Storyboard Mission Submission

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Mission Rank: B-rank
Story Elements Chosen:
  • Defeat a small group of undead.
Date of Beginning & Date of Conclusion: 05/11/2020 - 05/11/2020
Relevant Mission Links: Defending Owatatsumi from the Undead.
Additional Info: Cursed Revenge's story element; 25% Kumi and Ryo, x2 chance to gain an Artifact
I also tried to "break up" the text some by scattering the Jutsus used relevant to the points in which they were used. I hope that helps the reading process. Please let me know if not. 🙏

Mission Passed. The spacing did help to make reading a bit easier. The only thing I would watch is the narration on the openings.

You also win a B-rank artifact that can be submitted in the Custom Artifact Submission Thread or redeemed for ryo.

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Mission Rank: B-rank
Story Elements Chosen:
Defeat a small group of undead.

Date of Beginning & Date of Conclusion: 05/11/2020 - 05/11/2020
Relevant Mission Links:
1. https://animebase.me/threads/owatatsumi-214.768208/post-22005861
2. https://animebase.me/threads/owatatsumi-214.768208/post-22005987
Additional Info: Cursed Revenge's story element; 25% Kumi and Ryo, x2 chance to gain an Artifact

Mission Passed. You also win a B-rank artifact it can be submitted in the Custom Artifact Submission Thread or redeemed for ryo.

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Mission Rank: B
Story Elements Chosen: Defend your employer from bandits (3)
Date of Beginning & Date of Conclusion: 19/05/2020
Relevant Mission Links: Link
Additional Info: N/A

Mission Passed. Watch all of the setup roleplay. It was nearly half of the mission. I'd suggest adding in a secondary element nex time or keeping the off-topic things that aren't related to the element itself outside of the mission. Either work fine, but for higher rank single element missions being that off topic will end in a failure.

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Mission Rank: A
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Investigate the mysterious illness (3)
Obtain firsthand experience of the severe effects of the virus (4)
Prevent the spread of infection any way you can (5)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 26/5/2020
Relevant mission links: [x]
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed. You also win an A-rank artifact it can be redeemed for ryo or submitted in the Custom Artifact Submission thread.

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Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen: Defeat a small group of undead
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 31st May 2020
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: Cursed Revenge's story element; 25% Kumi and Ryo, x2 chance to gain an Artifact

Mission Failed. There is way too much opening narration and roleplay not related to the element. Then there isn't enough of the actual element to counterbalance this. Work on actually performing the element to completion. Missions fail primarly because the element itself isn't focused on. This is especially true for single element missions. You should always try to go for 75% of the narrative being directly about the element and only 25% being about setting up and getting to the actual task set out by the storyboard element.

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Story element chosen: - Study local flora and fauna.
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 26/05/2020
Mission link: https://animebase.me/threads/emerald-island-191.756206/post-22013923
Additional Information: First ninja world mission so I tried one of the arc missions if it's not too late.

Mission Failed. This doesn't meet the criteria for even this level of a mission. This is because you do not directly deal with the storyboard element until almost the end of the mission. You needed to study the local flora and fauna. Your biography spent most of the mission studying his cards, which he uses as a predictive method. This needed more time actually studying the flora, eg: figuring out what the plant does, it's appearance, properties, things related directly to it. This was more akin to "Explore a landmark" where you go through and explain how your biography interacts with the surrounding area. When your biography does find the plant he was looking for he doesn't really study it. He picks it, and delivers it to someone else. Try working on picking the right elements for your mission. This could have passed it the element was more related to the task you performed as sufficient roleplay went into it, you just didn't apply the roleplay to the element itself so it doesn't count for that particular element.

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Mission Rank: B-rank
Story Elements Chosen:
  • Perform our first Ritual for your Cult (3)
Date of Beginning & Date of Conclusion: 5-31-2020
Relevant Mission Links: https://animebase.me/threads/grand-divide-110.756123/page-8#post-22016012

Additional Info: Sado won't know about this ._.

Mission Failed. This doesn't come off as a B-rank, it's more a D or C-rank at best.

