The Forgotten Tale: A Link Through Time I

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Chapter 1;
A New Beginning:


For as long as time remember, there has always been war...

Although different periods of time has brought different eras of peace,
An underlying cause for hatred has always been there lurking in the shadows,
Always present, always abiding its time to spring forth once again to disturb the hard-fought peace...
This tale is that of the forgotten, in a distant place far, far away.

This is how it all began, 7000 years ago...
When a defining change was just about to happen,
A different course, in a different place than what we eventually has come to know as the "Earth."
A change that would make two worlds collide, the starting point for a new beginning...

This is the tale of Jedi Master Revan
And how he came to be known as the Hero of Time,
The first wielder of the Master Sword.
This is how it all began, a long time ago...

In a Galaxy, far, far away.


"Are you sure about this Master??"

His voice was clear, determined, but the young man, the young apprentice, had a reason to be concerned, to be doubtful. This was after all, the one moment the two of them had been waiting for, and everything depended on the two of them being able to seize it.

"Positive... You have nothing to worry about, Revan..."

His Master was right, but this moment, this mission was too important to take easily, too decisive not to take serious. He was nervous, for the first time in ages, but he just could not let the fear consume him. He had to remember his training, this was what he had been preparing for, his whole life. This was the chance to end it, once and for all.

"We're here. Now, let me do the talking if necessary, and we should be fine. Just remember Revan, never let the temptation of the Dark Side consume you, no matter what happens..."

"I won't, Master Marek, I will remember all you have taught me..."

Awaiting their spacecraft's pressure door to unfold out on the hangar they now found themselves located in, Marek proceeded to turn off the engine and unbuckle his seat-belt. It was time and he knew it. They had finally arrived at the destination after only one hour's travel. Orbiting some place just outside a large green planet, the spaceship they now had docked in, was dark and mighty indeed as the last rays of the sun shone upon it, before sneaking itself from beyond view behind the planet in front of them. Walking out of the spacecraft, the two Jedi were met by a peculiar robot offering its service, asking them kindly to follow its way. Revan was still only in his early 20s, while his Master, both more wise in age and experience, had already hit his 40s... They both had two long light-brown robes on them, with hoods hanging down their backs. Both light in skin-tone, both with brown hair. Marek with a longer hair-style, while Revan had his hair trimmed down to a minimum, with a small ponytail tied up, coming out from the back of his head. Marek had brown eyes, Revan had green, Revan was clean-shaved, while Marek had a trimmed-down beard to accompany his facial structure. Following the robot down a hall, the two of them then entered a room with dimmed-down lights and a fountain, of all things, in the middle of it.

"We are here, please enter inside and await further instructions..."

Doing as told, the two of them turned around to face the robot, enfolding their hands beneath their robes as they did. A silent mood filled the air, as the robot left the room, leaving the door shut gently behind him.

"Well that was easy."

"We haven't even started yet young apprentice. Come, let's get to business."

Drawing their lightsabers, a buzzing sound was heard as the two Jedi were ready to begin their mission. Revan with a green lightsaber, and Marek with a blue.

"Are you ready??"

"Yes, let's do this..."

Stabbing their sabers through the door, they then began to work their way through. A little while later, the two of them were heading down another hall as Marek could feel that they were getting closer and closer, and not long after, they finally found themselves in the cockpit-room where a man with a dark long robe and a hood over his head, stood...

"So you have finally arrived... Leave us."

Waving the armed men in the room off, the dark-hooded man then turned around as his dark red eyes came to view.

"So this is Darth Demise, the Dark Lord of the Sith, I presume??"

"You are right in your claim young one, however..."

Drawing his red lightsaber as well, the man had a vicious smile on his face.

"Neither one of you will live long to remember it!!"

Coming straight for them, the two sides were about to clash.

"Are you certain this is how it happened?? Have you laid out every detail, everything you can remember??"

"I already told you Master Hylia, this is how it all happened!! I tried my best, but it was still not enough, Demise he... He still got away and I just, I-..."

"Okay calm down, I know this must be hard for you..."

Having arrived in a different location entirely, Revan had the face of a man in despair. He had barely managed to escape the spaceship alive, but not without making sure that Demise's escaping spacecraft had a tracker on it first.

"Master Marek, he..."

Sitting down in a chair, Revan clutched his face as another Jedi Master, named Hylia, was walking back and forth in front of him with a concerned look on her face. Having arrived at the Jedi Temple, Revan was quick to lay out the corresponding details of how the mission took place.

