[Gen] Shinta trains gaara in genjustu

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Well a disadvantage would be the number of hand seals, since 5 is a little longer than most other techniques. It is also only short range while most other genjutsu can reach up to mid.

Try to look for things like the amount of preparation, the speed of the illusion(how long it til it actually takes effect) and its range as these things are often slightly skewed negatively to balance techniques. If you have no other questions we can move on to the next one.
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OK sensei
( Genjutsu: Oshitsubusu Hebi Kubire ) - Illusion Technique: Crushing Snake Constriction
Rank: B
Type: Offensive, Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: The user puts the opponent into a genjutsu which has snakes appear beneath the opponent to constrict them and with the users command, they crush the opponent. In reality, the opponent is immobilized and takes damage due to the stress on his mind.

Ok next technique. Focus your chakra into my clone and manipulate his senses of sight and touch, conjure two illusionary snakes that would rise up from the ground. Make them appear to coil around and constrict him, immobilizing his body. You should then clench your first and cause them to crush inwards on his body, dealing mental damage. Do the performance and include the advantages and disadvantages of this jutsu.
 

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( Genjutsu: Oshitsubusu Hebi Kubire ) - Illusion Technique: Crushing Snake Constriction
Rank: B
Type: Offensive, Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: The user puts the opponent into a genjutsu which has snakes appear beneath the opponent to constrict them and with the users command, they crush the opponent. In reality, the opponent is immobilized and takes damage due to the stress on his mind.

Ok next technique. Focus your chakra into my clone and manipulate his senses of sight and touch, conjure two illusionary snakes that would rise up from the ground. Make them appear to coil around and constrict him, immobilizing his body. You should then clench your first and cause them to crush inwards on his body, dealing mental damage. Do the performance and include the advantages and disadvantages of this jutsu.
Gaara hears the old man he begin focus his charka into your clone and he adds more charka to maintain the mental damage he was about to felt then he sends to large snakes understand to coil around you binding you and crushing at the same time for this justu its weakness lies in the fact you don't have much time to simple put your enemy in this justu so you gone have to set him up first then backdoor with this justu that also strength too but this just require no handseals
 

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Gaara hears the old man he begin focus his charka into your clone and he adds more charka to maintain the mental damage he was about to felt then he sends to large snakes understand to coil around you binding you and crushing at the same time for this justu its weakness lies in the fact you don't have much time to simple put your enemy in this justu so you gone have to set him up first then backdoor with this justu that also strength too but this just require no handseals
Be careful with your description of the techniques, it sounds like your sending real snakes to attack my clone after placing him in the illusion, rather than creating illusionary ones. Genjutsu especially relies heavily on accurate and detailed description, If thats understood we will move on.
 

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Be careful with your description of the techniques, it sounds like your sending real snakes to attack my clone after placing him in the illusion, rather than creating illusionary ones. Genjutsu especially relies heavily on accurate and detailed description, If thats understood we will move on.
I got it now
 

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I got it now
Ok good, next technique.


( Genjutsu: Hanaoka ) - Illusion Technique: Flower Hill
Rank: B
Type: Offensive, Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user summons up illusionary purple flowers from the ground in front of them, damaging enemies with a chance to paralyze them.
Note: Paralysis lasts one turn.

Focus your chakra into my clone and manipulate his senses of sight and smell, make a field of flowers appear underneath him. The appearance of these flowers will damage him and cause him to be paralyzed if he does not release it. Remember what we discussed earlier.
 

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Ok good, next technique.


( Genjutsu: Hanaoka ) - Illusion Technique: Flower Hill
Rank: B
Type: Offensive, Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user summons up illusionary purple flowers from the ground in front of them, damaging enemies with a chance to paralyze them.
Note: Paralysis lasts one turn.

Focus your chakra into my clone and manipulate his senses of sight and smell, make a field of flowers appear underneath him. The appearance of these flowers will damage him and cause him to be paralyzed if he does not release it. Remember what we discussed earlier.






