[Approved] Raion Kuro-ブラックライオン

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Raion Kuro-ブラックライオン:
The Black Lion, OBSIDIAN:
Male:
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Senju:
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Raion is 6'4", he has very dark skin and is very muscular. He has very long arms and scars on his back,stomach,chest,and biceps. He has dread locks with a slight scar over his right temple :

Personality
Raion is a very funny and charming guy. He is easy to get along with and has many friends. Though he is very friendly he has few close friends as he is not quick to trust anyone. He is very tactical when it comes to battle. He is quick to anger thought and is at times manipulative. When it comes time to battle he is ruthless and efficient with restrained ferocity. He used to berserk but under the training of chiruku he has reined in his anger and learned to harness it through "Senzoku no Sai" which he has yet to master:


Village Info.
Village of Birth- Raion was born in the land of Whirpool:
Village of Alliance-Konohagakure:

Rank//Chakra Info.
Ninja Rank-Chuunin:
Specialty-none
Elements
Water:

Your ninjutsu
(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)
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(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.
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(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.
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(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.
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(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
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(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).
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(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)



Background Info.
History
Raion was born in the land of the whirlpool to a very wealthy family. When he was three his family moved to konohagakure to expand their business. Two weeks later his home country was wiped out.His parents wanted him to live a comfortable life and decided to send him on the monastery path and avoid the life of the ninja. Due to this perceived weakness the other kids picked on him all the time as he was rich and a foreigner.
As he grew up his parents business of running medicinal shops flourished.Rival companies grew nervous that his parents would make to much money and take them out of business.They hired an assassin and requested the heads of his parents. When Raion came home one day from school he found his family and their servants all slaughtered. In the middle of the room was a broken spear. stabbed through both his parents.
Learning of his parents demise Chiriku took in the young Raion and trained him. Through chirikus tutelage Raion learned to harness his rage and not succumb to anger. Raion was on the promising path to becoming a great monk when his master Chiriku was taken from him. On the day his master fell to Hidan and kakazu of Akatsuki, Raion was visiting the grave of his parents as it was the anniversary of their death. when he returned and found his master and fellow students murdered Raion went into the temple and took up the spear of the tengu god statue, the tengu symbolize the demon harbringers of war . And that is what Raion has become for all who would oppose him.:


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~Approved~ I fixed the vids and have fun RPing
 
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whew that is my first attempt at a bio...i know its been a long time coming haha. Go easy on me admins lol. And yeah i know on the bio its says genin but under my avatar it says chunnin cause at the time i posted it i was a genin
 

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1. Bolding and underlining the entire bio is going to make it difficult to read for the mods. Try to make only the titles bold.

2. Is that your bio's picture at the top? If it is, a bird man isn't going to be allowed.

3. If you're a chuunin now just edit the bio to say you're a chuunin.

4. If this is your first bio you have no specialty so that should be removed, and I don't know what your specialty is. It sounds like a custom thing.

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spear of the tengu god statue
This sounds like a custom weapon. It should probably be submitted there.


Other than that ti seems fine. ^_^
 

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oh ok. I will get rid of thee underlining and change the chunnin rank. The bird creature is not my character lol its the statue listed in the story. I will fix the typo. Also the specil;ity isnt a custom its a special ability that is in the anime and manga. It used by the fire monk chiriku in his fight with hidan and kakazu heres the link
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but the fact is you are not chiruku and you cantt use them untill a sensei trains you in them,plus you havent trained yet you dont know anything,how come you a speciality...if youy want it too be approved keep your bio simple and plain.
 

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i will.Im just listing it there i know i cant use it yet lol. I thought i just had to list it there since i plan to have it sometime in the future. In the bio thread it said we are to list our kgs and that seemed like one to me. Honest mistake.
 

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Remove specialty, I don't allow first bio's to have specialties unless something trivial.

Also that spear is just a normal spear, if not it has to be submitted in the Custom Jutsu thread and only when it's approved you can have it in your bio.
 
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