[Adventure] Over in a Flash of Red Chapter 6

[FaHaD 5212]

That's one heck of a reply xd I'll reply to the former part though

I was thinking... Since I have revealed some preview materials, why don't you do the same? =D XD Should spice things up a bit

Oh, and if we keep going like this, you will finally hit 2 pages with this one. And that's before the contest has started! =p

As for your post, we should all strive to become better, always, no matter what, no matter the stake! :hyper:

Well, I guess I could do that. I do have ideas, but I'm not sure its a good idea as I won't be able to focus much.

Finally, this fic is getting a little more popular XD.

That's true.

Your work is very likeable and if someone didn’t like it then something must be wrong with them or they simply don’t like Naruto

You’re such a considerable person-thank you so much for in depth explanation, it was extremely helpful and I now completely understand. And I like the spin you’re giving to your version of Naruto =D That’s really wonderful to hear and I really look forward to how you continue to shape his character! :hooray:

Thank you again for the compliment, my friend

Thanks.

No need to thank me. After all, how can I leave a precious reader in the dark?

No problem XD.

 

[Michael92]

Well, I guess I could do that. I do have ideas, but I'm not sure its a good idea as I won't be able to focus much.

Finally, this fic is getting a little more popular XD.

That's true.

It's all about formulating it the right way, haha. I've been giving some real scenes preview in the past, but I wanted to avoid that this time. As the matter of fact is, I haven't written anything from the next ones, so I had to give some previews from my notes instead =p

Yep, we even hit the 2nd page too I'm gonna go for a 3rd page with mine xd Still some comments to go though, even to beat my previous one, but I'm not that far away. I seem to have a pattern where each new chapter gets more comments than the last one, so let's see if I'll be able to copy that a 5th time now xP

 

[FaHaD 5212]

It's all about formulating it the right way, haha. I've been giving some real scenes preview in the past, but I wanted to avoid that this time. As the matter of fact is, I haven't written anything from the next ones, so I had to give some previews from my notes instead =p

Yep, we even hit the 2nd page too I'm gonna go for a 3rd page with mine xd Still some comments to go though, even to beat my previous one, but I'm not that far away. I seem to have a pattern where each new chapter gets more comments than the last one, so let's see if I'll be able to copy that a 5th time now xP

Well, I don't really have any notes and I don't think that my mind is up to making some at the moment.

Good luck with that.

 

[Michael92]

Well, I don't really have any notes and I don't think that my mind is up to making some at the moment.

Good luck with that.

Haha I see. But then again, you're kind of bound by exams and school while I'm not (except for deciding my future and what to study this fall that is, but it's less stressful in a way).

Thanks I guess xd

PS: Seems like your chapter got a 5 star rating... Guess who rated you?

 

[FaHaD 5212]

Haha I see. But then again, you're kind of bound by exams and school while I'm not (except for deciding my future and what to study this fall that is, but it's less stressful in a way).

Thanks I guess xd

PS: Seems like your chapter got a 5 star rating... Guess who rated you?

In a way, I guess.

No prob. XD.

It was Batman, XD. (Lol, its probably you, right?)

 

[Michael92]

In a way, I guess.

No prob. XD.

It was Batman, XD. (Lol, its probably you, right?)

Lmao, nobody cares about ratings these days, not even sure if people knows about the input anymore xd It was a thing back in the days though, and it seems more flashier with 5 stars than without a thing. Might even draw attention, haha

 

[FaHaD 5212]

True, it's quite the eye catcher.

 

[Michael92]

True, it's quite the eye catcher.

xd By the way, that same member from before commented on your first chapter if you haven't seen it yet
You have to come up with something for me to reply to longer than what you wrote bro, I'm working on thin paper here XD

 

[FaHaD 5212]

xd By the way, that same member from before commented on your first chapter if you haven't seen it yet
You have to come up with something for me to reply to longer than what you wrote bro, I'm working on thin paper here XD

Yeah I noticed that but didn't have spare time to reply to him.

Hey, it's equally hard on me XD. How about this, you tell me what you expect in the future of the story and I give you a brief walk through (won't do anything to spoil)? I hope this is enough ground for you to stand on until the next page is reached (XD, that's gonna be the first time a thread of mine exceeds one page).