Gaara channel his charka and he began to focus his charka to disrupt his senses and sight and smell while your clone busy with smelling flowers gaara make flowers come underneath you
 

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For the dis its only last one turn and for the advantage you can follow up with other jusu while they are stun
Hmm I can easily see two other disadvantages with this jutsu, try not to focus so much on the description. You have to look at all of the factors, disregarding the description what does this genjutsu lack that most other genjutsu have?
 

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Not really tbh I am to focus on finishing my last of my basic nine
-__- Well the genjutsu has no mental damage associated with it and it also cannot effect targets that are outside of short range. Which makes this a bit worse than most other canon gen.

( Genjutsu: Iwa Kōka Genjutsu ) - Illusionary Arts: Rockslide Genjutsu
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage: N/A
Description: This is a technique that can be cast on multiple targets. The user creates an illusion where their target(s) experience several explosions going off near and around them. The ground around and beneath the target(s) will begin to collapse and cause panic and mental damage from the perceived reality of the explosions. The technique, however, is weak when cast upon multiple targets as it only takes one individual to release the technique for large groups of people.
Note: This technique can be cast on multiple targets but when done it only takes one person to release the technique for all parties involved with genjutsu kai. However all members need to be within short range distance.

For this technique target all 3 of my clones and use your chakra to take over their senses and force them into an illusion. Make them experience several explosions going off from the nearby mountain and make it seem as if a rockslide is approaching them rapidly.
 

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-__- Well the genjutsu has no mental damage associated with it and it also cannot effect targets that are outside of short range. Which makes this a bit worse than most other canon gen.

( Genjutsu: Iwa Kōka Genjutsu ) - Illusionary Arts: Rockslide Genjutsu
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage: N/A
Description: This is a technique that can be cast on multiple targets. The user creates an illusion where their target(s) experience several explosions going off near and around them. The ground around and beneath the target(s) will begin to collapse and cause panic and mental damage from the perceived reality of the explosions. The technique, however, is weak when cast upon multiple targets as it only takes one individual to release the technique for large groups of people.
Note: This technique can be cast on multiple targets but when done it only takes one person to release the technique for all parties involved with genjutsu kai. However all members need to be within short range distance.

For this technique target all 3 of my clones and use your chakra to take over their senses and force them into an illusion. Make them experience several explosions going off from the nearby mountain and make it seem as if a rockslide is approaching them rapidly.
Gaara channel his charka into your clone and force him to see mountain with explosives going off and killing your mind making you going crazy
 

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Gaara channel his charka into your clone and force him to see mountain with explosives going off and killing your mind making you going crazy
Alright, no where in the description does it state that you "kill the opponents mind making them go crazy". Please refer back to the jutsu and redo your performance, remember to include your advantages and disadvantages sections as well.
 

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Alright, no where in the description does it state that you "kill the opponents mind making them go crazy". Please refer back to the jutsu and redo your performance, remember to include your advantages and disadvantages sections as well.




Alright buddy the weakness of this justu to me is having multiple targets cast up on people because it's less affecting and it's only takes one person to break it up so I rather use it one person that the weakness and strgeth of the justu
 

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Alright buddy the weakness of this justu to me is having multiple targets cast up on people because it's less affecting and it's only takes one person to break it up so I rather use it one person that the weakness and strgeth of the justu
That was good, i will still need you to redo the performance of the technique though. If it will help I can do an example of how i would write the performance?
 

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That was good, i will still need you to redo the performance of the technique though. If it will help I can do an example of how i would write the performance?

Well gen is not my strong point so I barley understand gen I'm more of a nin person and a example would be nice
 

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Well gen is not my strong point so I barley understand gen I'm more of a nin person and a example would be nice
Genjutsu is all illusionary, its about manipulating the enemies senses to form an imaginary object or world that you force upon your opponent. The more detailed you are with your description of this world the harder it is for the enemy to find a flaw and escape the illusion. For an example of how I would describe this gen:

I begin by focusing my chakra into my opponent, distorting his chakra flow and gaining control of it. By doing so I manipulate his senses to make it seem as if several explosions had erupted close by him, overloading his sight and hearing as the waves of sound and light crash against him. He would then feel the earth begin to loosen and collapse beneath him as the rock seems to falter and crack, causing him to lose his footing and fall.

Any questions?
 
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