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Hey guys plz dont flame its my first and just a preview my friend gave me the idea and i thought i would take a crack at a KakaSaku couple.if u like it i will make the complete story if you don't then well u know... so its not a preview Enjoy!



She felt it sliding into her. The cold of the kunai scaring her for she knew it was tipped with poison.
“Good-bye Kakashi sensei. Sorry I failed you,” the girl said aloud.
Then she let herself fall into the eternal sleep until she felt someone catch her. She looked up to see her sensei standing there holding her. He laid her down gently and wrapped a blanket around her.
The next moment she was speeding by the forest, on the way back to Konaha.

The next week
Sakura was sitting on a bench in the village thinking again about Kakashi saving her life. She knew that she would need to repay the debt but she didn’t know what to do so she had been thinking about it for the past couple of days since her release from the hospital.
Maybe she would take him to go eat ramen. No that was not close enough for what he did for her.
“Hello Sakura-chan. What are you doing here?” a voice said from in front of her.
She looked up and noticed Kakashi standing there his nose in the usual spot, in his book. She must have gotten carried away thinking and didn’t notice him walk up. She blushed.
“H-hello Kakashi sensei,” Sakura said. “Just thinking about how I’m going to repay you for saving my life.”
He nodded but didn’t say anything. She stood and started to walk off when while saying, “ I’m sorry but I can’t think of anyway to repay you that would seem fitting for what you did.”
Kakashi grabbed her arm as she walked in front of him his book was gone. “Well there is one way.”
Sakura blushed. She knew what he meant. They had both had feelings for each other but had never voiced them openly and had never told each other about it. She nodded and kissed him as he pulled his mask down. They pulled back and Sakura smiled knowing where they were fixing to go and what they were fixing to do…..
 
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Hey guys i plz dont flame its my first and just a preview my friend gave me the idea and i thought i would take a crack at a KakaSaku couple. Enjoy



She felt it sliding into her. The cold of the kunai scaring her for she knew it was tipped with poison.
“Good-bye Kakashi sensei. Sorry I failed you,” the girl said aloud.
Then she let herself fall into the eternal sleep until she felt someone catch her. She looked up to see her sensei standing there holding her. He laid her down gently and wrapped a blanket around her.
The next moment she was speeding by the forest, on the way back to Konaha.

The next week
Sakura was sitting on a bench in the village thinking again about Kakashi saving her life. She knew that she would need to repay the debt but she didn’t know what to do so she had been thinking about it for the past couple of days since her release from the hospital.
Maybe she would take him to go eat ramen. No that was not close enough for what he did for her.
“Hello Sakura-chan. What are you doing here?” a voice said from in front of her.
She looked up and noticed Kakashi standing there his nose in the usual spot, in his book. She must have gotten carried away thinking and didn’t notice him walk up. She blushed.
“H-hello Kakashi sensei,” Sakura said. “Just thinking about how I’m going to repay you for saving my life.”
He nodded but didn’t say anything. She stood and started to walk off when while saying, “ I’m sorry but I can’t think of anyway to repay you that would seem fitting for what you did.”
Kakashi grabbed her arm as she walked in front of him his book was gone. “Well there is one way.”
Sakura blushed. She knew what he meant. They had both had feelings for each other but had never voiced them openly and had never told each other about it. She nodded and kissed him as he pulled his mask down. They pulled back and Sakura smiled knowing where they were fixing to go and what they were fixing to do…..
Nice job, I don't like the couple but nice job!
The explanation was perfict!!!!
Kakashi>> :kiss: << Sakura
 

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:| Kakashi is a perv!!!!!

Well as long as the minor has consent of the parents i think it should be ok...

The story was good...a little bit too short but good...

I just can`t believe he lowered his mask though...
 
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