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(Burōpaipu) - Blowpipe
(Burōpaipu) - Blowpipe
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra cost: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: This ninja weapon is a extendable, hollow pipe that is used to blow out darts which are a syringe-like implement with dart overtones. The dart-like tail helps to maintain direction in what is a very low velocity flight. When the needle of the dart is driven into the skin of the target, the piston is driven forward by the deceleration and discharges the contents of the syringe into the target's tissues. By itself, the darts only cause menial, C-Rank damage that extends up to short range only but lack penetrative force when used against armor-type techniques that cover the skin. However, if the user wishes, he can also utilize chakra to augment the damage it can cause as well as add different effects. Considering the mechanics of the weapon, the user can only shoot one dart at a time, counts as a move, but if used strategically, can become a deadly weapon.
Normal Dart - By choosing to use the dart as-is, the dart is capable of dealing C-Rank normal damage but only reaches up to short range. The penetrative force of the dart is only able to barely penetrate the flesh and can't penetrate armor techniques.
Lightning Dart - By infusing a dart with A-Rank lightning chakra (-30 chakra), the dart is capable of penetrating earth-type armor S-Rank and below as well as releasing a numbing effect to the small area it penetrates. Due to the fast nature of the lightning, this dart can reach up to mid-range. If the user has no active armor, then the dart is capable of piercing through to the bone.Can Pierce normal elements of A rank and below and C rank wind and below.
Wind Dart - By infusing a dart with A-Rank wind chakra (-30 chakra), the dart is capable of penetrating through lightning-type armor up to S-Rank and below. Due to the nature of the wind, this dart can reach up to mid-range. If the user has no active armor, then the dart is capable of piercing through flesh though not to the bone. It can piece through other elements of B rank and below and only through C rank fire.
Note: Only one dart can be used at a time.
Note: Each application costs one move and must wait a turn if used 3x
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra cost: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: This ninja weapon is a extendable, hollow pipe that is used to blow out darts which are a syringe-like implement with dart overtones. The dart-like tail helps to maintain direction in what is a very low velocity flight. When the needle of the dart is driven into the skin of the target, the piston is driven forward by the deceleration and discharges the contents of the syringe into the target's tissues. By itself, the darts only cause menial, C-Rank damage that extends up to short range only but lack penetrative force when used against armor-type techniques that cover the skin. However, if the user wishes, he can also utilize chakra to augment the damage it can cause as well as add different effects. Considering the mechanics of the weapon, the user can only shoot one dart at a time, counts as a move, but if used strategically, can become a deadly weapon.
Normal Dart - By choosing to use the dart as-is, the dart is capable of dealing C-Rank normal damage but only reaches up to short range. The penetrative force of the dart is only able to barely penetrate the flesh and can't penetrate armor techniques.
Lightning Dart - By infusing a dart with A-Rank lightning chakra (-30 chakra), the dart is capable of penetrating earth-type armor S-Rank and below as well as releasing a numbing effect to the small area it penetrates. Due to the fast nature of the lightning, this dart can reach up to mid-range. If the user has no active armor, then the dart is capable of piercing through to the bone.Can Pierce normal elements of A rank and below and C rank wind and below.
Wind Dart - By infusing a dart with A-Rank wind chakra (-30 chakra), the dart is capable of penetrating through lightning-type armor up to S-Rank and below. Due to the nature of the wind, this dart can reach up to mid-range. If the user has no active armor, then the dart is capable of piercing through flesh though not to the bone. It can piece through other elements of B rank and below and only through C rank fire.
Note: Only one dart can be used at a time.
Note: Each application costs one move and must wait a turn if used 3x
Well not really much to say, its a blowpipe that alot of native tribes used to assassinate others with poison tipped darts. This is the same minus the poison. The infusion of one of several elemental chakra natures can be used to work along side it. Its overall a nice weapon but it will take some time to find a very useful situation in order to use it.
My one question is how wide is the coating of chakra on which dart. Is it like when Bee used lightning on his pencil and threw it? If so then thats all the questions I have to ask about it. One last thing is that do I need to load it every time for another shot or can it store up to a number of darts in the chamber?
Logically the chakra coats the entire dart. It would take a considerable amount of prescision and control to only make the tip be coated in chakra. Ain't no one got time fo dat.
I'd like to think its infinite and doesn't take much effort. I mean you can only use one at a time so logically you would have to refill it per application. But in my opinion, a trained shinobi should be able to do that quickly without hindering his actions. Keep in mind this is best used with stealth but I made this to combat specific points to disable opponents especially those who use taijutsu but any opponent will do.
