I made his plotline awhile ago and wondered if anyone thinks it is good hope this isnt against some kinda rule?? im new to the forums!
(FUN FACT: In the first one shot of naruto there is a minor character named takeshi! I just found out lol
Takeshi and Kotsuro
kotsuro is the older bro that dies and kotsuro in japenese means victorious warrior which is ironic
and then takeshi means fierce warrior
basically heres where the story is going in a nutshell
story starts with takeshi the younger brother narrates his childhood i do not come out and say how old takeshi is now that he is relooking his life but i give a hint that actually goes all the way to the end of the series and will not be revealed until then i say well takeshi says
"I seem to be remembering things now that I forgot decades ago"
and the series actually ends when kotsuro is deceased for many years and takeshi is kind of old not sure exactly yet its a long ways away until i even write it anyway kotsuro comes down from the heavens on a golden dragon perhaps? and takes takeshi to heaven. Like Elijah the prophet from the christian bible. anyway heres how the series starts haha
4 years old takeshi receives his first and only sword. he envies he brother for having this crazy special sword because he is the first son anyway his brothers sword is like what a lot of the series is built upon
its basically a sword with a semi hollow shaft that is filled with their secret family black gooey like substance that allows the blade to burn for 2 hours. So basically it rips through flesh while burning and posoning the victim!
9 years old takeshi gets jumped kills one of the muggers with his sword but is overwhelmed by the other two and just when he is getting ready to get stabbed BAM the muggers arm flys off sizzling and kotsuro appears with his sword set ablaze and they run away.
Thats like what I have written s far haha but then I plan in the future to write about when takeshi is 13
civil war breaks out in japan (this is the 18th century btw)
the brothers mom iss killed by soldiers when they are away.
They Both swear revenge and join japanese army. Both are victorious through the whole war.
5 years later WORLD war breaks out and new people arrive on the coast they have guns something the japanese people have never seen and they kill almost the whole army and take over japan. Takeshi and kotsuro manage to survive after a builiding colapses on them and they are assumed to be dead. They join up with some other surviving swordsmen and make a a band of rogue warriors trying to win back control of japan. Then their dad gets deathly ill but they have no money to afford to have someone take care of him. They love him very much so kotsuro becomes a hired hitman for one of the main people in the british army that is now controlling japan. He has the money but their father eventually dies. Kotsuro has changed though and he hates himself for killing so many innocent people. That were competetors of his boss. Then takeshi still with the rogue warriors becomes so widely known for sabotaging British military missions that the boss katsuro is working for puts a hit on takeshis head. Kotsuro decides this is the perfect opportunity. He wants to die by Takeshis hand but takeshi obviously does not know that. however kotsuro wants to make takeshi earn it So he fights takeshi at full force even with his sword ablaze. When takeshi wins and kills kotsuro he vows to bring peace back to japan and he uses his brothers famous sword to do it. He wins many battles EPIC battles for years. and finally when he is 29 him and his rogue ninjas finally have had enough they find as many capable fighters they can and go to the main military base where the ruler of the british army is stationed and with only 150 men they take on 600 brits with only their swords and vengeance in their hearts. all of his original members of the rogues are believed to be killed in battle. Takeshi and his cousin and 3 other warriors remain. They are surrounded by over 60 of the remaining brits they believe this is their last stand and they would not survive. Takeshi calls out the Ruler of the brit army and they fight hand to hand combat takeshi takes a toll on his opponent but they suddenly a shot rings out and one of the men unjustly shoots takeshi in his left shoulder. His draws his brothers blade kills the man and is shot one more time in his leg and as he is falling one man believed to havee already been killed. (its gonna be like his closest friend from the rogues) catches him and takeshi sees that the man has rallied the villagers that are sick of being held hostage in their homeland. Armed with over 500 people and various household weapons they outnumber the brits and kill them all but the ruler. They capture him as a hostage. takeshi slowly recovers as many other villages turn into rebel militias and defeat all of the british base by base they keep winning the guns of the dead brits and so battles are won more easily everytime. Takeshi is fully recovered and the remaining brits retreat without their ruler who is still being held hostage then
they give the ruler a sword and takeshi dips his brothers sword into the black stuff lol and sets in on fire and they get their fair fight takeshi evtually decapitates the man and then takeshi becomes emperor of all of japan. Their are a few more fights and then right around when takeshi is 50 is when he is taken up and the series ends. He leaves only his TWO children and his deceased wife bhind so there might be a sequal! haha well thats where it is going!
