Prologue - Rebellion

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Crade

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General Morvent. This name struck fear across the world. Known as a dictator to ensure total submission to his allegiance. Being one of the strongest beings ever, he put everyone into fear. No secret was ever safe. The more people you knew the more danger you were asking for. General Morvent had more spies than he could remember. He has a total lockdown on every conversation. He created an army so strong that no one dared to even lay a finger on the goverment. In a blink of an eye you would be arrested for even thinking about rebelling. The only people who felt safe were the military. But that was because they thought they were fighting for a greater good. With chaos under control the better. General Morvent managed to create stories and missions for the military that would send in the army to kill or arrest a family, and with the family gone, the money was General Morvents for the taking, and with General Morvent in control of the money, he could do whatever he pleased. Its as if everyone was brainwashed with his power and his greed. No one was allowed to live anymore. Every day, at noon, you could hear the chants, all hail MORVENT.​
 

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This is really good so far. =D It's a cool idea. I'd watch your tense though. You switch from past to present a few times, and it's best to stick with just one so there's continuity. Overall, I liked it. :win:
 
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