Whats the main Focal ? that's right its the ****ing render, obviously and if you make it as a effect placed, zoom in the render and the first one seems disturbing to the eye as well as the second one does so work on it and, use better fonts next time also always pick HQ renders.
There's no flow in the first signature, it just looks as if you put random c4ds in random places covering up the transparent and placing a render on top of it. the second one hits my liking a bit is cause it has a flow, and nice choice of colors despite how bright it is.
Overall not bad tho not so good either.