Royal Breath - Chapter 1

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Chapter 1
The Awaited Reunion, An Awkward Intruder?



1 Week Ago
Baltigo, Grand Line

Footsteps were heard blasting through the corridor, as they quickly approached the door. A small and weird man barged into the tiny and corky room, shouting eagerly:

Man - She's here! She's here! She's

His voice was suddenly muted by the hoovering wind that followed his shout and filled the room, Pushing the walls and the furniture, until it convened in the center, adopting the shape of a young woman

The tiny man closed the door behind him, leaving both alone and a strange headgear on the floor. The door opened again, and a small hand popped out, retrieved the fugitive gear and closed the door again.

??? - Lilianne...

The deep and familiar voice rose from behind the inappropriately small desk, making her smile.
The person's silhouette contrasted with the sudden flash of a thunder, ripping the darken clouds of heavy rain. All his might crushing the humble surrounding, blazing magnificent, yet fearsome.
He was marked with tribalistic signs, gashing his face all the way from his left eye to the side of his mouth, which stood shut and still, with no sights of the usual mockery, so well known smirk.

Lilianne immediately assumed a more serious expression, induced by the preoccupying aura of the room.

??? - 2 years have passed since the dismantle of their Nakama, and the plans for their reunion have already started. Nico Robin has left the island already, and Ivankov has reported the preparations for her "guest".

Lilianne Dieu-le-Vent - So I've heard...

??? - Furthermore, the conquest of the North Blue is eminent. The next phase of our plan is about to initiate.

The woman smirked, delighted by the man's words.

??? - But first, Lili, I will assign you an important mission. I want you to travel there, and infiltrate their Nakama. You need to prepare them.

She oppened her mouth as if to say something, but immediately refrained.

Lilianne - Aye... Dragon...

Monkey D. Dragon - I'm counting on you.



Current Day
Groove #42, Sadaody Archipelago, Grand Line

LUUUFFFY!!!

Everyone shouted in unison, as tears of happiness filled the lower lids of their eyes. Nami, Usopp, Franky, Brook and Robin smiled at the sight of a huge bird, carrying their 4 missing Nakama.

Luffy - Oi, Guys!!

The familiar bright smile was stamped on his face, has he jumped down to the ship, securing his beloved Straw Hat with his hand. Zoro, Sanji and finally Chopper followed him. The Straw Hat Pirates were alive and stronger than ever. The 2 years they spent apart were painful, but their newly acquired strengths and skills were visible. They were all much more mature and wise and Sanji was propelled backwards by a huge jet of nosebleed, given by the mere sight of Nami and Robin.

Slowly, the initial effect of their grown visuals started to fade, and their old and immutable personalities emerged, much to our delight. But, in a sudden lapse of wiseness, Luffy's features changed. The shadow of his hat covered his eyes, in a solemn aura.

Luffy -Guys...

Given the unusual change of tone, everyone mirrored his expression.

Luffy -I have tons of stuff I've been wanting to tell you... but for now just let me thank you, for going along with my selfishness for two whole years!

Everyone looked affectionately to their captain, reviving their somehow hidden, but deep and strong respect. They were all more than friends. They're dreams and happiness were, for quite a long time, connected with eachother. They were Nakama.

Luffy - NOW! LET'S SET SA

Robin - Mr. Captain...

Luffy -Eh? Robin?

Robin -There's someone I'd like to invite into our Nakama

Luffy - Nani?

Sitting on the rooftop of the large hut, the "Sunny's Brain", was a young woman, not older than 25, with long and bright brown hair. Constricted by a whine coloured corset, she had a long sleeved blouse, almost serving as a dress, though revealing, if wore alone. She was wearing tight brown leather pants, and tall boots.

Noticing it was her time to introduce herself, she raised her bright grey eyes from the book she was reading, and smiled tenderly to the confused pirate crew. At this point, Sanji's nosebleed bursted out again.

Lilianne - Hi!

And she returned her atention to the book. Everyone drastically changed their expression to a mist of What The Hell?! and What The F*?! and Is That All You Have To Say?! Making her fall from her pedestal.

Lillianne - Sorry, Sorry :p I'm Lilianne Dieu-le-Vent, nice to meet you... Monkey D. Luffy... Roronoa Zoro... Nami... Usopp... Dr. Chopper... Cutty Flam [SIZE="-5"]Oi, Call me Franky >.>[/size] and Brook.

She made a respectfull bow to everyone, as she was saying their names.

Lilianne -I've heard allot about your ways, and I've created a deep respect for every single one of you. Robin told me the most wonderful things while we were partners.

She smiled to Robin, which she returned. Everyone else dropped their jaws in awe.

Lilianne -I understand you know nothing abo

Luffy -YOSH! Welcome! Robin's friend is our friend!

He smirked, immediately repelling any sense of discomfort or awkwardness from the ship.

Luffy - Now that everyone's here, SEEEET SAAAAAAAAAIL!!!!! TO FISHMEN ISLAND!!!!


Meanwhile
Somewhere on the Grand Line

Drops of sweat ran abundantly from the man's face, as he was forced to lift his sword against his friend. His body shaked from his own weakness. Such a weak spirit he couldn't even keep his own weapon from killing the rest of his Nakama. Friend after friend felt to the horrifying power of the man whose demoniacal eyes were glaring from the shadows, infinitely amused but infinitely insatiable.

??? - Have had enough?

Man No, please. Don't do this... Let me go...

??? - But we're having so much fun!

An eccentric laughter spilled from his mouth, as tears felt down his prey's face.

Man Please, I beg you...

??? You beg me?! AH! Beg for what? Your life?! Your "friend's" life? Fuffuffuffuffuffuffu! Weak have no right to beg

He raised his index finger, and immediately the useless man was impelled forward, lodging the blade on his half dead friend's heart, before falling on his knees, and crying his heart out.

Den Den MuchI - Prrruurru! Prrruuruu!

The feathered coated man grabbed the Den Den Muchi and answered it.

Den Den MuchI - Mr. Doflamingo.

Donquixote Doflamingo - Aye

Den Den MuchI - The Straw Hats have just sinked into the ocean. They're finally heading to the Fishmen island.

Doflamingo - And was "She" with them?

Den Den MuchI - Y-yes...

Doflamingo - Excellent. Fuffuffuffuffuffuffu!



End of Chapter 1
 
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Yeeyz it's finally here =D

I still hadn't answered your PM's, sorry about that. You did a pretty good job at bringing Doflamingo to life, I can truly hear his laughter when I read it :p
 

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Yeeyz it's finally here =D

I still hadn't answered your PM's, sorry about that. You did a pretty good job at bringing Doflamingo to life, I can truly hear his laughter when I read it :p
I decided that waiting for you would be a lost cause. It turned out to be true =D

Just kidding xd

Thank you very much!

There was something that I found a bit meh. When Luffy invited Lillianne to join, it was kinda off... Not sure... Meh...
 

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Ah pretty good, some parts can use some extra explanation or responses of the crew. Like the cliffhanger, really want to know what kind of charachter she is and what her intentions are.
 

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Ah pretty good, some parts can use some extra explanation or responses of the crew. Like the cliffhanger, really want to know what kind of charachter she is and what her intentions are.
She is the main character of this FF. Her personality and intentions will be developed and revealed throughout the following chapters.
 

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I decided that waiting for you would be a lost cause. It turned out to be true =D

Just kidding xd

Thank you very much!

There was something that I found a bit meh. When Luffy invited Lillianne to join, it was kinda off... Not sure... Meh...
You can try adding pictures, you would be surprised as how many gifs and pictures there are of OP-facial expressions:

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This one is still one of my favourite's xd:

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