"Aaaaaaaaaargh!!"

Shouting out, the Dark Lord swung his sword rapidly as the two Jedi quickly parried to defend themselves. The battle had only just begun, but the two of them immediately realized that this wasn't just any Sith Lord they were dealing with.

"You will die here, just like all the other Jedi will eventually!!"

Coming in even faster, the Sith Lord knocked Revan off his feet causing him to fall backwards as his sword flung through the air, landing several meters away from him. Using the Force, he reacted equally fast to getting back his sword by using a Force Pull as he was knocked to the ground, enabling him to quickly get back up on his feet again just moments later.

"Take this..."

As Revan was distracted, Demise used the opportunity to Slash out at Marek with his sword, and by doing so, the Dark Lord managed to get some space between them as he sent several lightning-bolts out of his finger-tips towards him. Defending himself with his saber, Marek was quick to parry the incoming attack as Revan came flying in from the side, attempting to hit him while he was still open. Not even hesitating for a second, the Dark Lord steered the lightning attack towards him instead as Revan was flung backwards with a mighty electrified push, landing on a platform below their deck.

"So Master Marek was killed in battle... This outcome is very unfortunate..."

"This leaves us with no choice Master... I have to go after him, after Demise, I have to stop him before he can do more harm... We are the last of the Jedi, we-..."

"The Era of Jedi and Sith is coming to an end. The Force is getting weaker, and life today doesn't need us to watch over them any longer, to act as their guardians... However, you are indeed right, young apprentice, Demise must be stopped at all cost..."

"But how? Without Master Marek-..."

"I will have you appointed to Master, just as an apprentice is suppose to become once the time is right..."

"Appoint me to Master??"

"Yes... This will be the last request I will ever ask of you, to end things once and for all and bring on deserving peace to the galaxy. You are now our final hope, Master Revan."

"Yes Master, I will do as you say... Thank you."

Getting up from his chair, Revan seemed confident in what he now had to do. Looking back at her, he knew that everything relied on his success now. Even if the time of the Jedi and Sith was coming to an end, the last Dark Lord of the Sith still had to be dealt with for true peace to ever happen.

"I believe it is time for you to bring out your creation... It seems like Darth Demise is heading to the outer parts of our realms, to a solar system far away from here. A place where neither the Jedi, nor Sith, has any connections. I can only speculate what his intentions are, but that place is far behind us in technology, in time... They won't know who we are. This planet called "Earth," is nothing like we've seen before. If you go there in your quest to hunt down Demise, you might not be able to return again..."

"I understand... I will bring out the my creation and finally put its strength to the test. It should be able to match the lightsabers by now. After all, I've been working on its design for a decade, taking most of my inspirations into making it from the lightsabers themselves, to add to the finishing touches... So this place, "Earth..." My destiny is to go there?? Is this how it will all come to an end, how you have foreseen it??"

"I believe so, yes."

Placing her hand on his shoulder, her will had already been passed on to him.

"Master, nooo!!"

Finally getting back up on the platform above, a terrifying view met him. His Master, impaled upon the Dark Lord's lightsaber, as he slowly pulled it out of him, watching as Marek fell to the ground.

"The end is near and a new dawn of the Sith is on the horizon..."

"I will get you for this!!"

Running over to them, Revan came charging in as the two exchanged a few rounds with each other, as Demise eventually got some space between them. Turning his back on him, he then started walking away from the scene as Revan lifted his Master up in his arms.

"Revan... It is up to you now to finish-... What we-...Started... Don't let-... Anger-... Ever consume-... You."

"Master I will-... I will..."

Becoming one with the Force, his Master was no more. Picking up his Master's lightsaber, Revan quickly left the room to catch up with the Sith Lord. Seeing him boarding a spacecraft, Revan only just managed to throw a tracker on its right wing as it left the hangar before he could do anything else about it.

"Hmmm... Well then, I should get going."

Just about to leave the Jedi Temple, Hylia then grabbed a hold onto his arm.

"Master Revan... May the Force be with you."

"No, May the Force be with you, Master Hylia."

