[Romance] Summer's Eve

[Goetia]

Summer’s Eve

In the warm afternoon of summer’s eve,
I look at you and lose myself in your sky blue eyes,
and hold your hand, the hand of the one I could never leave,
one whose face is as beautiful as the starry night skies.

I can honestly say I love everything about you,
from your kind personality to your charming smile,
and I can easily say that my love for you is true,
and so long as we are together, we can walk more than just a mile.

 

[Ryóma]

That's nice.

 

[Goetia]

Thank you.

 

[Jinrou]

Another awesome one SA ^^

 

[Goetia]

Thank you.

 

[Cyanide Addiction]

Summer’s Eve

In the warm afternoon of summer’s eve,
I look at you and lose myself in your sky blue eyes,
and hold your hand, the hand of the one I could never leave,
one whose face is as beautiful as the starry night skies.

I can honestly say I love everything about you,
from your kind personality to your charming smile,
and I can easily say that my love for you is true,
and so long as we are together, we can walk more than just a mile.

Not long enough. If this is all you have for this subject, then choose one you're more passionate about.

 

[Goetia]

Not long enough. If this is all you have for this subject, then choose one you're more passionate about.

I see. These are the subjects I find the easiest and most enjoyable to write about, but I struggle to find ways to make it longer sometimes. But thank you for the feedback Cyanide.

 

[Cyanide Addiction]

I see. These are the subjects I find the easiest and most enjoyable to write about, but I struggle to find ways to make it longer sometimes. But thank you for the feedback Cyanide.

Try playing a song, or two, that gets an emotional reaction out of you while you're writing. Stimulate yourself a bit... (NO! I do not mean masturbate!!)

 

[Goetia]

Try playing a song, or two, that gets an emotional reaction out of you while you're writing. Stimulate yourself a bit... (NO! I do not mean masturbate!!)

I actually do that for all my poems, I listen to music that best fits the subject of the poem I'm writing about.

Lol, I don't do that anyway. Thanks again for the feedback mate.