Naruto: Kyuubi Sage hero

[Kyuubi Sage]

Chapter 1: A meeting with head hyuuga Hiashi..

It was a relaxing day as Naruto dashes right over to the hyuuga clan ansion as Naruto Uzumaki arrived at the hyuuga clan mansion Naruto knocked on the door as Hiashi Hyuuga opened the door to see that Naruto is being clam so Hiashi Hyuuga said "Naruto Uzumaki I see that your inner strength is extreamily powerful and I would like the honor to take you on in the chunnin exa arena for a little friendly sparring fight but I am willing to reward you if you successfully beat me even meaning I a the second hyuuga clan member that became your opponent" then Naruto replied "Hiashi Hyuuga sir I accept your challenge and the only reward I ask is permission to have Hinata Hyuuga as my girlfriend plus whatever reward you have in mind is alright by me".

After Naruto spoke Hiashi Hyuuga said "Meet me at the chunnin exam arena tomorrow because if you beat me your reward is that not only that I allow you to date my daughter Hinata but I will offer you to live in the hyuuga mansion with us until the future time when Hinata will be something greater than a girlfriend inspecially that whatever is inside you will be proud to becoe your special summon that will have the honor to love you like a brother" then Naruto replied "Alright Hiashi Hyuuga sir I accept the terms and I will reward you a whole explanation of my clan along with what is sealed in me" so Naruto dashed all the way back home as Hiashi Hyuuga walked back in the hyuuga mansion to inform Hinata about the challenge against Naruto.

Chapter 2: The day of the challenge.

After Naruto dashed off hoe Naruto fell asleep on the grave stone of his father Minato Uzumaki the 4th hokage which 9 hours later Naruto Uzumaki woke up as Naruto was given a bowl of ramen so Naruto eaten up his ramen then Naruto dashed right over to the Chunnin exam arena to see Hiashi Hyuuga standing with his two daughters along with his nephew as Hiashi Hyuuga said "Good morning Naruto I see that you are in great shape and I hope that you do not go easy on me because I want you to fight as best as you can after all I am the head of the hyuuga clan alog as being the father of two daughters which one you know as Hinata ios my oldest as my youngest is Hinabi Hyuuga" so Naruto replied "OK time to show how strong I became since I defeated Neji Hyuuga back when I was in the chunnin exams".

After Naruto spoke Hiashi Hyuuga dashed at Naruto as Hiashi activated his byagun until Naruto dodged Hiashi Hyuuga with his shadow clone jutsu then Naruto activated Kyuubi's eyes which Naruto focused himself well that Naruto went into his sage mode but Naruto's age mode was Kyuubi Sage meaning Naruto is able to use any jutsu Naruto picks as the selected jutsu Naruto perfors with be Kyuubi Chakra powered jutsu so Narutofocused his chakra making a Kyuubi chidori form on Narut's hand which Naruto striked Hiashi as Naruto yelled "9 tail chidori" so after Naruto striked Hiashi Hyuuga with 9 tail chidori Hiashi Hyuuga fell down onto one knee to show that Naruto is worthy.

 

[xxzyyzxx]

I'm liking your idea but it's all just throw in there. I see plenty of half thoughts and run-on sentences. I would suggest re-writing it to include more detail, ot fix the grammatical errors.

Like I said though, it's a nice story.

 

[Kyuubi Sage]

Chapter 3: Naruto's memory lane.

After Hiashi Hyuuga fell on one knee Hiashi Hyuuga said "Naruto you win and as promised I want you to move into the hyuuga mansion where you will tenically no longer be an orphan meaning I am allowing you to have my daughter Hinata Hyuuga as your girlfriend plus I even removed the hyuuga curse mark right off all the second branch to show that no longer that the hyuuga clan is in two branches when now it is one whole family branch with each member as the leafs of the hyuuga clan family tree" so Naruto did some hand signs then Naruto ade the last hand sign as Naruto yelled "9 tail teleportation jutsu" which all of Naruto's stuff got teleported to Naruto's new room in the hyuuga mansion.

After Naruto sent his stuff in to his new room in the hyuuga mansion Naruto carried Hiashi Hyuuga back to the hyuuga mansion as the rest of the hyuuga clan followed as Naruto said "Do you remember the young boy with this very same hair that I have when the young boy was hated by the villagers of the hidden leaf village" which Hiashi Hyuuga replied "I remember that the boy you spoke off was hated by the villagers because the boy has the nine tail fox demon sealed which my daughter Hinata did not look away as she was looking directly at the boy not knowing that the boy was suffering withe xtream pain well to be honest I would love to apologuise to the boy" as Naruto smiled a tiny bit Naruto said "That boy was me because I am the host of the nine tail fox demon since the 4th hokage my father Minato Uzumaki sealed Kyuubi in me allowing me to use the demons power but I will completely control it as I still want to be hokage".