Taking his leave, Revan went to make the necessary preparations. Not long after, he boarded the small spacecraft he had arrived in as Master Hylia saw him off as he proceeded to leave the Jedi Temple. With the planet far behind him in the distance, he was now beyond turning back. This was his mission, his destiny, what he had been chosen to do. He had lost his Master and good friend Marek, so it was all up to him to track down the Sith Lord Demise and bring peace to the galaxy now. He couldn't fail, no matter what happened. Setting the course towards the tracker's signal, Revan then rose from his seat as he went to the very back of the spacecraft where his room were. Once there, he went over to a container of some sort, opening it up by the push of a button as the top-lid slid open. Out from it rose a small platform and on top of it rested a sword, gravitating in the air before him. Its blade had a bright color, its hilt was dark blue. This was Revan's own creation, something he had spent a whole decade on adjusting and finishing.

"I suppose I should give it a name by now..."

Pondering on the question for awhile, he finally made up his mind.

"Ahh, the Goddess Sword, that should be it... The Blade of Evil's Bane. Let's see if you really are a match for the lightsabers after all..."

He was finally ready to test its true powers out in battle, and with it, he was now one step closer to fulfilling his uncanny destiny. Holstering the blade on his back with his green lightsaber still hanging from his left side, Revan then went back to the cockpit as he set his eyes on the transmitting signal's course once more.

"Just where are you going and what is your plan??"

Having finally reached his destination, Demise's spacecraft had landed on a planet on the edge of the outer realms of the galaxy, in a place where no Jedi nor Sith had placed foot in Millenniums. Revan could just not understand what he was looking for there, what he would gain by fleeing so far into unknown territory. He had an unnerving feeling about it all, but he knew he had no other choice than to follow.

"Not far now..."

He thought to himself, as his spacecraft finally entered Hyperspace. Reappearing just outside the mysterious planet's orbit, Revan's eyes enlarged by the magnificent view that met him. The planet seemed so peaceful, so full of life. Like nothing he had ever seen before. Taking a look at the monitor screens once more, he then steered the spacecraft towards the beacon's location. He was close now, and all that remained was to land the spacecraft safely on the ground. As he approached the atmosphere and his spacecraft began to rumble widely due to the force of the planet's gravitational impact, it was then that he noticed; something he should have noticed long ago. Not only was this feeling he had strangely unfamiliar, but his connection to the force felt weak. Much weaker than it ever had before. This was do or die, if he only could land safely now, then the worst parts would hopefully be over.

[...]

The dark clouds carried heavy black rain with them, and they had already gathered themselves on the skies above, just about to let loose on the silent earth resting underneath. The landscape below was filled with nothing more than some steep mountain slopes, a few lonely trees, and a dark lifeless pond. A thunderstorm had also begun roaring and several thunderbolts struck down towards the ground just as the rain began to pour down from the dark clouds above. On the ground, a rumbling wormhole suddenly opened up in the air beside one of the burning trees that had been lit on fire by one of the thunderbolts previously hitting the ground, as a blue-eyed man in his early 30s, suddenly got tossed out on the ground with the hole quickly closing in behind him. He had blond spiky-hair, a green uniform, but more importantly than anything else, he had a determined look on his face. Getting up to his feet, the man looked around, scanning the environment he now found himself stranded in.

"This place... It feels so distant, yet so familiar. Where could this be, or better yet, when?"

Walking a few steps forward as he brushed off the remaining dust on his clothes, the man stopped by the pond of water laying in front of him as he gazed upon his own reflection in its shiny surface.

"Seems like I made it, just like he said huh."

Mumbling some words, the man did not manage to think through the situation properly as the sky above suddenly split open and a large obstacle came crashing down towards the ground just some 100 meters away from him.

"A meteorite?! No, it's definitely something else..."

Hurrying over to the large obstacle in front of him, the man paid close attention as he looked down the crater that had been created by its impact with the earth. As the smoke finally settled, he was just about to take a closer inspection when a small piercing sound could be heard and a door suddenly got busted open from what seemed to be some sort of a spacecraft. Readying his defenses, the man watched as a powerful presence filled the air. The man exiting the large object in front of him wore a long brown robe, covering his identity from the world with a hood dragged over his head. Touching ground as he approached the astonished man witnessing the scene, neither his hair nor his face could be seen from underneath it. Walking all the way up to his face, the mysterious being suddenly halted only a meter away, as only his green eyes could be seen from beneath his hood.

"Is this... Earth??"

Speaking his first words, the mysterious being seemed calm, yet resolute, as the man looked at him with an uneased expression on his face. Gathering his thoughts, he then came up with the only answer he could think of.

