Jiji?”
“I don’t know, but we will find out and make who ever did this pay. Come on Natsumi, we have to go.”
Natsumi didn’t want to move but she knew she couldn’t stay there forever. Picking Jiraiya’s body up and throwing it over her shoulder, she nodded informing Konohamaru that she was ready. The two left the scene, the next stop was Konoha.
To Be Continued…
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