The 12 Sword Collection: Part 2 Of The Begining Chapter

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"setting: on hiroshis roof*
"time: night"




woman: we blew it...

man: no there's still another way....there has to be.

*she places her hand on her chin thinking*

woman: hmm well ther is one way...but its way too risky.

*the man grabs the woman by her shoulders*

man: Tell Me!

*the woman smacks his hands away*

woman: fine, just calm down!

*the man relaxes*


woman: okay now i thi- *she pauses*

man: whats wrong?

woman: did you...did you feel that?

man: feel what?

woman: Stop talking and focus on the energy around you.

*the man closes his eyes trying to focus*

man: yeah, the pattern in the energy here has changed, what does that mean?

woman: I'm not sure, but it cant be good

man: i have a pretty good feeling of what its about, and if I'm right then we have less time then we thought! if you have any idea of how to kill the demon then you need to tell me now.

woman
: *trying to hurry* okay! he's still a sleep, which means that you should be able too enter his body and fight the demon, but there's a catch.


man: what is it?

woman: since your dead that means you can't take the life of another, in other words you can enter hiroshis body and weaken the demon but Hiroshi has to land the final blow.

man: what happens if i try too anyway?

woman: then your attack would just pass right through the demon.

man: well okay then, lets do it.

woman: hold on

*the woman takes out a small piece of paper a brush and a cap of ink*
*she dips the brush in the ink and writes a symbol on it and puts the paper on the center of the mans back*


man: what the heck is that supposed to d-

*the symbol glows and the man instantly passes strait through the roof and enters hiroshis body*

*(for now the character named "man" will be Hiroshi)*

*hiroshi opens his eyes*

*the woman passes through the roof and walks to the foot of hiroshis bed*

woman: so, how do you feel? *she smiles at him*

hiroshi: WOULD IT HAVE KILLED YOU TO GIVE ME A WARNING!?!?!

woman: sorry, but I'm already dead thank you very much.

hiroshi: hmph, well i guess I don't have time to complain.
*he gets off of the bed*


hiroshi: i guess we should get going

*he starts walking and walks into a wall causing him to bump his head*


woman: your alive remember? looks like your going to have to use the window. *she points to a window to the left of hiroshi*

*she passes through a wall and is standing out side*


woman: *she floats up to the window* are you coming or not?

hiroshi: yeah yeah *he opens the windows and climbs out he then jumps to the ground and lands*

"setting: walking in a forest on a trail"
"time: sun rise 6:30 am"


hiroshi: this is taking forever



woman: were getting close, as long as we keep focusing on the energy then we'll get there.

hiroshi: did you just feel that?


woman: yes it seems we've just passed through a barrier

*30min pass as there walking*


*they stop walking and they see a place on the ground 20ft away that is cracking and has light shining out of the cracks *


hiroshi: that's where i buried my sword

woman: looks like we made it in time *she begins writing a symbol on another piece of paper*

hiroshi: what are you doing?

woman: you've still got your abilities but you don't have your sword.

hiroshi: well ill dig it up!

woman: you sealed the demon in the sword of Pisces and when the demon breaks from the seal the sword will be destroyed.

hiroshi: oh yeah that's right...


*she presses the paper to the ground and a sword starts to rise up from the ground in the place her hand is*


*the sword fully rises and she grabs it and hands it to hiroshi*

woman: here

*he grabs the sword with his right hand*

hiroshi: what kind of sword is this?


woman: this is my sword, the sword of Aries.

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END OF PART 2


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thanks for reading

tell me what you think and if you have any suggestions.

if i like the suggestions then ill even go as far as rewriting this chapter


*ps:i know its probably annoying but the man and woman's name will be told in the next chapter*
 
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-_- you're more popular than me.

but aside from that, it was a great chapter; keep going! i just wish people would read my fanfic's :T_T:
I'm popular?

but thanks for inspiring me to create fan fics
tbh the reason i made the 12 sword collection is because takashi tetsuya is something that you have to read from the first chapter and up to know whats going on *complex story line*. so i decided too make a ff that's easier to read :D




mainly for upcoming competitions


btw your ff is great and i look forward too reading them
 
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hey man i havent been on in a while so i just got caught up with reading tetsuya

and i see that you've created a new fan fic which is great, i hope to read more of your ff''s, keep them coming!
 

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-_- you're more popular than me.

but aside from that, it was a great chapter; keep going! i just wish people would read my fanfic's :T_T:
as it would seem you inspired him, so that right there counts for something alone, beside i seen a few chapters of your ff and it was pretty good
 

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I'm popular?

but thanks for inspiring me to create fan fics
tbh the reason i made the 12 sword collection is because takashi tetsuya is something that you have to read from the first chapter and up to know whats going on *complex story line*. so i decided too make a ff that's easier to read :D




mainly for upcoming competitions


btw your ff is great and i look forward too reading them

Q: im popular?

A: as it would seem
 

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I don't sound to be mean but uhm, there seems to be quite a little confusion on your part about the usage of "your"and "you're" aside from the "to" and "too: that I mentioned in the previous chapter... When you seem to be pointing out something about a person, use "you're" (that's actually "you are") like on this: since your dead that means [should be Since you're dead...].."Your" denotes ownership. Something like this: Then your attack would just [This was used correctly]...Now, I'm not a master of the English grammar, thoughxd. And I know I have flaws, too. I was just trying to share something out from a pea-like knowledge that I have about the matterxd:D

As far as the chapter is going, it kinda reminded me of Rukia and Ichigo.:D Well, I'd be reading through this story as I like it in general. I could not promise to give out a comment for each and every chapter though. Giving out one for each chapter takes time and is just a hindrance to the momentum. But as soon as I am able to catch up with your most recent chap, then, I'll announce my presence and give out a comment.
 
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I don't sound to be mean but uhm, there seems to be quite a little confusion on your part about the usage of "your"and "you're" aside from the "to" and "too: that I mentioned in the previous chapter... When you seem to be pointing out something about a person, use "you're" (that's actually "you are") like on this: since your dead that means [should be Since you're dead...].."Your" denotes ownership. Something like this: Then your attack would just [This was used correctly]...Now, I'm not a master of the English grammar, thoughxd. And I know I have flaws, too. I was just trying to share something out from a pea-like knowledge that I have about the matterxd:D

As far as the chapter is going, it kinda reminded me of Rukia and Ichigo.:D Well, I'd be reading through this story as I like it in general. I could not promise to give out a comment for each and every chapter though. Giving out one for each chapter takes time and is just a hindrance to the momentum. But as soon as I am able to catch up with your most recent chap, then, I'll announce my presence and give out a comment.
yeah I usually don't have a lot of free time in fact I haven't had enough time to write new chapters for this FF in a week or two.
since I don't have a lot of free time my chapters sometimes get rushed which is why I'm looking for a beta reader to go through the chapters and spell/grammar check them and I am willing to pay 100 kumi per chapter.
 

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yeah I usually don't have a lot of free time in fact I haven't had enough time to write new chapters for this FF in a week or two.
since I don't have a lot of free time my chapters sometimes get rushed which is why I'm looking for a beta reader to go through the chapters and spell/grammar check them and I am willing to pay 100 kumi per chapter.
personally, i love your stuff, and i can be pretty good with grammar and spelling (more grammar than spelling). i'd be happy to do it for free.

Haha, I guess you already got yourself an employee! And one who writes good stories, too! Nice!:D
 
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