"Y-es?? And you are??"

Looking at him, a smile formed on the mysterious being's face as he reached up to his head with both his hands to slowly remove the hood that he was hiding underneath. As he finally revealed his identity to him, the man immediately got the feeling that this was someone he knew he would have to approach with full precaution.

"My name... is Revan, and I am looking for someone."

~ End Chapter 1 ~




Author's Note:

Where to begin?

I'd like to take some time to talk about this project, what I've done in the past, what my future plans are, as well as some other things, so if you are curious, then please read on, if not, then just jump to the final paragraph regarding the release date of the next chapter. Thank you.

This story will be a short one compared to my previous long term work, (which went on for about four long years here on the Base and spawned over 60 chapters divided across four main stories and two chronicles to complete the full package), and will only consist of six short chapters in total. Beside that, I've also written a One-Shot on here called , and the reason to why I'm mentioning this is that even though all of these stories are separate by nature, they all exist within one singular Timeline/Universe, being connected to each other over a course of 7000 years. Now, it's not necessary to have read any of my previous works to understand the story taking place in A Link Through Time, as in a matter of fact, it is written in a way to ensure that any and all newcomers will grasp the entirety of it, and truth been told, at this stage, newcomers are really all that matters to me (except for a few faithful ones lurking around here somewhere). Even if this is the case, if you want to grasp the full story of this Timeline/Universe and how everything is connected to each other, you would have had to read all of the stories taking place within it, but like I said, the overall story doesn't really matter as much at this stage, so about 99 per cent of this story should be read-able to anyone with a little hint towards the rest of the Timeline being thrown in at the end (for those remaining faithful ones of mine). And yes, I hope to get as many as I can for this ride, as in the end, it will be one of the last things I release on here. Hope you'll enjoy if you decide to give this short tale a try and that this first chapter of it was enough to give you a taste for more.

As for the next release, well... Chapter 2-5 is already done for this story, as only one chapter remains to be written. However, I won't be releasing them all at once though, as I need to take my time carefully planning the other stories I'm working on to ensure that the gap between each release won't be too far apart. I've already started working on two other projects of mine, The Legendary Sage of Six Paths (some of you should be quite familiar with this idea as I've mentioned it a few times up though the years) & Recollection of the Past (unknown to most if not all of you), both to be released very soon as well, and also, I'm working on a collaboration fic that I'll be doing together with Germanicus later this year when we get the time to do it, but as of now, it's on hold at least until December. Then beside all this, there's Three Kingdoms that I've shelved the 1st chapter of ever since 2011 now, and that I'm not really sure what I'll be doing with at the Base just yet. As I mentioned in my "retirement post" not long ago, I might end up taking that project elsewhere or be putting a lid on it for good. So anyways, to sum things up... Beside this story, I got two other projects and a collaboration work coming up that is more or less certain, as well as another one that I don't know what to do with just yet. For those who read the final chapter of TLSoK, you might be wondering what ever happened to the story I was going to write about the 3rd Wielder Aragon. Well truth been told, I decided to take a different course, and that is where Recollection of the Past comes in, as it will be sort of like a, well, recollection of all the stories taking place in this timeline (at least the wielders of the Master Sword).

Chapter 2 & 3 of A Link Through Time will be released later this month when I get back home again (by the end of October around the 25th), and I'll notify everyone who's kind enough to give this first chapter a read (and a comment!). Until then.

 
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So what did you think more specifically about it? Any aspects you liked/didn't like? What intrigued you to keep reading the whole of it? Let me know more details man =p
I like the crossover aspect of it. Zelda and star wars are two of my favorite things.

I disliked the transition from the fight to talking with Hylia without a warning. Kind of confused me a bit. Other then that it was pretty good.
 

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I like the crossover aspect of it. Zelda and star wars are two of my favorite things.

I disliked the transition from the fight to talking with Hylia without a warning. Kind of confused me a bit. Other then that it was pretty good.
Thanks. Well truth been told, it's not really a Star Wars x Zelda type of deal. I already wrote a TLoZ One-Shot, and being that it's in the same universe/timeline, it's really just part of a bigger plot. And the Key to it all is the Master Sword (which appears in all of my projects on here). Plus, this is about as "Star Wars" as it gets, as the rest of the chapters centers themselves more towards another element. It will all become clear later, or for some of my old readers, I suppose it is already clear, huh, hah... If you see Danivass, Trea or Faha commenting here, be advised of potential spoilers, lmao.