Chapter 4: Kyuubi Sage time.

After Naruto spoke Hiashi Hyuuga said "Naruto Uzumaki by behalf of the Hyuuga clan we are sorry for hating you back in that painful past which in words please forgive us by accepting our apology" then Naruto said "I accept your apology and Hinata because you was watchng me for the times when I was suffering I know that you was feeling extreamily sad well please go on a date with me as my girlfriend" then Hinata Hyuuga replied "Oh Naruto I was wishing for this since I first saw you train alone and you will never suffer the pain anymore because you are living with us the hyuuga clan plus when I used my byakugun to see through you I was able to detect another special power that happens to be a kekki genki meaning please tell us about your clan if that is alright by you".

After Hinata spoke Naruto focused enough that Naruto was finally able to go into Kyuubi sage mode which Naruto also activated Kyuubi's eyes as Naruto said "This that I just showed you all is my kekki genki meaning demon Kyuubi eyes is my own personal kekki genki while the kekki geki of the Uzumaki clan is the ability to perform whirpool based jutsu's such as whirlpool jutsu" which Hinata felt proud as Naruto said "My clan is the Uzumaki clan which I happen to be the last one of the Uzumaki clan since my clan died through a natural cause but I was lucky that I was immune thanks to Kyuubi well now that I told you that the nine tail fox demon is sealed in me I wish to restore my clan by the positive way of life meaning I will earn it if Hinata is OK by it".

 

[Musashibo]

I like the story, but you need to work on your grammar and punctuation. Try to put more thoughts into the story and finish it. This story feels incomplete.

 

[Lord Starkiller]

I like the story man, keep it up, You should go alittle more in depth in the emotions of the characters though.

 

[Kyuubi Sage]

Chapter 5: Hiashi Hyuuga's plead.

After Naruto spoke Hinata Hyuuga came down stairs to sit with Naruto as Hiashi Hyuuga said "OK Naruto I can now able to see the pain that you went through alone not knowing that my own daughter Hinata has been watching you hoping that you talk to her which I feel bad for hating you in the past well what I am trying to say is that I want you Naruto to take Hinata as your girlfriend plus that means we will work a way that you never feel lonely" then Hinata said "Oh Naruto you have been the only one that I want to spend my life with and I know that you want to restore your clan which I'll help when the right time comes" so Naruto felt happy knowing his clan will be restored.

After Naruto felt happy Naruto said "Thank you Lord Hiashi Hyuuga sir I a happy that you all accept me in my condition anyways I think I have got a mission with Hinata because you know today is my birthday which Lady hokage Tsunade gave me the mission I wanted as a present well the mission is to rescue Sasuke Uchiha from Orochimaru" then Hinata said "OK Naruto lets go and father I'll protect Naruto no mattter what" so the two dashed off to the trainning field to get their weapons ready knowing the mission will be tough inspecially Naruto will completely control Kyuubi the 9 tail fox demon.

 

[Kyuubi Sage]

Chapter 6: Save Sasuke.

After Naruto arrived at the trainning field Naruto got his ninja gear ready as Hinata got her ninja gear ready which Naruto said "OK time to save my friend Sasuke Uchiha fro that jerk Orochimaru" then as Hinata was about to speak Rock Lee appeared as Rock Lee said "I may not be with Gai sensei but I'll help you Naruto since your my friend" which the three hidden leaf ninja's dashed over to the hidden sound village where standing on the hidden sound village building was Sasuke Uchiha.

After Sasuke Uchiha made his appearance he jumped down to Naruto as Sasuke Uchiha said "Long time no see loser and I hope that you grew stronger because I have a score to settle with you plus since I killed Itachi I have my mangekyou sharingan more improved than it used to be" then as Sasuke Uchiha drew out his sword Rock Lee striked Sasuke Uchiha with his primary lotus knowing Naruto can do it inspecially Naruto knows how to do dymanic entry.

 

[SharinganKakashi]

I like it but in almost every begin of chapter u use world "after"

 

[Kyuubi Sage]

Chapter 7: 9 Tail fox demon returns.

After Rock Lee attacked Sasuke Uchiha with priary lotus Sasuke Uchiha used his summoning jutsu to summon lord monda then as Lord monda arrived Sasuke Uchiha said "Lord monda I give you Naruto Uzumaki as your sacrifice which lord monda attacked Naruto knowing lord monda agrees to Sasuke's sacrifce until Naruto got extreamily mad that Naruto bit his thumb as Naruto slammed his hand down while Naruto yelled "demon summoning jutsu".

After Naruto did his demon summoning jutsu a red chakra smoke surrounded naruto as the 9 tail fox demon arrived even after Narutop released him then as Kyuubi arrived Kyuubi said "Naruto I am greatful that you released me so as a reward I will not only destroy that snake summon but you will be able to completely control me or shall I say I am at your full command".