Prodigies Reborn!: Chapter 5

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The five shinobi have been walking northward in the forest for a while and has no idea where they're going. Minato walks slightly ahead of the others, acting as the leader.
Shindo: Umm, Minato, where exactly are we going anyway?
Itachi, Keiko, Shindo, and Aizu stares at Minato, waiting for an answer.
Minato: *nervously* Don't worry, guys. Slow your roll, we've only been walking for a couple minutes.
Keiko: Minutes? Try a couple hours. Who made you the captain, anyway? I'm the oldest.
Minato: *mumbles* But, you're a girl.
Keiko: *Balls fist* What was that?!
Minato: *playfully flinches* Nothing!
Itachi: I have an idea. I remember that Jugo guy's chakra, maybe I can sense it if I concentrate hard enough.
Itachi tries to find Jugo by sensing his chakra, but it's no use.
Itachi: Damn, they must be long-gone by now. I've got nothing.
Keiko: Lemme give it a try. I remember how he smelled, his stench was like nothing I've whiffed before. It was kind of nature-ish.
Being half Inuzuka and inheriting Kakashi's great sense of smell, Keiko has an unbelievable sense of smell.
Keiko: I've got it! Their trail starts over there, to the northeast.
She flinches when she smells something unpleasant, the scent of Karin's dead body....
Keiko: Come on, guys.
She leads them to Jugo and Suigetsu's trail and they start to follow it. They continue to walk for 30 minutes, but they stop when they see something.
Aizu: Whoa, I'm not liking the look of this..
Minato: Me either..
The trail has lead them to an opening of the forest, a large grassfield. It looks like something out of a nightmare. Skulls and bones of humans lay scattered across the ground. Headbands belonging to various villages are spread throughout the field as well.
Shindo: 12 o'clock. Two powerful shinobi are approaching from the northern part of the forest.
All five of them looks at the trees, to the north. They ready themselves for battle. Then, two men enters the field, 40 feet away. They stop, examining the five, as a predator would do to their prey.
Minato: Umm, I don't think they are shinobi...
The men are naked except for shorts made of tiger's fur. They are mid-age, tall, and bulky. Shaggy, long hair flows down to the waist and whiskers sprout from their cheeks. They wear no headband, seeming to have no loyalty to any village.
Itachi: Are they human?
Minato: I don't know and I don't care. All I know is that they're dangerous.
The two beastly men are the twin sons of Kinkaku, the Gold brother. Long ago, Kinkaku raped a woman in the Hidden Cloud Village. Being the savage that he was, Kinkaku didn't care for the woman or the fact they she was pregnant with his children, so he abandoned her. The twins possessed too much chakra for the woman's body to handle, so she died giving birth to them. Thinking they were demons, the villagers exiled the babies into the forest, southwest of the Hidden Cloud. They raised themselves in the forest, feeding on animals. As they grew older and stronger, they started to kill any human who enters their territory. They have never lived in a civilized manner, so they barely know how to speak, but they've picked up just a hand-full of words from their victims. Also, they've learned some words from Suigetsu, Karin, and Jugo. Jugo has a way of communicating with them, being talented with nature and all. So, as long as someone is with Jugo, the twins will not attempt to kill. Oddly enough, the twins' skins resembles metals like their father and uncle did. One has dark greyish skin like Titanium and the other has shiny skin that looks like platinum.
Keiko: *whispers* No one move, we don't know if they want to kill or us not.
Minato: Hello! There's skulls everywhere, I doubt that want to have a nice conversation and invite us to dinner.
Itachi: Yeah, looks like they want us as dinner.
The twins activates their lightning armor.
Minato: They use lightning, eh? Looks like Shindo and I better take em on, our wind jutsu will tear em to shreds.
Keiko: Like Itachi, Aizu, and I are going to let you two have all the fun.
Minato: Okay. Me and Aizu will take, umm.....Titan. Keiko, you, Itachi, and Shindo take on..err....Platinum.
Itachi: Very creative names, bro.....
Minato: Hey! That's the best I could come up with in this situation. So, everyone cool with that?
Itachi, Keiko, Aizu, and Shindo nods.
Titan: Jugo's....friends?
Minato: Err...no..
Platinum: Then..you..all..go..in..our..bellies!
Then, the first battle of their journey begins.

Author's Note
Titan and Platinum talks like Tarzan btw. That's why I put "..." in-between their words. Well, that's all I've got to say. I hope you guys liked it!xd
 

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I hope Kishi sees this and get's inspired for a spinoff/extra series :D. Dude you seriously gotta consider making manga and publishing it xd. Well for chapters 4 and 5 I'm liking the development and seriously this chapter set up a huge epic battle for the next one i hope :D +rep!!
 

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Ok.....not bad......but not that great either:p
But make sure you put a lot of details into the battle ok.....that would make the chapter interesting:)
 

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Ok.....not bad......but not that great either:p
But make sure you put a lot of details into the battle ok.....that would make the chapter interesting:)
Wow, you're a tough one. But, okay, I'll take your critic. Thanks:)
Like I said awesomeeee =DD
Haha thanks:D
I hope Kishi sees this and get's inspired for a spinoff/extra series :D. Dude you seriously gotta consider making manga and publishing it xd. Well for chapters 4 and 5 I'm liking the development and seriously this chapter set up a huge epic battle for the next one i hope :D +rep!!
Lol I wish I could talk to Kishi somehow. I've always wanted to go to Japan anyway ever since I've seen Tokyo Drift. Lol. Also, I'm going to start a story one day and have it published as a book. I'm not really comfortable with making a manga, I don't have much expertise in that area. I'm taking 3 classes in my senior year of high school to learn how to write better. Within 10 years, I hope to make an original story that'll be at least as big as the Percy Jackson series. Thanks dude for being such a great fan:D
 
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