Naruto : The Tale of the Demon Boy Chapter 3

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Guys this is my the final chapter for this fanfic,hope you like it,and pllzzzz post if you read it,at least say a "I was here"or something like that.

So here is chapter 3 :

Disclaimer : I do not own Naruto
All Characters belong to Masashi Kishimoto
The Tale Of The Demon Boy Chapter 2
Writer: Akisora
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3 days later


Kakashi returns back to Konoha,he entered the gates and saw Jiraiya standing there,next to him there
was a man with a red coat,Kakashi walked forward and talked to Jiraiya about the mission,he was
stoped by the man,he said "I have been waiting for this day 5 years",Kakashi turned to him and said
"I am sorry,do i know you?",the man laughed and said "I am offended Kakashi sensei,after 5 years
you can`t recognize your own student?"Kakashi started backing up and said"Studen?,you can`t be....."
the man laughed and said "So you remember?*takes off hood*",Kakashi took out a kunai and charged
him,Naruto that formed a handsign and said "Kyubi Art : HellFire"and shot a fireball to Kakashi,
Kakashi thought he had dodged it but the the fireball started following him and it him,he fell down,
Naruto than said"Now for the interesting part".

"Kyubi Art : Wall Of Torture"red chakra came out of Naruto and it pressed Kakashi to the wall and the
chakra formed locks around his hands and legs,Naruto got closer to him and started forming handsigns
while saying the names of the signs "Hare,horse,ox,monkey,dragon,hare,tiger,rat,horse,serpant,ram,ox
,rat,bird,dog,monkey,tiger"in the end he slammed his hand down and said "Forbidden Jutsu : Grim",the
sky turned black and a man in a hood and a scythe in his hands appeared.

2 day earlier

Jiraiya:Naruto,i need to talk to you.

Naruto:Ok

Jiraiya:Remember what i told you when you first arrived?

Naruto:Yes,that you are my godfather or something,wait,does that mean you know who my parents are?

Jiraiya:You better sit down.

Naruto:Ok..*sits down*

Jiraiya:I am surprised you never figured it out,he can be seen from the whole village,his hair is the same as
yours,and he was pretty close to you during the Kyubi attack.

Naruto:Ok,what does that tell me?All the ninja of the village were fighting the Kyubi,it could be anyone.

Jiraiya:Just think about it,who was the man closer to you?

Naruto:The man who sealed the fox inside me,Yondaime,wait....

Jiraiya:Yes,you understand now?

Naruto:Do you mean to tell me my father is the Fourth?

Jiraiya:Yes

Naruto:Ok,so my father sealed a demon inside me,he wasn`t much of a parent.

Jiraiya:When the time comes you will understand,in fact he may be able to tell it to you in person.

Naruto:What do you mean?

Jiraiya:You plan on killing Kakashi when he arrives don`t you?

Naruto:Something like that.

Jiraiya:There is a forbiden jutsu,i thought that you are going to kill him so why not make him usefull.

Naruto:Ok..

Jiraiya:It is called "Grim".


Real Time

"I first thought of just killing you,but then Jiraiya offered something "usefull"to do with you,not only this is going
to be your death,but this will be a test if you are as powerfull as your Sensei and my father",Kakashi swang
around his hands and legs trying to escape,it was useless,the chakra was too intense,Naruto than continued
"Se my friend over there?*points at man with the hood and scythe*He is something like a contracter,he will
revive someone as long as you have an equal soul to offer,we will now see if you are as worthy as Minato",
Naruto cleared the path and the man with the hood started walking towards Kakashi,he stood in-front of him
and pulled out his hand,black chakra formed in his hand as he inserted it inside of Kakashi and then took it
out,he than turned to Naruto and said "His soul is more than enough,you can ask me to revive a second one
if you wish",Naruto laughed and said"Second one?really??",his first thought was his mother,but then he
remembered Sasuke,he lowered his head and said with a serious voice"Uchiha Sasuke,let him be the second
one,altough you have to excuse me i do not have his body",the Grim turned to Kakashi and said"It is fine,as
long as it doesn`t surpass the limit" and put his hand inside Kakashi one more time,he than took out a phasma
(its like a material that you cannot touch)from inside Kakashi and put it in a box,on the box he wrote the names
Minato Namikaze and Sasuke Uchiha,he than put the box down and pointed it with his hand,black chakra surounded
the box and when the chakra dissapeared the box had dissapeared too,he than turned to Naruto and said
"The process has finished,the 2 humans will be revived in a location you will choose in about 2 days",Naruto
sighed and said"Why that long?Can`t we make it a little bit sooner?*takes out his wallet and offers him money*"
the Grim than asnwered"The underworld is quite busy,and i do not take money from mortals*takes the money*,but
Jinchuriki are an exception,fine,the humans will be revived in 1 hour",Naruto than sighed and said"Money works
everywhere doesn`t it".