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Mission Rank: A-Rank.
Story elements chosen:

Deal with a traumatic event from your past. (3)​
Explore a dangerous site. (3)​
Experiment with very Advanced Ninjutsu. (5)​

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 01/ 06/ 2020 - 02/ 06/ 2020.
Relevant mission links: Here & Here.
Additional information: N/A.

Mission Passed.

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Mission Rank: S-rank
Story Elements Chosen:
  • Investigate and defeat powerful threat [custom element]
Date of Beginning & Date of Conclusion: 06/03/2020
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Mission Passed. No bonus.

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Prepare one of the landmarks you own for immediate or future attacks and for daily operations

Date: 03/06/2020
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/south-west-kinai-island-146.756159/post-22017710
Additional info: Testament to the great lands of Angbahd and the fortress of Morgoth.

Mission Passed. Couldn't wait for someone to use that artifact tbh. T__T

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Mission Rank: S-rank
Story Elements Chosen:

  • Fight an enemy much stronger than yourself. (S-rank)
  • Save a large community from danger. (S-rank)
  • Guard someone very important. (S-rank)
  • Defeat a huge horde of undead without destroying the bodies. (S-rank)

Date of Beginning & Date of Conclusion: 5/28/2020 - 6/3/2020
Relevant Mission Links: Posts (1) , (2) , (3)
Additional Info: 1/4 of the elements were relating to the Cursed Revenge arc, so I'm not sure if it qualifies (given it's the minority) for the bonuses from the arc. I leave that up to the reviewer's full discretion to decide.

Mission Passed. This was heavy on the off-topic stuff in the first post but you make up for it in the second and third.

This was started before the end of the arc, which is why I'm giving the bonus.

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Story elements chosen:
Fight an enemy much stronger than yourself (5)
Defeat a huge horde of undead without destroying the bodies. (5)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
May 23, 2020 to June 6th, 2020
Relevant mission links:
Start: https://animebase.me/threads/owatatsumi-214.768208/post-22012061

Additional information: Utilized one of the Cursed Revenge Elements

Mission Failed. Barely, and I say that because I debated heavily on this one. You used too much off-topic stuff to start with, I feel like you could have passed merely by adding one more crucial element to the mix. Just one to open up that starting RP and bring it into more focus as in making it count toward the mission. As it is, the main bulk of the mission isn't based around actually completing the mission elements. You end up doing the job but by that time you've spent most of your work load doing other things. Red-Robin was able to do more because they had more elements to work with.

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- Survive a near-death situation
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
07/06/2020 - 07/06/2020
Relevant mission links:
One - Two
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Lena returns from her absence, riding back to Shinramoto on her Summon with enemies in hot pursuit! Perspective of the story changes from NPC Alicia to Lena and back again.

Mission Passed. The switching back and forth did take away a bit from the effort of your biography. This was a great story though and I got a lot of DnD storytelling vibes from it. The changes to your character, her now more broken nature. I'd suggest adding more elements though in the future, to allow for variety. This skated close on the edge between pass and fail for me, mainly because of how vague the "near-death situation" felt to me. I may have not caught the intended tone.

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Story elements chosen: Win a fight without your ninjutsu {5}
Custom Elements:
Choose between killing a target, or saving a comrade {5}
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
6/7/20
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/jinyong-016.755833/#post-22018669
Additional information: I tried my best, let me know how I did ^^

Mission Failed. First, I'd suggest reading through the Storyboard Mission Criteria if you haven't it will help with tone, time, effort, and danger. However, this just doesn't reach the level of an S-rank, it is about a B-rank, at most an A-rank, but even that is a bit high for the level of danger this has. I would suggest using lower elements and getting a feel for them. For example "Fight an individual of comparable strength" and "Fight an enemy stronger than yourself." That specific element "Win a fight without your ninjutsu" is meant for fights where your opponent usually goes all out, using ninjutsu and you reply only with taijutsu or similar making it an extremely difficult and dangerous mission for the biography.

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Mission Rank: B-Rank
Story elements chosen:
- Custom: Lose someone who is tracking you
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
08/06/2020 - 08/06/2020
Relevant mission links:
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Lena after defeating her foes sets up a perimeter to search their corpses. She learns that someone is watching her and aims to lose them from her scent.

Mission Failed. This needed a bit more for a B-rank. Would have worked as a C-rank though.

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