I see... Well I've been experimenting a lot with this in the past, using [...] to split up scenes and such, however, with this story I decided to go with a new twist, one of them being the way I write (less dialogues, more narrative), and thus, I tried to make it as fluently as I possibly could, make it feel like you were going in and out of two scenes (a technique used lot in movies, but perhaps not that much in writing). In either case, this was the first and only time throughout this short tale that I had to pull of such a thing, so I haven't had much time to practice it. I guess you understood what was taking place though? That is properly the most important thing.
 

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I liked it. I'm not used to such short chapters from you. This must be your shortest chapter ever. I love Star Wars, Legend of Zelda and Naruto so I'll be back for the rest of it. I noticed from another comment you said this is as Star Wars as it gets and that's fine.

I like the new style even though it seems to have confused someone else. A break from dialogue is good once in a while. It might be tough on people who don't do much reading, but I love to read so it didn't bother me. I would think that most of the people who come to the fan fiction section don't mind reading, since many of them write too.

I almost did put a spoiler in here but I don't want to ruin it for everyone else. I do realize who came up out of the ground though.
 

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This was pretty good Mic. Being a fan of Star Wars and legend of zelda, I found it fun, and I thought that the battle between Revan, Marek, and Demise was executed fairly well.

I do agree with the point that those transitions were rough. I did a double take the first time you moved forward in the battle to make sure I didn't accidentally skip something. I honestly feel it would have been better to let the fight play all the way out, and then make a clear translation afterwards to the scene with Revan and Hylia. I definitely get style experimentation, and kudos for trying to go outside the box on this, but maybe play with this kind of style of flashback and scene switching a bit more, as right now it doesn't work super well.

You do a good job with narration for someone who focused on script in the past. You did a good job adequately describing everything without getting too caught up in rambling about the details. (Something that's probably my own biggest weakness in writing. Xp )I would definitely call your narration style a successful forray into that perspective of writing.

Ther were some spelling, grammar, and punctuation problems, but nothing that was too distracting. They didnt take away from my enjoyment of the chapter, so I think you're fine there.

Well, first look at least, those are my two bits. I like it, Mic, and can't wait to see where it goes. Thanks for telling me about it bro! Keep it up.
 

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I liked it. I'm not used to such short chapters from you. This must be your shortest chapter ever. I love Star Wars, Legend of Zelda and Naruto so I'll be back for the rest of it. I noticed from another comment you said this is as Star Wars as it gets and that's fine.

I like the new style even though it seems to have confused someone else. A break from dialogue is good once in a while. It might be tough on people who don't do much reading, but I love to read so it didn't bother me. I would think that most of the people who come to the fan fiction section don't mind reading, since many of them write too.

I almost did put a spoiler in here but I don't want to ruin it for everyone else. I do realize who came up out of the ground though.
Not ever, but indeed one of my shortest yes. Personally, it feels kind of relieving to be able to write shorter chapters like this. Makes them not only easier to release, but more approachable for newcomers to read as well. I also said a few things regarding length in my VM to you, so be sure to take that into consideration as well when reading this ;)
Glad you liked it Trea ^^ Always good hearing from you on my writing as I know you can be honest and that you in fact like what I have to offer, hehe =p As for different elements from different franchises, I already mentioned the Zelda bit with the Master Sword taking the center of the stage in this Timeline to the review above you, so it can't really be avoided. Nor for this story or the other ones I'm writing. Besides, I always thought the idea of the Master Sword facing a lightsaber sounded cool after seeing a fan art of it once. I always wanted to do a star wars fic though, but I never truly expected it to have this little elements from it incorporated into the story (you will see what I mean by the end of it).
As for Naruto, well, you already know the answer to that I presume, haha ;)

There are more or less several different aspects of "style" at play in this new tale of mine (this is going to be a long post huh xD). You have the less dialogue more narrative style. The actual change of how the story itself is written (no more script aspects like "flashback begins," no use of names to show who's talking, etc). So yeah like you said in your VM to me, this is kind of different from what I've used to write, but the matter of fact is that this is truly only one of many changes. The Legendary Sage of Six Paths will be in 1st person, and if possible, all dialogues will be handled through the narrator telling the story (the Sage himself - similar to an autobiography).