 

[Michael92]

Yeah I noticed that but didn't have spare time to reply to him.

Hey, it's equally hard on me XD. How about this, you tell me what you expect in the future of the story and I give you a brief walk through (won't do anything to spoil)? I hope this is enough ground for you to stand on until the next page is reached (XD, that's gonna be the first time a thread of mine exceeds one page).

I saw that you did by now, and your first thread also got to the second page So you have already exceeded a page on two of your threads bro, unless you were talking by two? My second chapter ever reach 106 comments I believe which makes up 5-6 pages I believe xd

But I already did say what I think will happen The massacre, the two of them hooking up, some type of war perhaps?

 

[FaHaD 5212]

I saw that you did by now, and your first thread also got to the second page So you have already exceeded a page on two of your threads bro, unless you were talking by two? My second chapter ever reach 106 comments I believe which makes up 5-6 pages I believe xd

But I already did say what I think will happen The massacre, the two of them hooking up, some type of war perhaps?

No, none of them have exceeded two, I checked. This is the only thread I have which made thirty posts including this one. 'Talking by two'? Man you're already famous, it's no wonder you exceed a page every time and make to three pages most of the time XD.

I don't recall that, but oh well . Not exactly off but there's a lot more potential outcomes. Say, I do the massacre, proceed to the end of the chunin exams my way and kill off Nana, or I make Naruto go rouge with Nana. You probably already know that I'm adding another Uzumaki. This makes for unlimited possibilities.

I haven't exactly planned that far. However I expect it to go like this, Mea, modified massacre (hint=power-up), Madara (I'm not gonna explain, it'd be equal to spoiling), dark path to the chunin exams, character death (maybe), loyal to Konoha yet against it + rouge, and so on.

If you want me to spoil it, just ask . I'm going to leave NB for roughly three weeks (inactivity). I'll occasionally drop by and chat. I'll leave a PM for the spoiler (you probably won't ask, can't tell XD).

Here's a long reply.

 

[Michael92]

No, none of them have exceeded two, I checked. This is the only thread I have which made thirty posts including this one. 'Talking by two'? Man you're already famous, it's no wonder you exceed a page every time and make to three pages most of the time XD.

I don't recall that, but oh well . Not exactly off but there's a lot more potential outcomes. Say, I do the massacre, proceed to the end of the chunin exams my way and kill off Nana, or I make Naruto go rouge with Nana. You probably already know that I'm adding another Uzumaki. This makes for unlimited possibilities.

I haven't exactly planned that far. However I expect it to go like this, Mea, modified massacre (hint=power-up), Madara (I'm not gonna explain, it'd be equal to spoiling), dark path to the chunin exams, character death (maybe), loyal to Konoha yet against it + rouge, and so on.

If you want me to spoil it, just ask . I'm going to leave NB for roughly three weeks (inactivity). I'll occasionally drop by and chat. I'll leave a PM for the spoiler (you probably won't ask, can't tell XD).

Here's a long reply.

See my PS at the bottom of this post before reading on xd

But you're already on the second page xd I thought that was the thing, to reach 2nd page. So you were indeed talking about reaching a 3rd one ehh. Well to tell you the honest truth, that's ultra super rare in the FF section, at least for the past 3 years xD
Every time? xD I just now reached the 3rd page with my latest one, and I tell you that it's the first time that has happen in ages bro xD None of my last 3 series hit 3 pages with any chapters. Last time I hit 3 pages was with the 27th chapter of TLSoK back in August 2012, and it was probably only due to its enormous size xd In fact, none of my 6 parts chapters of the Series Finale, nor any of the chapters of TLSoK's Legacy (except the 1st which hit 2 pages) even hit the 2nd page bro!!! xd Yeah I just check, lmao. My Series Finale part 5 hit 15 comments which was the one with the most! XD

It was way before your time bro xD It's kind of insane to think about it now though when I look back.
My 1st chapter hit 63 replies and 4 pages, my 2nd actually only hit 2 pages and 36 replies, my 3rd hit 5 pages and 86 replies, my 4th hit 5 pages and 85 replies, my 5th hit 4 pages and 76 replies, my 6th hit 4 pages and 67 replies, and so forth. So yeah, the average was 4 or 5 pages back then xD And it was in truth my 13th chapter that hit 6 pages and 105 replies xD I had 34 posts in it though XD

