[Approved] New Bio - Needs criticism and approval(2)

Tsukoyomi13 · Apr 4, 2011

Basic Information
Name: Lightning
Nickname: Wraith
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Clan: -

appearance: Pale skin,Deep blue eyes,black medium length hair with a slightly red tinted streak.

Personality: vengeful,kind,lonely,caring,agressive,smart,slightly rude and a slightly evil.it all depends on his mood

Village Info.
Village of Birth: Konoha
Village of Alliance: Konoha

Rank//Chakra Info.
Ninja Rank: Gennin
Specialty: /
Element:Fire
Basic ninjutsu:

(clone jutsu)

Ninjutsu:Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)
_____
(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.
_____
(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
_____
(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).
_____
(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.
_____
(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns

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Background Info.
History: born in the hidden leaf village,grew up with one mother who was killed and then was left alone with emptiness.from there he lived on like an ordinary ninja...carrying out missions and even getting inspired by uzumaki naruto at some point.however his pain lies with him and him alone...slowly waiting to engulf him into darkness.

looks:
Theme Song and Background Music: Bring me to life - evanescence and Better way to die by disturbed..(accordingly)

Battles

Won: 0
Lost: 0

~Approved~

Dracule · Apr 4, 2011

*sigh*
You gotta add your default ninjutsu.
And for battles it should say 0 and 0
And history is too short
And the personality doesn't really make that much sense. Kind and caring, but rude aggressive and evil???

Tsukoyomi13 · Apr 4, 2011

BloodTrain ZRO said:
*sigh*
You gotta add your defeault ninjutsu.
And for battles it should say 0 and 0
And history is too short
And the personality doesn't really make that much sense. Kind and caring, but rude aggressive and evil???

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WHY IS THIS SO HARD PPL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

SOMEONE HELP ME! >=(

DarkPhoenix · Apr 4, 2011

and why did you make a new thread?
you do realize that the edit tool has already been invented right?
and you didn't put in the 1st element you want to learn.....

You must be registered for see links

here is a link. READ IT AND USE THE LINKS WITHIN THAT
if you still don't get it after that then i would suggest that you don't try at all.....

SKTupac · Apr 4, 2011

Copy this and it will look much better and your history is a bit short.

PHP:

[b][u][size=4]Basic Information[/size][/u][/b] 
[b][u]Name[/u]:[/b] 
[u]Nickname[/u]: 
[b][u]Gender[/u]:[/b] 
[b][u]Age[/u]:[/b] 
[b][u]Clan[/u]:[/b] 

[b][u]Looks[/u]:[/b] 

[b][u]Personality[/u]:[/b] 

[b][u][size=4]Village Info.[/size][/u][/b] 
[b][u]Village of Birth[/u]:[/b] 
[b][u]Village of Alliance[/u]:[/b] 

[b][u][size=4]Rank//Chakra Info.[/size][/u][/b] 
[b][u]Ninja Rank[/u]:[/b] 
[b][u]Specialty[/u]:[/b] 
[b][u]Elements[/u]:[/b] 
[B][U]Your ninjutsu[/U]:[/B] 


[b][u][size=4]Background Info.[/size][/u][/b] 
[b][u]History[/u]:[/b] 

[b][u][size=4]Other[/size][/u][/b] 

[b][u]Picture[s][/u]:[/b] 

[b][u]Theme Song and Background Music[/u]:[/b] 

[size=4][B][U]Battles[/U][/B][/size] 

[B][U]Won[/U]: 
[U]Lost[/U]:[/B]

You can see it in this link;

You must be registered for see links

And for the basic ninjutsu copy this

(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)
_____
(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.
_____
(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
_____
(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).
_____
(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.
_____
(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.

Tsukoyomi13 · Apr 4, 2011

i was told that no abilities and no taijutsu..and sue me for having a short history...im not creative right now
p.s: shino person im new and didnt notice...-_-

Dracule · Apr 4, 2011

Don't worry I had probs at first to.

You must be registered for see links

Tsukoyomi13 · Apr 4, 2011

the moderators will probably kill me for this...

SKTupac · Apr 4, 2011

SKTupac said:
Copy this and it will look much better and your history is a bit short.

PHP:

[b][u][size=4]Basic Information[/size][/u][/b] [b][u]Name[/u]:[/b] [u]Nickname[/u]: [b][u]Gender[/u]:[/b] [b][u]Age[/u]:[/b] [b][u]Clan[/u]:[/b] [b][u]Looks[/u]:[/b] [b][u]Personality[/u]:[/b] [b][u][size=4]Village Info.[/size][/u][/b] [b][u]Village of Birth[/u]:[/b] [b][u]Village of Alliance[/u]:[/b] [b][u][size=4]Rank//Chakra Info.[/size][/u][/b] [b][u]Ninja Rank[/u]:[/b] [b][u]Specialty[/u]:[/b] [b][u]Elements[/u]:[/b] [B][U]Your ninjutsu[/U]:[/B] [b][u][size=4]Background Info.[/size][/u][/b] [b][u]History[/u]:[/b] [b][u][size=4]Other[/size][/u][/b] [b][u]Picture[s][/u]:[/b] [b][u]Theme Song and Background Music[/u]:[/b] [size=4][B][U]Battles[/U][/B][/size] [B][U]Won[/U]: [U]Lost[/U]:[/B]

You can see it in this link;
You must be registered for see links

And for the basic ninjutsu copy this

(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)
_____
(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.
_____
(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
_____
(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).
_____
(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.
_____
(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.

Do it like this

Tsukoyomi13 · Apr 4, 2011

thanks for the help guys...

DarkPhoenix · Apr 4, 2011

Tsukoyomi13 said:
the moderators will probably kill me for this...

they will just warn you and tell you to be more careful....
though i would suggest that if you really are having a hard time then check other people's bios for some idea on how to make one.
most people have their bios in their sig.
(sorry for lashing out. not really that good a day for me and i was in a very bitter mood when i wrote that. you did not deserve to be yelled at for being new. My sincerest apologies)
if you have any more questions on how to make your bio, just message me in my profile.

Tsukoyomi13 · Apr 4, 2011

its alright shino person..

problem is there very few less new profiles..most of them have 3-20 jutsus etc
so im a bit confused ;s

Tsukoyomi13 · Apr 4, 2011

ive edited it..=/

is this alright?
or did i mess up again?

Anduril · Apr 4, 2011

Tsukoyomi13 said:
its alright shino person..
problem is there very few less new profiles..most of them have 3-20 jutsus etc
so im a bit confused ;s

Hey check my bio out it is approved and it is pretty new VM me if u wanna look at it

Tsukoyomi13 · Apr 4, 2011

thanks!

DarkPhoenix · Apr 4, 2011

my bio is just a new bio since i haven't updated yet
you can look at it from my sig.
your first jutsu seems to be missing its name and you should take away the fireball jutsu thing since you have not yet learned it.

Tsukoyomi13 · Apr 4, 2011

ok!
then what should i write?

ninjutsu?

Bluedevil · Apr 4, 2011

Hey I was wondering what this is and if anybody can join?

Tsukoyomi13 · Apr 4, 2011

hey should i make a new thread for this bio?

Anduril · Apr 4, 2011

Bluedevil said:
Hey I was wondering what this is and if anybody can join?

He is learning to wrtie a bio if u have suggestions u can join

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