This is why I love your reviews as they always aspires me to make long replies, haha =) Glad you liked the first chapter though as the overall feel to the rest of the story will be quite different as it progresses towards its end.
And yeah, he will indeed play a part. I'm kind of excited to see how you will react with the "change" I've made to him. If you really want to talk about what to come, then just ask me through VM or just put a spoiler tag on it with a proper warning ;)

This was pretty good Mic. Being a fan of Star Wars and legend of zelda, I found it fun, and I thought that the battle between Revan, Marek, and Demise was executed fairly well.

I do agree with the point that those transitions were rough. I did a double take the first time you moved forward in the battle to make sure I didn't accidentally skip something. I honestly feel it would have been better to let the fight play all the way out, and then make a clear translation afterwards to the scene with Revan and Hylia. I definitely get style experimentation, and kudos for trying to go outside the box on this, but maybe play with this kind of style of flashback and scene switching a bit more, as right now it doesn't work super well.

You do a good job with narration for someone who focused on script in the past. You did a good job adequately describing everything without getting too caught up in rambling about the details. (Something that's probably my own biggest weakness in writing. Xp )I would definitely call your narration style a successful forray into that perspective of writing.

Ther were some spelling, grammar, and punctuation problems, but nothing that was too distracting. They didnt take away from my enjoyment of the chapter, so I think you're fine there.

Well, first look at least, those are my two bits. I like it, Mic, and can't wait to see where it goes. Thanks for telling me about it bro! Keep it up.
Good to hear mate (and I hope you are being truly honest with me,haha)!
Indeed. This part was perhaps the one I had to put most work into, and it's not the first time either (albeit the times I tried something similar in the first chapters of my 1st sequel to TLSoK, Returns, I relied heavily on script - elements to make it work and some people still found it a bit tricky back then). The main reason to why I did it like this was to sort of be able to "extend" the battle without adding more fighting to it, and this was perhaps one of the few ways I could make it work to make it feel longer. I agree though, I wasn't super fan of that aspect of this chapter either, but then again, I felt it was one of the new fresh things I had to test out. Sort of like a hit or fail.

The thing about script style is that there are so many variations of it, especially here on the Base. Kuroi for example is one who write as much script as you possible can. Me on the other hand quickly eased down on it after my first work and tried to grasp narration as best as I could from there on out, even though driving the story forward with dialogue has always been one of my strong points. That is why this projects will be sort of like a link in between the two styles, the closest I've ever got to the description of narration style anyways. To put it like this, Kuroi has always relied on the script style and I've tried to make that style my own. Escorpiius on the other hand, has been sort of in between the two of us in a sense regarding it. Another thing to be pointed out is that script style was basically all there was back in the days before you guys arrived, including Toc, yourself, Uzu, CW, Netsui, and so forth. Good to hear from you that my current style of writing is familiar enough. Especially consideration we have a full narration/book collaboration project coming up in December. I still have some time and ideas to test out different styles until then.
Well truth been told, this is the most "straight forward" story I've ever written, completely in contrast to the hang around talking type of deal I've pushed quite often in the past. I feel like it has to be this way considering that it's a rather short story (and I'm definitely not just talking by my standards this time around).

Great ^^ At least coming from the guy with the most perfect English writing on the Base, haha. I guess some notes will always be there to be mentioned until I either move to England or start writing in my own language. Still though, the change I've had in the last four years is kind of drastic I must say.

Hopefully you'll not only hang around until the end, but also get to (still the plan I presume??) release that short project of your own soon. Thanks for reading Bro.

i am a star wars fan i may not be to into zelda but this was a nice chapter i liked it i say you did a great job as always, when you release the next chapter send me the link Mic :)
The only Zelda aspect is really the sword, but it's not something you will notice unless you are familiar with the franchise. That's the good part of it, making it more readable than it would with more heavily influenced aspects from that Series. As for star wars, I suppose only the Force and the lightsabers will be mentioned in the upcoming chapters, so the overall feel to this story should in the end feel like a mix of many or something entirely new and different to what you may come to expect ;)
I'll do that!

Thanks for reading and thanks for the review you guys, appreciate it a lot! ;D
 

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Finallu read it. Stars Wars meets someone other story I haven't heard of. Never read a Star Wars fic. This seems fun. Darth Demise....Revan's coming for you. The battle transitions were weird though....as Germ mentioned. Sorry my review is lackluster haha...Will keep reading as I find time.
 
