[Approved] New Bio - Needs criticism and approval(2)

[ekettune]

hey should i make a new thread for this bio?

No, just use the edit.

You should also clean the look of your bio. Don't write stuff so close to each other, you know what i mean?

 

[Tsukoyomi13]

Thanks bruce lee ^_^

 

[Bluedevil]

well, it seems in-depth to me. But I think it would be easier to explain your personality if you either outright said you have a sasuke like personality or you better explained your sasuke like personality. I also agree that your history is too short in length.

 

[Tsukoyomi13]

well, it seems in-depth to me. But I think it would be easier to explain your personality if you either outright said you have a sasuke like personality or you better explained your sasuke like personality. I also agree that your history is too short in length.

I didn't think it was sasuke like....that's kind of like my own personality so yeah ....about the history what else to say
Btw I extended it 3 sentences more before you came.