[Adventure] The Crow and The Flickerer Chapt 1:Mission!

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Oi Oi!
Welcome to my next Fanfiction!
I have been experimenting for a while of what could possibly become a series of Likeable Fanfictions!
This is also a Test,Circling around shisui and Itachi Of The Uchiha Clan!
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Hiruzen:"Enter,Shisui and itachi"
[Both]:"Yes Hokage Sama"
Shisui and Itachi enter the Room.
Hiruzen:"You did wel on your past mission!My apologies but you are needed again.
A Ninja has Stolen Secret Scrolls of the Second Hokage!The trail ends near the Border of Sunagakure and Konohagakure"

Shisui:"Hokage-sama,Do you have any idea Who it might be?"
Hiruzen:"I am Not Sure...But Whoever did this had killed all the guards,Consider this an S-Rank Mission!"
[Both]:"Yes Hokage Sama"
Hiruzen:"Good Luck!"
Itachi and Shisui Leave the room
Hiruzen:"Damnit...Orochimaru...!"
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Itachi:"Shisui,Do you have all your Gear?I have a feeling that we are going to need it..." Shisui:"I could ask the same...Let's get Going!"
itachi And Shisui Run Trough the Forest.
Itachi:"I Hope hes not too Far away yet...Lets speed up!Sharingan!"
Shisui And Itachi activate Sharingan,Increasing their Speed.
Later in the evening.
Shisui:"Hey...Itachi i sense him!Hes Not Far from here,120 Meters away from us he-"
Shisui is cut off by itachi
Itachi:"I Know...His Chakra...its Orochimaru!"
Shisui:"Damn...A Sannin..."
Itachi:"We Have to Get the Scrolls...At all Costs!"
Shisui:"I Know...Shunshin no Jutsu!"
Shisui Swiftly Teleports forwards.
Shisui:"Itachi,Take his Front,I Will go From behind,We Can Corner him!"
Itachi nods.
Shisui Then Dissapears.
As he Sees Orochimaru trough the Tree's He Notices that orochimaru is faced his Way,Knowing that He was Coming.
Itachi:"Orochimaru..."
Orochimaru:kekekeke....An Uchiha...With an Expanded sharingan!How interresting...I Wonder if you reached that level yet...You may be a worthful Prize!
As orochimaru Said that.
Shisui appeared Right behind him.
His Sword already in hand,He Does a Vertical Slash.
Orochimaru Swiftly Turns around and Grabs a Kunai.
[SFX]: KLANG
Shisui Gives a barrage of Horizontal and Vertical Sword Slashes.
Orochimaru clashes against them with his kunai.
Sparks Flying around the Area.
Itachi:"Katon:Gōkakyū no Jutsu!!!"
A Massive FireBall Appears.
As Orochimaru Gives a Kick,Sending Shisui a meter away,Who lands back on his feet.
Shisui:"Katon: Hōsenka no Jutsu!!!"
As Multiple Small Fireballs in a rapid Fire Fly Towards Orochimaru.
With Shuriken Hidded inside them.
Shisui then Throws 2 Kunai With Paper Bombs attached to them.
Orochimaru Turns into a Large Snake and Quickly Slithers To The Side.
Dodging the Incoming attacks.
Shisui:"Itachi,You got the Best Precision,I will go hand To Hand Combat with him,You Throw Kunai at him while i am Busy!
Itachi Nods Yes again.
Shisui Grabs His Sword and Dashes Forwards.
He Forms the Tiger Seal with his Left hand While he Attacks Orochimaru with his right hand.
Sword against Kunai.
Suddenly an Amount of Fire Appears around his Sword.
Breaking the Kunai.
[SFX]KLANKTS
Without Giving orochimaru Any Time,He Swiftly Slashes At Orochimaru's Right Arm,making a deep Cut.
Itachi Then Throws an Explosive attached Kunai To Orochimaru's Chest.
As it Pierces in him,Shisui Jumps backwards.
Orochimaru:"!!!"
As the Explosion Comes Itachi Jumps Beside Shisui.
orochimaru Stands,With Snakes Regenerating him.
Orochimaru:"You are...Skilled!One of the Most skilled Ninja i ever Fought before!"
Shisui:Itachi...Stand Back,I am Going all out,Hes an Sannin after all...
Shisui activates his Mangekyo Sharingan.
Orochimaru:"Oh...The Legendary eye...I have to Go all out now..."
As Shisui Dashes Towards Orochimaru Who Does the Same,A Green Aura Forms around him.

Next Time!:The Green Susanoo VS The White Snake!?!?
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Hope you liked it!
Please give me feedback!
 

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I'm not gonna lie to you: nice effort but there's much to improve.

You have to pay more attention to grammar and punctuation, typos...etc.

A more detailed storyline would be appreciated as well.

Also, Itachi alone easily defeated Orochimaru with a genjutsu, so this fight you put up is not really exciting.

This is just my opinion though. Keep writing, but try to improve.
 
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