Retry on my first Fan Fiction

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The lonely night

It was a dark lonely night in the street of Konoha when out of no where there was a loud explosion from over by the Hokage’s Mansion caused by two Akatsuki Members…

Kio Uchiha: ( with a smoky face) That was fun!!
Itachi Uchiha: Kio stop playing with your explosive powder we have work to do!
Kio Uchiha: Yes master Itachi!!

The two men the left the scene of the explosion and continued to walk through the village until they came across an door…

Itachi Uchiha: This is the place….
Kio Uchiha: Itachi what are we doing here again?
Itachi Uchiha: I told you before we left the hideout we are here to capture the Nine Tails Boy…
Kio Uchiha: o yea and how do we know this is where he is?
Itachi Uchiha: I can sense his chakra..

Itachi then kicks in the door to the house and walks in…

Kio Uchiha: Hello is anyone Home?
Itach Uchiha Keep it down you fool…
Kio Uchiha: Sorry

The Two Men then continue into the house until they reach a bedroom door

Itachi Uchiha: Are you Ready Kio?
Kio Uchiha: Anytime you are Itachi…

Itachi Uchiha opens the door to find Naruto asleep in his bed

Itachi Uchiha: Ok Kio grab Him!
Kio Uchiha: Yes sir!!

Kio then walks over to the bed and grabs Naruto and tries to pick him up but at that second a voice comes from over by the window

Kakashi Hatake: Stop right there you two….
Itachi Uchiha: Well if it isn’t the Copy Ninja Kakashi Hatake…
Kio Uchiha: So Itachi what do we do now?
Itachi Uchiha: Continue with what your doing ill take care of Kakashi..
Kio Uchiha: Yes Sir..

As Kio Uchiha goes to continue what he was doing Kakashi jumps at him a throws a powerful kick right at Kio’s Head

Kakashi Hatake: Your not leaving with him..

At that moment in time Kio Uchiha drops Naruto and wakes him up from his sleep to see that’s they are trying to kidnap him

Naruto Uzumaki:AHHHH what are you doing to me... Put me down..

Naruto then Kicks Kio Uchiha in the knee which causes Kio Uchiha to fall on one knee


Kio Uchiha: Hey you Little Brat That Hurt.... And you the weird guy with the one Sharingan Eyes you shouldnt be kicking people in the head...
Itachi Uchiha: Shut Up Kio cause now the only way we are leaving with the boy is by killing Kakashi...


Then loud footsteps are heard coming up the stairs and when the footsteps stop a man comes from around the corner....

Kakashi Hatake: How you get here so fast?
Yamato:I had a bad feeling in my stomach so i thought id check on Naruto..and it looks like i was right to do so..
Itachi Uchiha:Enought Talking give us the boy
Kakashi Hatake:You want him your gonna have to take him by force
Naruto Uzumaki: Kakashi Sensie......
Kio Uchiha:*Looks at Naruto* Your coming with us..

Kio Uchiha then grabs Naruto and jumps out the wind and start taking off with him

Kakashi Hatake:Yamato You stay and handle Itachi Ill get Naruto
Yamato:Right!!
Itachi Uchiha:Shall we get started?

Kakashi Hatake jumps out the wind in Presuite of Kio Uchiha And Naruto

Yamato:You will die here today Itachi Uchiha...
Itachi Uchiha:Prove It!

Right at that moment in time Itachi Activates His Mangekyō Sharingan and kicks Yamato out the window as Yamato is falling he does several handseal and make a tree emerge from the ground as he rotates his body and lands on a branch.....

Yamato:Your not gonna defeat me that easily Itachi
Itachi Uchiha:Hmmmmm....

Itachi Then does several handseal and takes a deep breath in a release a giant fireball right at Yamato and right before it Hits Him Yamato Releases a equally Powerful sphere of water to collide with the fireball and then Yamato Jumps out of the tree and looks at Itachi...

Yamato:Like i told you a few minutes ago you can't beat ,e easily.. do you honestly think i am going to just let you kill me? Well do you?
Itachi Uchiha:Let me tell you something.. when you are over confident you will lose..

At the same moment in time somewhere in the Forest of Death Kakashi Hatake and Kio Uchiha's Battle has just began... while Naruto lays Knocked out on the ground
*Loud Explosion*

Kakashi Hatake: I wouldnt Except any lest from a Uchiha..
Kio Uchiha: And i wouldnt ecpect anything less from you Kakashi Hatake... But enough small talk lets finish this *Looks at Naruto's body and thinks (If you only knew)*
Kakashi Hatake:So lets end this now

at that moment in time Kakashi throw a kunia at Kio as the kunia is flying at Kio... Kio pulls out a kunia and deflects it and charges at Kakashi activacting His Mangekyō Sharingan Kio does four Handseals and releases several large fireballs at Kakashi and throws five Kunia at him

*Loud Boom*

Kakashi Hatake:That almost killed me.. too bad you didnt use your brain Kio or i would have died.. a Ninja who doesnt use his intellegence on the Battle field is useless....
Kio Uchiha:Hmm you talk alot...

Kio Uchiha then makes four clones of himself and runs at Kakashi and has each of his clones start throw kunia at Kakashi being hidden behind his clones Kio Uchiha jumps into the air and throws a powerful kick to Kakashi's neck to which Kakashi throws up his arms and grabs Kio's foot....

Kakashi Hatake:*Looks at Kio* Nice try

at that moment Kakashi swings Kio around and throws him and while Kio is flying throught the air Kakashi charges up a lightening sblade and actives his Mangekyō Sharingan then....


Too Be Continue In Part Two....


 
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It was alright, some minor mistakes, but at least it didn't look like a third grader was the author xd
I don't particularly like the way you had the text centered, but it is your choice. And I think the name Kio sounds a bit like a girl, at least, that is what I thought when I started to read, and then it said 2 men, and I was like "What...?!"
 
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