When the Grim left Naruto looked at Kakashi and said "Why?,why did you betray us back then?i am not the
one to blame about what the Kyubi did,and also just so you know,i hunted down the Akatsuki leader,turns
out he is a man named Madara and he was controlling the Kyubi at that time.",Kakashi looked at Naruto and
said "Why ain`t i dead?Didn` t he just take my soul?",Naruto looked at him and said"Well i kinda cheated,i took
that Madara guy`s soul,well at least a part of it and put it in you before Grim came,i thought that a part of his
soul would be usefull,i wasn`t expecting it to be this usefull",Kakashi than started crying and said
"Damn you Naruto,damn you,Why do you always have to be like this?Giving people second chances,this
is wrong",Naruto looked at him and drew back the chakra locks that were holding Kakashi and said "It may not
be the best way,but it is the way of a normal man with a kind heart,i thought about the reason of your
betrayal and figured it out,you did what you did because you thought that darkness would conquer my
heart and i will begin rampaging this village,so i figured i would show you that kindness still lives within me,and
that i can forgive."

500 miles away,former Akatsuki Hideout

Tobi:Zetsu,i have this feeling,it is like my soul is leaving me.

Zetsu:What are you talking about?

Tobi:*soul leaves his body and goes to the underworld*NOOOOOO

Zetsu:What is happening?


Konoha Village 1 hour later,cemetery

Naruto took Itachi and went to the cemetery,they waited there for 1 hour,finally a light showed up and covered
the whole place with light,when the light was gone,Minato and Sasuke were standing there,both of them hadn`t
aged a bit since the time they died,Naruto approached them both and said"Dad,Sasuke,feeling good?",Minato
looked at Naruto and said"Naruto?Why i am here?what happened,i was just talking to you,you were a baby
and next thing i remember is that i am standing here",Naruto laughed and said"You are dead for nearly 19 years
dad",Minato laughed and said"Wait a minute,the four element seal,i died yeah thats right,how did you bring me
back?",Naruto put his hand on Minato`s shoulder(Naruto was a little bit taller than Minato)and said"It is a jutsu
that Ero-Hokage taught me,it is called Grim and it is an soul exchanger,i exchanged your soul with Madara`s"
Naruto than turned to Sasuke and said"Sasuke,you haven`t changed at all",Sasuke looks at him and says
"Isn`t this the Fourth?Why are you calling him dad?And why aren`t i dead?",Naruto sighed and said"Do i really
have to explain it every time?",Sasuke laughed and than saw Itachi,he got into a battle stance and charged
him,Naruto than looked at Minato and said"Hey Dad,i heard about your teleport jutsu,can you please catch
Sasuke?I am feeling a little tired",Minato laughed and said"You got that from your mother*dissapears and
appears in front of Sasuke*",Naruto approaches Sasuke and says"Stop,just let him explain,and no charging
him again",Itachi got next to Sasuke and explained to him while Naruto was showing Minato his powers,in the
end Naruto stopped and approached Minato,he than said"Dad,i am glad Jiraiya found this solution,i will be
getting married soon and i have heard that you knew Hinata`s dad pretty well,his name is Hiashi,he kind of
doesn`t approve the weding",Minato laughed and said"Getting married?Hiashi?That old fart is still alive?Wait
a minute,you are getting married with a Hyuga?",Naruto looked at Minato and said"Is something wrong with
that?We really love each other",Minato laughed and said"No,it will be a shock to the whole village because
it will mean that 2 out of the 3 biggest clans will be united",Naruto than answered"Well i wanted to do that
anyway when i became Hokage,i just don`t like how the village is divided".