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Finallu read it. Stars Wars meets someone other story I haven't heard of. Never read a Star Wars fic. This seems fun. Darth Demise....Revan's coming for you. The battle transitions were weird though....as Germ mentioned. Sorry my review is lackluster haha...Will keep reading as I find time.
A short review is always better than none at all! Besides, this was a short chapter as well so I hadn't really expected much other wise. Seems like you held up your end of the bargin O__o Means that I got some reading to do as soon as I have the proper equipment to do so ;)

As for the review itself, there aren't a lot of these fics coming in, but in fact this whole tale is like 25 % star wars, 25 % TLoZ (you've never heard of Zelda you said?! @__@), 25 % Naruto (you will see later on if you decide to check the upcoming chapters out) & 25% original. A fine mix for this short tale I must say.

I guess the biggest question in play regarding this story will be the actual quality of it. Personally I like what it has to offer, but in the end, it really is some major steps down from my Series Finale of TLSoK.
The plus side is that it should be engaging enough to keep things interested. That and the fact that I can rely less on old readers for this project. Another thing to be noted is that this chapter together with the last two, are probably as serious as it gets as well (this is more of an adventure comedic tale than it is death, action and sorrow).
 

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A short review is always better than none at all! Besides, this was a short chapter as well so I hadn't really expected much other wise. Seems like you held up your end of the bargin O__o Means that I got some reading to do as soon as I have the proper equipment to do so ;)

As for the review itself, there aren't a lot of these fics coming in, but in fact this whole tale is like 25 % star wars, 25 % TLoZ (you've never heard of Zelda you said?! @__@), 25 % Naruto (you will see later on if you decide to check the upcoming chapters out) & 25% original. A fine mix for this short tale I must say.

I guess the biggest question in play regarding this story will be the actual quality of it. Personally I like what it has to offer, but in the end, it really is some major steps down from my Series Finale of TLSoK.
The plus side is that it should be engaging enough to keep things interested. That and the fact that I can rely less on old readers for this project. Another thing to be noted is that this chapter together with the last two, are probably as serious as it gets as well (this is more of an adventure comedic tale than it is death, action and sorrow).
That is one heck of a mix. Sounds interesting. Will probaly follow it up as I dont usually like abandoning stories I read midway(for stories I wrte, its a different matter haha). It is always exciting to start a new series. It also acts like a test to see if you can draw in new readers so it shows your writing prowess best. Keep me posted.....and don't foget to pay the piper lol
 

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That is one heck of a mix. Sounds interesting. Will probaly follow it up as I dont usually like abandoning stories I read midway(for stories I wrte, its a different matter haha). It is always exciting to start a new series. It also acts like a test to see if you can draw in new readers so it shows your writing prowess best. Keep me posted.....and don't foget to pay the piper lol
Haha, great =D And yeah, but the cool thing is that it doesn't feel like such a mix at all. I guess the reason to that is even though there are pre-established characters and names taken from other places, they all kind of feel like original characters at this stage, especially the ones portrayed in this chapter (originals based on known names within the different universes the story takes elements from), so I guess I just don't think of it that way anymore. After all, the term fan fic is quite vague at this stage I suppose, if you get what I'm rambling about xD

It's usually the other way around for me (still got my 100 % track record. As for the stories I do read, it's often the author who quits before I do, lmao).

I will ;)
Pay the piper?? Sorry for my indulgence, but that expression is new to me xD
 

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Haha, great =D And yeah, but the cool thing is that it doesn't feel like such a mix at all. I guess the reason to that is even though there are pre-established characters and names taken from other places, they all kind of feel like original characters at this stage, especially the ones portrayed in this chapter (originals based on known names within the different universes the story takes elements from), so I guess I just don't think of it that way anymore. After all, the term fan fic is quite vague at this stage I suppose, if you get what I'm rambling about xD

It's usually the other way around for me (still got my 100 % track record. As for the stories I do read, it's often the author who quits before I do, lmao).