Analyze and it's all yours. I love your critiques. :>
(Raiton: Hiken: Tsubame-Gaeshi) - Lightning Release: Concealed Sword: Swallow Return
Rank: S-Rank
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: Swallow Return is a forbidden sword technique that requires extreme precision, first in lightning chakra control and second in swordsmanship. It's a technique to where three concurrent arching blades close on the enemy from all sides to create a pseudo prison. While the user downplays it as simply successive slashes, it is actually using lightning chakra to the highest potential to overload one's arms and sword to increase speed and cutting ability. It starts with the user raising his sword above his shoulder, channeling lightning chakra to the nerves in the arms and to his sword. Once the user has done that, he performs a flashing slash from his right to his left, followed by two seemingly simultaneous, over-lapping flashes that appears to disregard the concept of time and space, producing a slash attack that arrives from three different directions due to the increased reflexes of one's arms. The user then lifts his sword as it gathers all his lightning chakra towards the blade and delivers another downwards slash resulting in an explosion of chakra, damaging the opponent.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle
Note: Unable to use A-Rank or above Kenjutsu & Lightning for the following turn
Note: User's arms are slightly numbed afterwards
Note: Must have lightning as a specialty
(Raiton: Hiken: Tsubame-Gaeshi) - Lightning Release: Concealed Sword: Swallow Return
Rank: S-Rank
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: Swallow Return is a forbidden sword technique that requires extreme precision, first in lightning chakra control and second in swordsmanship. It's a technique to where three concurrent arching blades close on the enemy from all sides to create a pseudo prison. While the user downplays it as simply successive slashes, it is actually using lightning chakra to the highest potential to overload one's arms and sword to increase speed and cutting ability. It starts with the user raising his sword above his shoulder, channeling lightning chakra to the nerves in the arms and to his sword. Once the user has done that, he performs a flashing slash from his right to his left, followed by two seemingly simultaneous, over-lapping flashes that appears to disregard the concept of time and space, producing a slash attack that arrives from three different directions due to the increased reflexes of one's arms. The user then lifts his sword as it gathers all his lightning chakra towards the blade and delivers another downwards slash resulting in an explosion of chakra, damaging the opponent.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle
Note: Unable to use A-Rank or above Kenjutsu & Lightning for the following turn
Note: User's arms are slightly numbed afterwards
Note: Must have lightning as a specialty
Well first and foremost, you recreated one of my favorite moves in Staynight which I actually had typed up as a CJ to be made later on but you beat me to the punch. Anyway it’s a rather simple technique to understand if you watched the anime. The user uses lightning chakra to speed up his body, and using this speed slashes from each side at an alarming rate and come down towards the enemy with a three way slashing attack.
The only thing Id like to ask is what is the speed estimation of your movement. Can it be tracked by normal eyes? If not how much do you need to do so. I recall you opting for 2nd tomoe reactions but it was no dice which is fair since youd be unleashing an attack equal to the first gate xD(by speed chart standards). The only thing I hate here is the Note: Must have lightning as a specialty portion which leaves a stingy taste in my mouth z_z
Well I left that as that as I was scrambling my brain for restrictions. But if you have advice on it, based on your experience, I can always resubmit it. A lot of people told me already about the lightning specialty thing as well. xD
My safe assumption is that it can be tracked by normal eyes but considering how fast lightning can be, I would assume that the first strike is easy to counter but the following ones...not so much as by then the lightning is speeding up your slashes. I'll talk to pervy if he allows me so I can run some ideas with him on that.
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Genjutsu: Gaia no Jishhikaitei) Illusion Technique: Embodiment of Gaia
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Type: Supplementary
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user makes four hand seals causing an illusion to occur, to which once activate the opponent will see the user instantly slam their hands onto the ground. Once they do a blue summoning formula will appear on the ground under the enemy. A blue chain with a spear head will form behind the target and stab into the spine of the target, to which once it does it will spread out and latch onto the surrounding environment (such as trees, mud puddles,water etc). The chains that branch from the original will then seemingly begin to absorb the properties of the said surroundings and forcefully injecting back into the body of the target. The target will feel immense amount of pressure as they feel there bones being morphed into the same material being absorbed by the chains(changing the bones into tree bark, hardening like steel etc). In reality the target is unharmed but us under immense mental strain and will pass out after 2 turns if they don’t break the illusion due to the intense mental strain. The technique is highly versatile as it can be used in accordance to the actual environment, thus making it harder to decipher.
*Genjutsu lasts two turns*
*Can only be used twice per battle, leaving the user unable to use A-rank and above genjutsu until the the illusion ends*
Here we go
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Type: Supplementary
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user makes four hand seals causing an illusion to occur, to which once activate the opponent will see the user instantly slam their hands onto the ground. Once they do a blue summoning formula will appear on the ground under the enemy. A blue chain with a spear head will form behind the target and stab into the spine of the target, to which once it does it will spread out and latch onto the surrounding environment (such as trees, mud puddles,water etc). The chains that branch from the original will then seemingly begin to absorb the properties of the said surroundings and forcefully injecting back into the body of the target. The target will feel immense amount of pressure as they feel there bones being morphed into the same material being absorbed by the chains(changing the bones into tree bark, hardening like steel etc). In reality the target is unharmed but us under immense mental strain and will pass out after 2 turns if they don’t break the illusion due to the intense mental strain. The technique is highly versatile as it can be used in accordance to the actual environment, thus making it harder to decipher.
*Genjutsu lasts two turns*
*Can only be used twice per battle, leaving the user unable to use A-rank and above genjutsu until the the illusion ends*
Here we go
Does the chain come out of the ground and then stab the opponent in the spine? Once hooked onto the opponent, do the chains come out of the user's front side (i.e chest, stomach, side, etc.) or is that the other side of the chain?
By the way, intersesting genjutsu. I love the work you did on it. ^__^
Yes the first chain with the spear comes from the ground. It comes directly from the summoning kanji from behind and htis into the spine. No the chains dont come from the body of the enemy, they sprout outwards from the original chain and spread out different locations on the area.