Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 1.

[-Yard-]

*applause*

Very good man.

 

[Igneel]

great work...
i'm surprised that Dan helped you write thisO.O

 

[Zenryoku]

seems this didnt get such a great responce xD

 

[Izuna Uchiha]

Great fanfic bro. It really changes from those constant shinobi story. IMO it's more interesting.

Very well written, could use some more punctuation though (constructive criticism ).

All in all, it was great. Looking forward to chap 2

 

[Pervyy]

Great fanfic bro. It really changes from those constant shinobi story. IMO it's more interesting.

Very well written, could use some more punctuation though (constructive criticism ).

All in all, it was great. Looking forward to chap 2

This is the story leading up to how the ninja came to be xd

 

[Klaus]

nice job its great

 

[Yüme1]

lol, nice. Monochi is my fav so far xd.

 

[Yūsuke1]

Good chapter guys ;D Hope this will continue for a long time...

 

[Princermb]

Good Job.

 

[House]

Good job guys

 

[~Deidara~]

From a fellow fanfic writer to another, nice work. Tis truly captivates early Naruto life, and the action helps too. xd

My only minor criticism is spelling and punctuation mistakes, but all in all, a masterpiece. Very nice prequel!

 

[KeotsuEclipse]

Very well done. ^_^ The story was executed well, and I like the concept of trying to explain everything that has been in this way, like the fact that though Samurai were the main military might, they faded away. I can already see where the Shinobi tactics are starting to come it.

Like has been said earlier, there are a few minor punctuation errors, but in retrospect to the story, they're not a big deal.

I thoroughly enjoyed this, and await the next chapter.

Good job, to the both of you. ^_^

 

[RokuNR]

You executed this introduction chapter really well. The story seems interesting. It's nice to get some swordsmanship action, as well, in a fanfic, so I'll be looking forward to the next few chapters

 

[Zenryoku]

Very well done. ^_^ The story was executed well, and I like the concept of trying to explain everything that has been in this way, like the fact that though Samurai were the main military might, they faded away. I can already see where the Shinobi tactics are starting to come it.

Like has been said earlier, there are a few minor punctuation errors, but in retrospect to the story, they're not a big deal.

I thoroughly enjoyed this, and await the next chapter.

Good job, to the both of you. ^_^

Thanks and yes indeed im not that good with punctuation hense why my english grade is average xD

You executed this introduction chapter really well. The story seems interesting. It's nice to get some swordsmanship action, as well, in a fanfic, so I'll be looking forward to the next few chapters

whey finally attracted your comment and thankyou its good to get your oppinion

 

[RokuNR]

Thanks and yes indeed im not that good with punctuation hense why my english grade is average xD



whey finally attracted your comment and thankyou its good to get your oppinion

No problem ^_^
Keep em' coming

 

[Zenryoku]

No problem ^_^
Keep em' coming

will do got two out currently working on the third now xD its kind of adictive once ya begin getting involved in developing the plots and characters especially as il be elaborating on many Narutoverse characters

 

[Scary Yamato]

we never hear of the samurai. good job! ^_^

 

[Zenryoku]

we never hear of the samurai. good job! ^_^

indeed the samurai truely are legendary xD

 

[Iwabi]

very good fanfic, i like it and the focus so far on the samurai xD

 

[WastedMonkey]

good job