The Formation Of Akatsuki-7

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Chapter: A man of explosion

(at a secret hideout)
Deidara: shit i should still do my practice more.......

(suddenly the door blasts)

deidara: who is that??
a mysterious voice: is that deidara ???
deidara: (thinking)shit some trouble it seems(and he takes clay from his pocket)
the voice: i didnt come to fight....i just have a proposal
deidara: i'm in no mood to hear anything
(the man appeared from the smoke)
voice: i'm uchiha itachi!!!!!!and i want u to...
deidara: (thinking on seeing the cloak and saying) akatsuki ah???i have heard rumors about them and especially u the uchiha brat......
itachi: if i were u i will never call a brat
deidara: oh u wanna pick up a fight???
itachi: as i told earlier i dont wanna kill u,i just have a proposal
deidara: such confident words......do u really think u can kill me uchiha brat????
itachi: if i have no choice then i have to
deidara: then come on!!!!!!!!!!!!!
itachi: shit !!why should it be me to fight everyone i see......first kisame then this guy......but it seems that this guy is slower and a long range fighter unlike kisame.....
deidara: molds a clay in his hand and made it into a cluster of small birds...
iachi: what is that????(thinking) i saw his chakra concentrated on his right hand but is it just to make a small birds.............
deidara: die u uchiha bastard!!!!
(itachi jumps and use his kunai at one of the birds to test them.........then he finally found that those were explosives)
itachi: such a good attack ,then what i have heard about him his right
deidara: no matter how far u go,my birds will be following u ....ha ha ha
(then itachi throws a shuriken and uses shadow shuriken jutsu.............all the birds was blown up leaving itachi unharmed)
deidara: how did u?????????????shit i'm gonna kill u now..............
itachi: as i told earlier i just have o finish this soon.........so i wont allow u to proceed any further............this is my turn......
deidara: like i will allow u
(and deidara again takes a piece of clay in his hands)
itachi: (thinking)i think i can finally test the newly trained power..........tsukuyomi
deidara: wha........what???........what have u done to me.......just get me out...
itachi: i was trying to be soft but it was your decision that lead to this situation..........
deidara: o.......ok fine i will ............just listen......please relieve meeeeeee..........
itachi: thats better ............
(and saying so,itachi's eyes reached his normal three dotted sharingan........and deidara went down to his knees)
deidara: what was that?????(thinking) is that the power of the cursed uchiha clan!!!!
itachi: now just listen to me.....dont intervent when i talk...............
deidara: grrrrrrrrrrr.........
itachi: as u should have heard.........a organization called akatsuki have been formed.....its main aim is to collect all the bijuus and rule the world.........so for man power i have come here to ask u join in it!!!!!!!!
deidara: ha u have seen that i'm not powerful as u.....then why did u select me???????
itachi: everything has a reason........we have heard about u .......it seems that u are a anti nationalist and a s ranked crimanal as well as missing nin of iwagakure(village hidden in rocks).......on seeing your mission records,it seemed that u can handle a kage level fighter....it seems that you have completed 4 d rank ,27 c rank ,35 b rank ,13 a rank and 3 s rank missions..................thats what made us to choose u................so its my final question i'm gonna ask u..........are gonna join or not??????????????
(and after that itachi's eyes again changed to the ms formation)
deidara: after askin me so much...............i cannot refuse besides i love destruction by a art!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(and then itachi and deidara walked out of the dojo)


Next chapter: The two men's joining...........
 

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guys it seems that the last version of my posting was a little complicated to understand....so i changed the way...............so pls read it and comment it..........and tell me whether i can continue..............
 

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Just started reading your fanfic. and i must say that i just love it. Esspecialy the first 3 parts:D Since i read all at once i didn`t bother to rate or "Thanks" the first 6 parts, but i will start from this one and onwards:)

From the ones that are nominated this month i personally thinks that your and Pervy Sage`s fanfic are the best Naruto related fanfics around:)
If i hadn`t already voted for Pervy`s before reading yours, i would definitivly voted for yours;):(

The way you detail each scenario and your English skills are quite good(considering that you`re from India).

If i were you, i think i would call the fanfic Itachi`s Akatsuki adventures/Gaiden or something since so far he`s the main character, but the name is still good. Are you going to make many parts? Since you haven`t really started at the "formation part" yet:p

Since i didn`t comment any of your earlier parts, i`m going to let it all out in one go.

Are you going to have Itachi involved in all of the recrutings and are you going to stay true to the story on those part considering that you somewhat made up Deidara`s joining of Akatsuki when we know certain facts about it(We saw how he joined in a flashback during his fight with Sasuke).

And finally. I don`t really see the connection between part 6 and 7. Any reasons why or are you planning to do it this way onwards?

Anyway. Keep going mate, and don`t stop!:D

EDIT: Ahh... You removed the poll. Oh well:-/:p
 

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Just started reading your fanfic. and i must say that i just love it. Esspecialy the first 3 parts:D Since i read all at once i didn`t bother to rate or "Thanks" the first 6 parts, but i will start from this one and onwards:)

From the ones that are nominated this month i personally thinks that your and Pervy Sage`s fanfic are the best Naruto related fanfics around:)
If i hadn`t already voted for Pervy`s before reading yours, i would definitivly voted for yours;):(

The way you detail each scenario and your English skills are quite good(considering that you`re from India).

If i were you, i think i would call the fanfic Itachi`s Akatsuki adventures/Gaiden or something since so far he`s the main character, but the name is still good. Are you going to make many parts? Since you haven`t really started at the "formation part" yet:p

Since i didn`t comment any of your earlier parts, i`m going to let it all out in one go.

Are you going to have Itachi involved in all of the recrutings and are you going to stay true to the story on those part considering that you somewhat made up Deidara`s joining of Akatsuki when we know certain facts about it(We saw how he joined in a flashback during his fight with Sasuke).

And finally. I don`t really see the connection between part 6 and 7. Any reasons why or are you planning to do it this way onwards?

Anyway. Keep going mate, and don`t stop!:D

EDIT: Ahh... You removed the poll. Oh well:-/:p
first of all a great thanks to guys like u so that we have the encouragement to post the next one...........and thanks again for ur comment on my language..............and ya about the part 6 and part 7 ,i wanted it to be different......... and i used itachi most because i thought that he is the most important member of akatsuki after pein and madara...........so i used him against kisame too just to brief the difference between their powers............and about the poll....really sorry i forget to add a poll......but from next one i will definitely add one.............anyway thanks again for commenting ........
 

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Just a hint. Maybe you should post part 8 here so that more peoples get notified that it has been released;)

I personally use to check the writer`s last part to see if he have posted/released a new part there;)
 
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