Nothing Is What It Seems Chapter 14

[Bodhisattva]

Nicely done~ xd Good luck with the novel version!

 

[Seffy]

Nicely done~ xd Good luck with the novel version!

Yeah this one I didn't even really feel it. It was basically throw stuff together and see where it goes :/ I've already started the novel verison of it, which is one of the many reasons I haven't been on lately. So far it's turning out way better than the ff up here ^_^ I'm so proud! :hug: ty for reading it! <3

 

[Reborn]

Apparently AIDS isn't a worry for them if they're out here drinking blood xd. Seems like a sadistic ritual xd jk, In earlier ancient cultures that wasn't an uncommon practice, the whole drinking of blood think.

This chapter seemed shorter but still well put together, it got the perfect amount of info across, I was pissed when Trevor said he didn't know the intent, that he just murdered because he was told to. I didn't hate the fact that he did it in cold blood, I can sleep with that peacfully at night xd, but the fact that you had it build up like that in the last chapter...and now he doesn't know :T_T: why you torture me sensei :T_T:

Wasn't much interested in the part after that until we turned back to Liz, and Anillia (beautiful name by the way ) which capsulated my interest when we had the ending with "my brother" and then the shamefullness of something intresting she was hiding about the subject. very titillating

 

[Seffy]

Apparently AIDS isn't a worry for them if they're out here drinking blood xd. Seems like a sadistic ritual xd jk, In earlier ancient cultures that wasn't an uncommon practice, the whole drinking of blood think.

This chapter seemed shorter but still well put together, it got the perfect amount of info across, I was pissed when Trevor said he didn't know the intent, that he just murdered because he was told to. I didn't hate the fact that he did it in cold blood, I can sleep with that peacfully at night xd, but the fact that you had it build up like that in the last chapter...and now he doesn't know :T_T: why you torture me sensei :T_T:

Wasn't much interested in the part after that until we turned back to Liz, and Anillia (beautiful name by the way ) which capsulated my interest when we had the ending with "my brother" and then the shamefullness of something intresting she was hiding about the subject. very titillating

yeah sometimes you have to show the boring things....at least I was able to get the interest back at the end. In my novel version I'm thinking about having more tension between sophia and vincent. lol yeah it's a common ritual back in the old days which is why I felt like it was perfect. Especially in a small kingdom that didn't except actions like that. Trevor didn't really do it because he was told to, more so the pay was good, and he enjoyed the thrill of it. He's a thrill seeker lol. Trevor doesn't really like too be told what to do >.>

 

[Reborn]

yeah sometimes you have to show the boring things....at least I was able to get the interest back at the end. In my novel version I'm thinking about having more tension between sophia and vincent. lol yeah it's a common ritual back in the old days which is why I felt like it was perfect. Especially in a small kingdom that didn't except actions like that. Trevor didn't really do it because he was told to, more so the pay was good, and he enjoyed the thrill of it. He's a thrill seeker lol. Trevor doesn't really like too be told what to do >.>

I don't get it though, Vincint is being sort of touchy with everybody in these next couple of chapters, I feel bad for Sophia though, she was thrown in here now she's going home alone without a man xd

Sophia: story of my life, I go on life altering trek with a man to show him I'm down for anything and he has me dragging all around to save some other trick *sigh* I should never listen to my mother xd

 

[Seffy]

Vincent is touchy because his Elizabeth isn't at his side. He's lashing out at people because he's pissed lol. :rofl: Sophia is a rather clingy and annoying character though.

 

[Reborn]

Vincent is touchy because his Elizabeth isn't at his side. He's lashing out at people because he's pissed lol. :rofl: Sophia is a rather clingy and annoying character though.

Why do that to her :shrug: she never hurt anybody xd. although it pales in comparison on what I've done to my characters, especially the main ones.

Bonds: made the protagonist a Jinchuuriki who was hated by everybody, and was isolated as such. Made him appear as if he was a stoic but in actuality he deeply loved his village and died for them without anybody ever truely caring about his sacrifice.

Blood: Although still going on, the protagonist is blamed for the death of his mother, simply by being born, all because his biological father raped his mother, he's a bastard (in the literal sense) orphaned, hated by both his sisters, an attempt by one of his sisters on his life was taken, and he still loves them and for those who read Bonds, they know how the story ends with his character

Shichiyo Gaiden...: Oh, you'll see

I do some horrible things to my characters, I have a high cruelty complex in my writing, I don't stress physical pain but mental and emotional pain which is more hard hitting on the mood of the story if I do say so myself...and I say so myself because nobody eles has said anything except "good job"

Spoiler

GOOD JOB ON WHAT?!! :T_T: Tell me what I did a good job in! It can't be everything, there are boud to be flaws, you must have a favorite part, you must have a least favorite part! TELL ME :T_T:

just venting sowwy sensei for the spam

 

[Kuroi Honoo]

Trevor is really something. He is ruthless and cruel mercenary who seems to not care for no one but himself. Nice twist as I thought he would have confessed more than what he briefly stated. I wonder who is the other party. Is it more than one person and it may be someone even more powerful than the two brothers which would be the worst case for the main characters as Vincent was seemingly a little stronger than Trevor. I lol at the "safest place to keep the information" xd I knew Elizabeth was crazy about her weaponry and fighting but her room took it to a whole new level. And of course someone as weaponry hungry as she, would be having a backup plan with two more hidden knives on her person. Nice revelation at the end and onto the next chapter! ^.^

 

[Seffy]

Trevor is really something. He is ruthless and cruel mercenary who seems to not care for no one but himself. Nice twist as I thought he would have confessed more than what he briefly stated. I wonder who is the other party. Is it more than one person and it may be someone even more powerful than the two brothers which would be the worst case for the main characters as Vincent was seemingly a little stronger than Trevor. I lol at the "safest place to keep the information" xd I knew Elizabeth was crazy about her weaponry and fighting but her room took it to a whole new level. And of course someone as weaponry hungry as she, would be having a backup plan with two more hidden knives on her person. Nice revelation at the end and onto the next chapter! ^.^

Yes Elizabeth cracks me up. She's obsessed but hey she has her reasons. xd This wasn't my favorite chapter but when I write the novel version I will have to slow it down and such. Ty for your input! ^_^