(FUN FACT: In the first one shot of naruto there is a minor character named takeshi! I just found out lol
Takeshi and Kotsuro
kotsuro is the older bro that dies and kotsuro in japenese means victorious warrior which is ironic
and then takeshi means fierce warrior
basically heres where the story is going in a nutshell
story starts with takeshi the younger brother narrates his childhood i do not come out and say how old takeshi is now that he is relooking his life but i give a hint that actually goes all the way to the end of the series and will not be revealed until then i say well takeshi says
"I seem to be remembering things now that I forgot decades ago"
and the series actually ends when kotsuro is deceased for many years and takeshi is kind of old not sure exactly yet its a long ways away until i even write it anyway kotsuro comes down from the heavens on a golden dragon perhaps? and takes takeshi to heaven. Like Elijah the prophet from the christian bible. anyway heres how the series starts haha
4 years old takeshi receives his first and only sword. he envies he brother for having this crazy special sword because he is the first son anyway his brothers sword is like what a lot of the series is built upon
its basically a sword with a semi hollow shaft that is filled with their secret family black gooey like substance that allows the blade to burn for 2 hours. So basically it rips through flesh while burning and posoning the victim!
9 years old takeshi gets jumped kills one of the muggers with his sword but is overwhelmed by the other two and just when he is getting ready to get stabbed BAM the muggers arm flys off sizzling and kotsuro appears with his sword set ablaze and they run away.
Thats like what I have written s far haha but then I plan in the future to write about when takeshi is 13
civil war breaks out in japan (this is the 18th century btw)
the brothers mom iss killed by soldiers when they are away.
They Both swear revenge and join japanese army. Both are victorious through the whole war.
5 years later WORLD war breaks out and new people arrive on the coast they have guns something the japanese people have never seen and they kill almost the whole army and take over japan. Takeshi and kotsuro manage to survive after a builiding colapses on them and they are assumed to be dead. They join up with some other surviving swordsmen and make a a band of rogue warriors trying to win back control of japan. Then their dad gets deathly ill but they have no money to afford to have someone take care of him. They love him very much so kotsuro becomes a hired hitman for one of the main people in the british army that is now controlling japan. He has the money but their father eventually dies. Kotsuro has changed though and he hates himself for killing so many innocent people. That were competetors of his boss. Then takeshi still with the rogue warriors becomes so widely known for sabotaging British military missions that the boss katsuro is working for puts a hit on takeshis head. Kotsuro decides this is the perfect opportunity. He wants to die by Takeshis hand but takeshi obviously does not know that. however kotsuro wants to make takeshi earn it So he fights takeshi at full force even with his sword ablaze. When takeshi wins and kills kotsuro he vows to bring peace back to japan and he uses his brothers famous sword to do it. He wins many battles EPIC battles for years. and finally when he is 29 him and his rogue ninjas finally have had enough they find as many capable fighters they can and go to the main military base where the ruler of the british army is stationed and with only 150 men they take on 600 brits with only their swords and vengeance in their hearts. all of his original members of the rogues are believed to be killed in battle. Takeshi and his cousin and 3 other warriors remain. They are surrounded by over 60 of the remaining brits they believe this is their last stand and they would not survive. Takeshi calls out the Ruler of the brit army and they fight hand to hand combat takeshi takes a toll on his opponent but they suddenly a shot rings out and one of the men unjustly shoots takeshi in his left shoulder. His draws his brothers blade kills the man and is shot one more time in his leg and as he is falling one man believed to havee already been killed. (its gonna be like his closest friend from the rogues) catches him and takeshi sees that the man has rallied the villagers that are sick of being held hostage in their homeland. Armed with over 500 people and various household weapons they outnumber the brits and kill them all but the ruler. They capture him as a hostage. takeshi slowly recovers as many other villages turn into rebel militias and defeat all of the british base by base they keep winning the guns of the dead brits and so battles are won more easily everytime. Takeshi is fully recovered and the remaining brits retreat without their ruler who is still being held hostage then
they give the ruler a sword and takeshi dips his brothers sword into the black stuff lol and sets in on fire and they get their fair fight takeshi evtually decapitates the man and then takeshi becomes emperor of all of japan. Their are a few more fights and then right around when takeshi is 50 is when he is taken up and the series ends. He leaves only his TWO children and his deceased wife bhind so there might be a sequal! haha well thats where it is going!
