[Predictions] NARUTO --- 624: The Beginning

Troyg39

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You people have a hard on for the cliche, and overly dramatic. It makes your writing sound incredibly forced, as if you were merely trying to copy somebody else's style. I know this is a prediction, but you don't have to try so hard to be Kishimoto. You could become talented using your own words, and style, instead of forcing so hard to be somebody else.

Just a thought, from a published author. You also need to proof check a little better. There are no major, glaring errors as far as spelling, and grammar, but there are a couple. "A earth style" being one of them. Clean it up a bit, try harder to be you and not Kishimoto, and I'd say you have some real talent and potential.
The point of a prediction isn't to re-write the story in your own style; this isn't fan fiction. A prediction is meant to be a guess at what the original author is going to do next and as such it would make sense to write the prediction in the same style as the author, otherwise it wouldn't be as convincing. Also, a writer's style often goes hand and hand with how the story will play out. You can tell a lot about what kinds of stories an author writes and what kinds of twists they like to incorporate in their work just by studying their writing style (writing styles are often recycled you know).

No one cares about you being a published author. You must not be a very famous or good one if you have nothing better to do than join Naruto Base and bash the writing of other members. If this thread is something that you felt the need to check for errors, then you obviously need a better day job. Maybe writing isn't your thing either, just saying.

Welcome to the base. Have fun, and lighten up
 

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~ Nice prediction, I think if I made one people will probably drop dead from how awesome it would be. I wonder how kishi will have it turn out once the manga comes. I can't wait to see!! ~ :D
 
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By skimming over it this doesn't really come close to 624, also 624 is titled: Aiko.
And its actually already out, I think it was released a few days ago. I just read it then though so mhm.
 
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