The Final Fight Chapter 4

[Uxellius]

:scorps: great work I must admitxd
just fix the grammar a bit :y

 

[Takeshi Uzumaki]

:scorps: great work I must admitxd
just fix the grammar a bit :y

Thanks..I will admit I do rush sometimes and don't revise my work enough..I'm doing all of this on my phone as well

 

[neilson]

Oh?...i see what you mean. It sounds cool but its a fan fic so you have to detail everything, i just wanted to hear people thoughts

 

[Michael92]

Your English is good, your structure seem a bit messy at times. Also the sentences seems a bit "jumpy" from time to time, and you have forgotten some capital letters and such here and there. Still the story is interesting (from what I read, as I only read bits of this chapter), and the interaction between the characters are good. Keep it up