I will ;)
Pay the piper?? Sorry for my indulgence, but that expression is new to me xD
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I dont expect its a story on space. It was long but great story like your other stories :)
Well techniqually, it's not really a story in space. Rather, the story just begins there (mainly due to the fact that it draws inspiration from Star Wars among others). You found this to be long?? O__o I don't really think there is possible to write a shorter chapter than this. In all honesty, it wouldn't be much of a chapter then, at least not one deserving credits or attention if you ask me. Glad you found it interesting enough to read through though, as in the end, that's what matters the most. Well, sort of... Thanks for giving it a read ^^
 

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I cannot remember if you ever said this ff was going to be about Revan or if it’s just my bad memory but I’m already liking this story and even more so that you incorporated Star Wars elements! =D I appreciated the character details as it’s always nice to have a picture of what and who you’re reading about ;) I thought the two Jedi warriors were going to await for what followed next but apparently they have an infiltration mission. When the enemy dismissed his henchmen and took on his two opponents, he either is underestimating them or he is one powerful adversary! So the master falls like the others-I kind of had a feeling this might happen and Revan is abruptly appointed master, interesting. Demise surely belittled Revan as he departed without even attempting to finish him off. So Revan is also a mechanic-nice :) I had forgotten of course so there was no way I would’ve seen that ending lol However, I thought that was a fitting and very intriguing way to end this first chapter. This chapter wasn’t as long as usual-like you had stated before and it was a pleasant read =D I so look forward to see what lies ahead for the Jedi Revan! ^^ Also with the release of this ff, the whole of the Legendary Sage of Konoha is more and more becoming full circle :)

About your author’s note:

Thanks for the insight on the total amount of chapters for this story and the news about Aragon’s backstory. That ff sounds really interesting and whenever you do decide to release that, I think I should be up to date with every other story of yours ;)
 
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I cannot remember if you ever said this ff was going to be about Revan or if it’s just my bad memory but I’m already liking this story and even more so that you incorporated Star Wars elements! =D I appreciated the character details as it’s always nice to have a picture of what and who you’re reading about ;) I thought the two Jedi warriors were going to await for what followed next but apparently they have an infiltration mission. When the enemy dismissed his henchmen and took on his two opponents, he either is underestimating them or he is one powerful adversary! So the master falls like the others-I kind of had a feeling this might happen and Revan is abruptly appointed master, interesting. Demise surely belittled Revan as he departed without even attempting to finish him off. So Revan is also a mechanic-nice :) I had forgotten of course so there was no way I would’ve seen that ending lol However, I thought that was a fitting and very intriguing way to end this first chapter. This chapter wasn’t as long as usual-like you had stated before and it was a pleasant read =D I so look forward to see what lies ahead for the Jedi Revan! ^^ Also with the release of this ff, the whole of the Legendary Sage of Konoha is more and more becoming full circle :)

About your author’s note:

Thanks for the insight on the total amount of chapters for this story and the news about Aragon’s backstory. That ff sounds really interesting and whenever you do decide to release that, I think I should be up to date with every other story of yours ;)
Yeah, I think I mentioned in the comments section on my Series Finale, it was also highly hinted at due to the fact that Revan was the only wielder not to make an appearance there. Also, Naruto's future-self told Naruto that they would meet soon enough. And then, Naruto travels to the past. So if you've read more than just The Forgotten Tale from me, you would probably be able to tie in the links together more easily for sure.

Forgotten?? xD You practically read that preview at the end of the final part of my Series Finale right before coming here, haha. But I suppose you are referring to the fact that you had forgotten that it took place in this series rather than the whole scene all together, right? ;)

There's in fact a preview for the Recollection of the Past at the end of this Series, but so far, no one has commented properly on it I think, haha xP

I'll be looking forward to hearing what you have to say on the other chapters as well bro ;)
 

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Yeah, I think I mentioned in the comments section on my Series Finale, it was also highly hinted at due to the fact that Revan was the only wielder not to make an appearance there. Also, Naruto's future-self told Naruto that they would meet soon enough. And then, Naruto travels to the past. So if you've read more than just The Forgotten Tale from me, you would probably be able to tie in the links together more easily for sure.

Forgotten?? xD You practically read that preview at the end of the final part of my Series Finale right before coming here, haha. But I suppose you are referring to the fact that you had forgotten that it took place in this series rather than the whole scene all together, right? ;)

There's in fact a preview for the Recollection of the Past at the end of this Series, but so far, no one has commented properly on it I think, haha xP

I'll be looking forward to hearing what you have to say on the other chapters as well bro ;)
It’s my bad, my mind i sooooooo gone lol

Yeah, I had remembered Naruto and Revan’s first encounter scene just not that it would take place in this story.

I’m glad I more or less made a comment about Aragon for the last chapter =D
 
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