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I'm gonna delete my bold post in bold.
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Minamoto I'm sry I will try not to write in bold.
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Chapter 0 - Prologue - Part 1 - Darkness

A man is running, he s running in the snow, it's December, he stumbles, he falls, but he gets up, he gets up quickly, there is no time to look back, there is no time to look at all.

Inside the people are having dinner, not a fancy restaruant dinner, but dinner.

They eat as much as they want too, as much as they can. The man enters but shuts the door behind him quickly.


"What's the matter with you?"

The man knew he was disturbing the biggest crime lord in the city. And he knew that man didn't like to be disturbed. But it didn't matter, his blood was boiling and the fear didn't come from what Salvatore could do to him.


Mr Maroni had stood up but before any further questions were asked the roof caved in.


A dark shadow blocked the men's vision in the middle of the table.

Nobody understood what it was, but the shadow spoke to them.

"You have eaten well, feasted on Gotham's soul, you think you can bend all the rules to your liking, but you feast is nearly over.
I'm here now, something you can't bribe, kill or scare.
I'm vengeance, I'm the night, I'm Batman."

"You are dead..."

Maroni fires at the silhouette, they all do, and they all get hit, blood pours from the man who was running, his feast was over.
 
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I see there was a heated argument regarding text formatting, lol, may I suggest something? Actually, I'm gonna suggest it anyway and you can do whatever with it, ignore or not.

I don't have anything against bold or italic, but, in my humble opinion, it would actually work best if the chapters would be plain text, no formatting whatsoever. There are things you might want to emphasize in later chapters, a word, a phrase, a conversation over text etc, in which case italic does the trick. Forget about bold, it does a terrible job on emphasizing (except for when it's used by minamoto, ofc) as it distracts the reader and instead of getting to the surprising thing we already see it a mile away and it defeats the purpose.

P.S.: why are the chapters so short? This one is a little over 200 words.
 

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I see there was a heated argument regarding text formatting, lol, may I suggest something? Actually, I'm gonna suggest it anyway and you can do whatever with it, ignore or not.

I don't have anything against bold or italic, but, in my humble opinion, it would actually work best if the chapters would be plain text, no formatting whatsoever. There are things you might want to emphasize in later chapters, a word, a phrase, a conversation over text etc, in which case italic does the trick. Forget about bold, it does a terrible job on emphasizing (except for when it's used by minamoto, ofc) as it distracts the reader and instead of getting to the surprising thing we already see it a mile away and it defeats the purpose.

P.S.: why are the chapters so short? This one is a little over 200 words.
They short cus I just wanna get to the point. ^^I don't want to write a felshed out chapter, Cus I suck at writing I want to just tell teh story and maybe stick to the dialogue.
I kinda wanna jump ahead to the final chapter now, but I think I should wait.
 

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EndGame

The entire batcave is gassed, bats die of laughter.
Batman is already immune to the toxin, this time he caught him, this time he wasn't at the wrong place at the wrong time.

"I have come to talk, have been thinking about you.
And me.
Maybe you know too, that regardless of what I choose to do, nobody will let you live anymore."


Joker is wearing a mask, to breathe, he isn't immune to his own poison.

Suddenly, he starts to laugh.

(Batman) "What's so funny?"

"Don't you see, Bruce? I'm not the bad guy!

You make people afraid, terrified of even thinking about commiting a crime, giving in to their inner nature, that savage nature we are all truly apart of.

But me? I'm the light in this city, and I give people hope."

Bruce, starts to smile a bit, then he laughs, Joker laughs too, they both laugh. Joker takes off his mask and joins the dead with laughter."
 

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Chapter 1 - Fly little Bird

The apartment is dusty, Zucco had been living there for quite some time now, just never cleaned it.
His door is broken wide open, light shines into the dusty home.

"So you found me, like death it seems you can't be stopped."

His cigarr makes a cloud in front of his green poisonous eyes.


"Only a blizzfull child could take business as usual and exxagarate it into some manhunt."


"I'm not a child, and what you call business, isn't business at all, I know you murdered my parenets, what I'm about to do, is justice."

"No, you are about to do the same thing I did, you are just too stubborn to realizee it. you think you are good, but you are not on the side of the law, you are acting on emotions, without any understanding of what killed your parents in the first place.
You think you are the only one who has lost people in this world? That circus needed an example so they knew who was in charge, it was just business."

"Fine it's just business then."

The kid raises the gun and aims right at Zucco. But he hesitates, he just stands there for some seconds. Zucco notices this.

"You don't have the guts....fly little bird, go away before I kill you too."

Robin walks away, he wasn't ready to do it, all that hate he had, didn't disappear, but it wasn't enough.

Ashamed he throws away the gun and leaves.
 
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