Naruto married with Hinata and Naruto became Hokage,Sasuke forgived Sakura(who still was alive but under
medical attention)and married her,Kakashi devoted himself to pay back what he did to Naruto,Uzumaki,Hyuga
and Uchiha clans were united"

Insight:
87 years later an Uchiha fell in love with a Hyuga,their offspring had a Kekkai Genkai never seen before.

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I know that you hated the ending,i am not good with endings i have said it before.
And beware,by request of Falcon the next fanfiction will contain many many many many many lemons,it will
practically be written porn,just kiding,it won`t be porn but will contain material not recommended to people under
the age of 16.
 

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akisora my friend u shud make it short it gets boring if u make it too long u shud make it more funky and there are gramatical mistakes xd...the concept of making kakashi the villain is not gud...wont be popular ..i am not a fanfic writer but if u make a fanfic small it wud be read by more ..all in all u had a great idea but u cudnt put it on paper properly...:)
 

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Ur imagination is admirable. Luv that coz its apart frm the storyline of naruto which we r watchin now. Hmm... Why naruto want to kill kakashi? U said there, he bretayed bt how, why ??
 

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akisora my friend u shud make it short it gets boring if u make it too long u shud make it more funky and there are gramatical mistakes xd...the concept of making kakashi the villain is not gud...wont be popular ..i am not a fanfic writer but if u make a fanfic small it wud be read by more ..all in all u had a great idea but u cudnt put it on paper properly...:)
My father was a book writer and used to teach me things,well he stopped 2 years ago when he died,he taught me that when you are writing something you must think of the most surprising scenario for the reader,you must shock him on every word,surely i didn`t do that,i know that most people like Kakashi,thats why the ending doesn`t involve killing him or Sakura,i made the story long because i do not only write fanfics,i also read them,i read about 10-15 of them every day,and when you write 20 lines people just write that it is too short,the ending is not well made and there are not enough details,so i think i covered the details.

All i all,i did what the public told me to.
 

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Ur imagination is admirable. Luv that coz its apart frm the storyline of naruto which we r watchin now. Hmm... Why naruto want to kill kakashi? U said there, he bretayed bt how, why ??
just search the fanfiction section,this is Chapter 3 of the story,read the other 2 before this and u will understand.
 

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it was short but it was good... for a person that has an open mind and don't follows Kishi storyline everysingle step of the way... it was good :p
 

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It was very good :D Although he should bring Kushina... Tobi's soul extraction randomness ftw :p + the kekkei genkai in the end ( you could make a fanfic about it, if you do send me a message ) .
 

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Hey, I thought you would be torturing Kakashi more than Sakura? I must say, I am really disappointed. Yeah, I do like Kakashi A LOT! But I guess something against him would be fun, too. I did not laugh in this chapter same as the other two. I expected to laugh more. Humph!

But, overall, yes - aside from the grammatical errors , which I don't mind - you have a pretty good imagination. Fanfics does have to be at least a bit closer to the real characters however, this one is a total twist so it was okay to make Kakashi betray Naruto, or Naruto not sounding so like him.

Fanfictions widen your imagination. Just imagine with the author and have fun! ;)
 

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It was very good :D Although he should bring Kushina... Tobi's soul extraction randomness ftw :p + the kekkei genkai in the end ( you could make a fanfic about it, if you do send me a message ) .
No matter how great of a ninja Madara was,a part of his soul wouldn`t be enough to bring the legendary Yellow Flash of Konoha and one of the few remaining Uchiha`s,so the Grim neeeded to take the whole soul :|:|
 
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