Passage to happiness

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Chapter 1: The Awakening of a Dream

In the town of Kurak, a little girl grew up as a slave, to be born in and die as one. Her name was Twilight, she was a Neko girl of the age of six-teen. Her family had all perished but her sister Jessica. The two worked under slavery law as child playmates. Twilight was worried and constantly crieing beacuse in three months she would be old enough to be bought as a *** slave for high paying buyers. She would then get seperated from Jessica, which made it hurt worse, She wouldent tell Jessica this beacuse shes only thirteen and she doesent understand much about whats going on.

"Kimmy, whats wrong? Why are you crieing agian? It makes me sad" Jessica says as she puckers her lips. a sad emotion painted all over her face, in a saddened tone of voice.

"Oh its nothing" Twilight forces a smile as she sniffs twice wipeing her tears away from her eyes. "It's nothing, Umm... Jessy can I ask you something?" Twilight asks with a sad serious tone of voice.

Jessica nods, "Mmhmm" Jessica humms. "Oh course you can" Jessy sits in Twilights lap laying her head agianst Twilights breast, looking up at her.

Twilight smiles and looks down upon Jessica "Have you ever heard the story about the Segragation War and the Passage to Happiness with us Nekos?" Twilight says softly as Twilight strokes Jessicas hair with her fingers.

Jessica shook her head, brushing Twilights breast and begins to say "No... but.... you seem to talk about it alot" Jessica frowns as she finishes the sentence. "And, and I was wondering... What it is."

Twilight smiles and kisses Jessica's forehead "Ill tell you about it then, Its my favorite story" Twilight begins to tell the story "Long ago, this place was free, full of Neko, until the Elven demention currupted and came here. Elves of all kinds came here takeing over our lands, we fought at the Neko Revoulution, but we lost greatly, Then we were taken in as slaves, horrible time this was for us, But then a clan of elves the only non-currupted elves revolted upon this slavery and gathered as many Neko to be free, and as many as wanted to fight, thus the War of Segragation began blood was spilled everywhere, but we lost this one, too many elven clans agianst one it was 86-2 includeing us. But after the war, a survivring elf of that clan told them to find the Passage of Happiness, and they will meet them at the entrance, and he was assassinated right then and there. Now both races are looking for the Passage of Happiness, as the elves call it the Passage to Draco`Elvanic's gates."

Jessica looked amazed and enjoyed the fairy tale but then asked Twilight, "Whats the Passage to Happiness?"

Twilight replied as calm and serious as can be "A part of this world, this demention hidden from all the world, where Neko, Elves, Dragons, and all other species of this demention live together in peace and Harmony, and soon, very soon, I am going to run off and try and go find it, and Jessica if you want to come with me, nows the time to say it" Twilight looks into Jessicas eyes.

"I will" Jessica says, hugging Twilight tightly "I will go with you Kimmy"

"I'll begin makeing preperation tomorrow" Twilight says, Kissing Jessicas forhead smileing....
 

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Just a few errors here and there. Sixteen is one word, and you may want to change "crieing" to crying. Also, when you're adding the suffix "ing" to the end of a word that ends with an e, you automatically drop the e. Example: make becomes making.
 
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Just a few errors here and there. Sixteen is one word, and you may want to change "crieing" to crying. Also, when you're adding the suffix "ing" to the end of a word that ends with an e, you automatically drop the e. Example: make becomes making.
got it , next time wont happen
 
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