Rise Of the Ranmyaku, The Naruto Sequal Scroll 1 chapter 1

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Dude - this is just awesome...It captured my attention immediately. (Note the minor errors and typos...heh, sorry, I'm a literature major so it sort of bothers me...but no matter.)

Proctor: All right you maggots?.stop dawdling and get in here NOW!!!! Or you?ll all fail!

Senjiito, Itarito and the rest of the students all race into the classroom?Itarito as always sits in his seat surrounded by girls and Senjiito sits in his usual seat next to Shikari Nara.
This was a good one. It reminded me of Sasuke. O_O Is Senjito and Shikari BFGF?
And I've got to comment on your name-making...they're epic...where'd you get them?

xd, anyhow, I love the way you formatted the tests; it was clear and concise...you spent a lot of time, didn't you? XD

All right...moving on to the next chap...
 

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Dude - this is just awesome...It captured my attention immediately. (Note the minor errors and typos...heh, sorry, I'm a literature major so it sort of bothers me...but no matter.)

Proctor: All right you maggots?.stop dawdling and get in here NOW!!!! Or you?ll all fail!

Senjiito, Itarito and the rest of the students all race into the classroom?Itarito as always sits in his seat surrounded by girls and Senjiito sits in his usual seat next to Shikari Nara.

This was a good one. It reminded me of Sasuke. O_O Is Senjito and Shikari BFGF?
And I've got to comment on your name-making...they're epic...where'd you get them?

xd, anyhow, I love the way you formatted the tests; it was clear and concise...you spent a lot of time, didn't you? XD

All right...moving on to the next chap...
oO

The names:
Senjiito: Naruto, Neji (i added another 'I') and Sasuke
Shikari: Shikamaru and Temari
Itarito: Itachi and Naruto

No Shikari and Senjiito aren't going out...they are just great friends ;)
 

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Ok well this is my first attempt at a fan fiction so... i'll let you be the judge

Years have past since Konoha was attacked by the Akatsuki peace has returned and everything is tranquil. Tsunade has retired and Naruto has taken place as ?Lord Hokage?. But a new threat has come to the attention of the 5 Great Shinobi Nations, a threat even greater than the Akatsuki??The Ranmyaku? a deadly gang of 13 murderous Shinobi with only 1 goal? ?World Domination?

Rise Of the Ranmyaku, The Naruto Sequal
Scroll 1: A new Beginning
Chapter 1: Graduation Exam​

The Ninja Academy bell rang to tell the students that it was time for the graduation exam.

Unnamed student1: Heh well I know im gonna pass this year for sure!

Unnamed student2: Yeah well keep dreaming you don?t have a chance in passing this exam. *leans over to whisper* I heard that this years graduation jutsu was?? to make at least 8 clones.

Unnamed student1: WAAAAAH? Are you serious I can barely make 3!

Itarito walks up to the students?

Itarito: Well then you had better start focusing more in class because that?s not what I heard the exam was?

Unnamed Student3: *walks to the conversation* well if it ain?t that then what is it?

Itarito: A written exam! 10 pages long and I hear the questions are even tougher!

Senjiito walks over to Itarito

Senjiito: Stop psyching them out Itarito?? (To others) He was exaggerating a bit it really isn?t that long?..2 pages and there are different sections.

Unnamed Student1: And I guess lord Hokage designed this?

Senjiito: Well yeah I s?pose.

Unnamed Student2: That?s a bit unfair then?

Senjiito: How so?

Itarito: Since you?re the son of the Hokage, your gonna know everything and your daddy is gonna pass you regardless we all know that!

Senjiito: That?s not true! All I know is the amount of pages there are I don?t know the answers! Honest!

Itarito: Yeah right!!!!

Proctor: All right you maggots?.stop dawdling and get in here NOW!!!! Or you?ll all fail!

Senjiito, Itarito and the rest of the students all race into the classroom?Itarito as always sits in his seat surrounded by girls and Senjiito sits in his usual seat next to Shikari Nara.

Senjiito: Hey Shikari?so do you think you?ll pass?

Shikari: Oh?Hey Senjiito?.yeah I think I?ll pass? you?

Senjiito: I don?t know? Dad said that he changed the test at the last second? all I hope is that they don?t pass me because I?m the Hokage?s son.

Shikari: Ok then well good luck.

Senjiito: Thanks, you too.