Check it out :

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See all the readers?!?!?!?! XD

I see I see. As much as it would be fun to discuss spoilers, I think it's better to leave it up in the air. Gonna be more fun to read that way

Oh and yeah, I hit the 3rd it seem xD

PS: Maybe you have different settings than me? XD I have 20 posts per page. Seems like you have 25 since you said you just hit the second one? Or maybe even 30 since your post was the 31st

- Just checked. I got the forum default option which is 20 posts per page. Don't know if it works for you but here:

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If not, just hit general settings in your control panel. You can chose every 10 from 10 to 30 per page + 5 per page as well xd
Choose the Forum Default option if anything.

 

[FaHaD 5212]

See my PS at the bottom of this post before reading on xd

But you're already on the second page xd I thought that was the thing, to reach 2nd page. So you were indeed talking about reaching a 3rd one ehh. Well to tell you the honest truth, that's ultra super rare in the FF section, at least for the past 3 years xD
Every time? xD I just now reached the 3rd page with my latest one, and I tell you that it's the first time that has happen in ages bro xD None of my last 3 series hit 3 pages with any chapters. Last time I hit 3 pages was with the 27th chapter of TLSoK back in August 2012, and it was probably only due to its enormous size xd In fact, none of my 6 parts chapters of the Series Finale, nor any of the chapters of TLSoK's Legacy (except the 1st which hit 2 pages) even hit the 2nd page bro!!! xd Yeah I just check, lmao. My Series Finale part 5 hit 15 comments which was the one with the most! XD

It was way before your time bro xD It's kind of insane to think about it now though when I look back.
My 1st chapter hit 63 replies and 4 pages, my 2nd actually only hit 2 pages and 36 replies, my 3rd hit 5 pages and 86 replies, my 4th hit 5 pages and 85 replies, my 5th hit 4 pages and 76 replies, my 6th hit 4 pages and 67 replies, and so forth. So yeah, the average was 4 or 5 pages back then xD And it was in truth my 13th chapter that hit 6 pages and 105 replies xD I had 34 posts in it though XD

Check it out :

You must be registered for see links

See all the readers?!?!?!?! XD

I see I see. As much as it would be fun to discuss spoilers, I think it's better to leave it up in the air. Gonna be more fun to read that way

Oh and yeah, I hit the 3rd it seem xD

PS: Maybe you have different settings than me? XD I have 20 posts per page. Seems like you have 25 since you said you just hit the second one? Or maybe even 30 since your post was the 31st

- Just checked. I got the forum default option which is 20 posts per page. Don't know if it works for you but here:

You must be registered for see links

If not, just hit general settings in your control panel. You can chose every 10 from 10 to 30 per page + 5 per page as well xd
Choose the Forum Default option if anything.

Yeah, I had 30 posts per page. Changed it to twenty so I can get happy over multiple pages faster:x3:.

Yay, now I have many multiple pages XD.

Well you're kinda a celebrity in the fanfiction business on the base so I'm not surprised to be honest.

I see, by the way, by Madara I meant the real Madara. That's all I'm gonna say, that is if you don't want more.

 

[Michael92]

Yeah, I had 30 posts per page. Changed it to twenty so I can get happy over multiple pages faster:x3:.

Yay, now I have many multiple pages XD.

Well you're kinda a celebrity in the fanfiction business on the base so I'm not surprised to be honest.

I see, by the way, by Madara I meant the real Madara. That's all I'm gonna say, that is if you don't want more.

I knew it xd I found it funny that you stated not having reach a certain page number before now Lol.

I had a feeling you did mean him. Isn't he like your favorite character or something?

 

[ROHAN]

Thoughts so far :-

I can't help but think you are making Naruto a broken character in your fanfic. Naruto is already seven years old and he knows Sharingan, Wood Release, Uzumaki seals and I think even Blaze Release Kenjutsu. On top of that he has Kuruma and the ability to get Rinnegan. If Naruto has all these abilities, he would literally defeat all enemies in the story. The only option is to make the enemies stronger then Naruto, but that will break the story even more. As far as I can see this progressing, Naruto's OP'ness would create many problems in the later chapters.

