You people have a hard on for the cliche, and overly dramatic. It makes your writing sound incredibly forced, as if you were merely trying to copy somebody else's style. I know this is a prediction, but you don't have to try so hard to be Kishimoto. You could become talented using your own words, and style, instead of forcing so hard to be somebody else.
Just a thought, from a published author. You also need to proof check a little better. There are no major, glaring errors as far as spelling, and grammar, but there are a couple. "A earth style" being one of them. Clean it up a bit, try harder to be you and not Kishimoto, and I'd say you have some real talent and potential.