Everyone looks up as the door slides open and the Proctor enters the room

Proctor: Alright now listen cause im only gonna say this once?.
One by One each of you will be called into the back room and will sit the exam paper.
This paper will consist of 3 questions and you will only have 20 minutes to complete the paper. When you have finished the exam please neatly place it in the box at the desk.
Once finished you will be given a choice out of two options they are?
One - Go home.
Two - Participate in an activity at the training grounds.
When you come back please leave a note with me saying either 1 or 2?
Now will?

*Proctor looks at list*
?Shikari Nara please make her way to the back room.

Shikari gets out of her seat and heads toward the door?

Proctor: And also? all the questions on each paper are not the same. This is to ensure that there will be no cheating.

Shikari enters the backroom.

10 minutes later Shikari re-enters the main room and hands a note to the Proctor

Proctor: Very well?.
*looks at list*
Itarito Uchiha your up?

Itarito: Heh child?s play?

*Itarito enters the backroom and re-enters the main room in 17 min, walks over to the proctor and hands him a slip of paper, blows kisses at his fans and leaves the room*

2 hours pass by and finally Senjiito is called?

Senjiito: [thinks] I hope I pass? I hope I pass? I hope I pass

Senjiito enters the room?
The room is bare all except for a desk with another Proctor sitting at and a lone table with a sheet of paper.

Proctor: Please be seated?

Senjiito sits down at the table

I?m sure your aware that you have a time limit so please begin your time starts now!

Senjiito looks at the sheet?

[size=+1]Question 1.[/size]

Your opponent is from Amegakure, he has only 1 chakra nature type, which is water.
Using 2 jutsu which would be come a good combo to render this opponent useless?
Your opponent uses:

(Suiton: Teppoudama) - Water Style: Water Bullet

Type: Attack
Range: Short-Mid
Description: A large sphere of rotating water that is spit out of the user?s mouth that can blast a huge area leaving it soaked.


Senjiito: [written on page]
I would first use:

Fuuton: Hanachir Mai (Wind Style: Falling Petal Dance)

Type:Attack
Rank: C
Range:Short-Mid
Description: A vortex of wind that can be shape into a ball and blow at the opponent or a
spiraling jets stream that can push and blow away medium sized objects.


To blow the water back at my opponent, soaking him
And then I would use:

Raiton: Jibashi (Lightning Style: Electromagnetic Murder)

Type: Attack
Rank: C
Range: Short
Description: The user sends out a wave of thin lightning bolts from the hands that cling
to the opponent and shock him/her. Its powers vary from a simple shock to ripping
through solid rock. It can be used with water jutsu.


To electrocute my opponent.


[size=+1]Question 2.[/size]

You are trying to build a squad of 3 people, including yourself, to track down an A-rank criminal. Select 2 other people that would be valuable to this mission.

Senjiito: [written on page]
Ok first of all:
1. Senjiito Uzumaki- I have the ability to use the Byakugan which can see nearly 360 degrees. I also have the gentle fist style of fighting which allows me to attack the criminal?s chakra points rendering his jutsu.
2. Shikari Nara- Shikari is of the Nara clan so she can manipulate shadows. This means that she can hold down the criminal to stop further escape.
3. Kyshaa Inuzuka- Kyshaa would be valuable because he is a member of the Inuzuka clan so they are good at tracking. Also they are good at combos.


[size=+1]Question 3.[/size]

You are on a mission?
This is your scenario

Both of your teammates have been captured and you separated with your sensei at the beginning of the mission, he told you that no matter what happened you had to stay on mission.

You have two choices, they are
1. Obey your sensei?s orders and complete the mission and leave your friends to torture.
Or
2. Disobey your sensei?s orders and rescue your friends so all of you can complete the mission.
Choose one of the above.

Senjiito: [written] I would choose the second option.


Thank you completing this test. Your results will be given to you in a week or so.
____________________________________________________________________

Senjiito gets up out of his chair and, with his paper, places it neatly into the assigned box
He walks over to the Proctor

Senjiito: Uhhh I?m supposed to give the other Proctor a sheet?

The Proctor points to a piece of paper on the desk

Proctor: That is the only group left so take one...

Senjiito takes one from the pile; he then leaves the room and takes the piece of paper to the first Proctor

Proctor: Thank you due to undetermined events the second option has to be cancelled you have the rest of the day off?

[size=+2]To Be Continued in Chapter 2: The Results
[/size]
cooool loved it hope he got it right
 
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