Sure, you can nerf him, but it would invalidate all his training attempts to get the said powers. The nerfs that would make sense though is Kuruma getting extracted or Naruto losing his Sharingan to Danzo.

Unless you intend to make him a "Undefeated Super Powerhouse" like Rai in Noblesse, then it does makes sense as to why Naruto has so many OP powers.

Also, it would have better in the context of the story if it was "Uzumaki" Naruto rather than "Uchiha" Naruto. By calling him Uchiha, you seamlessly merged him into the Uchiha Clan. If he had stayed Uzumaki, you could have elaborated more on the Identity crisis that Naruto faces and his position within the two contrasting pillars of Konoha : Uchiha or Senju ?

 

[FaHaD 5212]

Thoughts so far :-

I can't help but think you are making Naruto a broken character in your fanfic. Naruto is already seven years old and he knows Sharingan, Wood Release, Uzumaki seals and I think even Blaze Release Kenjutsu. On top of that he has Kuruma and the ability to get Rinnegan. If Naruto has all these abilities, he would literally defeat all enemies in the story. The only option is to make the enemies stronger then Naruto, but that will break the story even more. As far as I can see this progressing, Naruto's OP'ness would create many problems in the later chapters.

Sure, you can nerf him, but it would invalidate all his training attempts to get the said powers. The nerfs that would make sense though is Kuruma getting extracted or Naruto losing his Sharingan to Danzo.

Unless you intend to make him a "Undefeated Super Powerhouse" like Rai in Noblesse, then it does makes sense as to why Naruto has so many OP powers.

Also, it would have better in the context of the story if it was "Uzumaki" Naruto rather than "Uchiha" Naruto. By calling him Uchiha, you seamlessly merged him into the Uchiha Clan. If he had stayed Uzumaki, you could have elaborated more on the Identity crisis that Naruto faces and his position within the two contrasting pillars of Konoha : Uchiha or Senju ?

I'm really glad you pointed out what you think are flaws. About his skill-set, his future opponents will be crazy strong so his development has to be fine-tuned as well. Besides, look at Itachi and Kakashi who were around Naruto's current level at his current age. Now about his skill-set, let me correct the breakdown for you. He has a two-tomoe Sharingan, Mokuton, Intermediate (Konoha) level seals (the most basic Uzumaki seals), he does not have Blaze Release Kenjutsu. The Kenjutsu style is the one Shisui uses in the game Naruto Shippuden: Ultimate Ninja Storm Revolution

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. Now onto Kurama, I have plans for him that might be considered spoilers if I tell you now, also, the Rinnegan is something which will come in the Shippuden Time. Naruto's Genin Days will be completely different from Canon as such I feel that he won't be 'too strong' and I do intend to make him lose fights.

You'll have to wait and see how I will nerf him then.

No, he won't be undefeated.

Naruto is an anomaly that shouldn't have existed, as such not only those around him but he himself as well will question his identity. As far as surnames go, I have the perfect one in store for when Naruto is aware of it.

I hope I cleared all of your confusions, if you didn't get something, feel free to ask

 

[ROHAN]

I'm really glad you pointed out what you think are flaws. About his skill-set, his future opponents will be crazy strong so his development has to be fine-tuned as well. Besides, look at Itachi and Kakashi who were around Naruto's current level at his current age. Now about his skill-set, let me correct the breakdown for you. He has a two-tomoe Sharingan, Mokuton, Intermediate (Konoha) level seals (the most basic Uzumaki seals), he does not have Blaze Release Kenjutsu. The Kenjutsu style is the one Shisui uses in the game Naruto Shippuden: Ultimate Ninja Storm Revolution

You must be registered for see links

. Now onto Kurama, I have plans for him that might be considered spoilers if I tell you now, also, the Rinnegan is something which will come in the Shippuden Time. Naruto's Genin Days will be completely different from Canon as such I feel that he won't be 'too strong' and I do intend to make him lose fights.

You'll have to wait and see how I will nerf him then.

No, he won't be undefeated.

Naruto is an anomaly that shouldn't have existed, as such not only those around him but he himself as well will question his identity. As far as surnames go, I have the perfect one in store for when Naruto is aware of it.

I hope I cleared all of your confusions, if you didn't get something, feel free to ask

Well, well, well; I will be interested in how you handle them OP Powers. :Sparks: