Staring at the Moon

[Hotaruko]

agree with most of the comments previously posted (such as the color part), but overall great poem sounds like you got your heart broken and i was gonna give some comfort xD but clearly that wasnt the case so good job and keep it up

 

[Byron123]

agree with most of the comments previously posted (such as the color part), but overall great poem sounds like you got your heart broken and i was gonna give some comfort xD but clearly that wasnt the case so good job and keep it up

Glad you liked it, even a bit

 

[Kishi Uzumaki]

Υeah it needs more work. It left me unsatisfied as well.

Don't worry about that, just keep writing them and that's the way, you gonna become good at it .