[Suiton] My new and improved Suiton training with moofy.

[ᴍᴏᴏғʏ]

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Shit, edit post wont work, and I screwed up my move. This is when I need to doublepost (crap!)
Ok so what i wanted my move to say was:

Konan, standing 10 meters from her opponent, draws 4 shuriken, 2 in each hand, and throws them in a curved pattern (similar to what you did earlier except with 2 shuriken on each side instead of 1.) in such a way that they will curve into the sides of her opponent. Then, Konan uses her chakra to form her chakra infused paper into 20 tiny birds, which she then releases from her sleeve to fly into her opponents face and distract and obstruct his view. Then, using a nearby source of water, Konan manipulates the water into a sword in her hand, with an edge allowing it to cut things. Konan then jumps above her opponent, whose vision is covered by the birds, and lands quietly behind her opponent, who she then stabs in the back with her sword, between the shoulder blades.
Jutsu Used:

Suiton: Mizu Kuri No Yaiba) - Water Style: Sword of Draining
Rank: D
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 10
Damage Points: 20
Description: A technique that utilizes water to create a sword. The sword can be wielded in the normal fashion, allowing the ninja to cut and stab like with a normal blade.
Note: Doesn't require a water source

(Origami No Jutsu) - Paper Folding Technique
Rank: D
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:10
Damage Points:N/A
Description:After using body of paper jutsu the user can turn those sheets of paper into animals.
Note:If the animal is small chakra cost= - 10(can create 15 animals), if medium chakra cost= - 15(can create 10 animals), and if large chakra cost = 20(can create 5 animals)

OOC: I noticed you mentioned we are 10m from each other. In our RP, that would mean we are at mid range from each other, however I specified that we are long range. That would mean we are at least 15m+ from each other. I will leave a screenshot description of our roleplay's ranges and distances for clarification.

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I'll have to get back to you on the usage of that paper ninjutsu technique as I haven't studied their template before. It mentions the range being up to short range, so I question whether or not it will reach up to long range, where I am currently am. I will speak with my Sensei (Your Paperninjutsu Teacher) and get back to you on that.

As for the usage of the water technique, there was no specification of being water in the terrain so you saying that you manipulating a near-by source is very inaccurate and also vague. How near is the water from you? We already mentioned that it has to be at least within short range of you. These are key details you have to point out to your opponent. How far away is the water, where you draw it from, how you do it.

And now regarding your last portion of the move. We are standing at at least 15m from each other. However you describe yourself simply jumping forward and behind me to attack me with the blade of water. You should have made some kind of indication that you started running towards me or something of the sort. You can't expect to jump so far away with ease or without aid of another technique. And also for the blocking of my sight, that's another thing I dont agree with. The creations of paper are very small so they would unless there was more than the ones you made, I can't see myself being blocked. Not only that, but you jumped upwards which would also have indicated to me your current positioning.

Please re-make your move and utilize another combo entirely. This time please try to include as much detail as possible. When writing your move, remember that I can't read your mind so you have to describe as much as possible. Also if it's currently late when you're reading this post then simply don't rush to make a post because there is a high probability you will have to re-do it, and in the long run it will take more time.

Another very important thing to keep in mind is to post the techniques in the order that you use them. Not only will it be more organized, but it will help your opponent understand the time-frame of your move.

 

[Anbu Kirito]

Konan, viewing her opponent, 15 meters away from her, begins to dash forward. To confuse her opponent, as she dashes she creates a clone perfectly in front of her to act as a double as she draws a Kunai. As she and the clone directly in front of her reach short range, Konan stabs through the clone into the chest of her unsuspecting opponent. The stunned opponent, being open to attack, would be in shock from this, and Konan takes advantage of this. She dashes to the back of her stunned opponent while focusing water chakra into her right hand, creating a sword with an edge, able to cut and stab as a normal sword. Konan then slices his ankle tendons with the sword, making him fall to his knees and disabling his movement. To finish him off, she releases 5 paper bombs from her sleeve into him, and walks away back turned to the magnificent explosion. "Pleased now, Deidara?" She says to herself.
Jutsu Used:

(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: A clone made of the user that can move but cannot use any Jutsu. This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.

(Suiton: Mizu Kuri No Yaiba) - Water Style: Sword of Draining
Rank: D
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 10
Damage Points: 20
Description: A technique that utilizes water to create a sword. The sword can be wielded in the normal fashion, allowing the ninja to cut and stab like with a normal blade.
Note: Doesn't require a water source.

 

[ᴍᴏᴏғʏ]

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Konan, viewing her opponent, 15 meters away from her, begins to dash forward. To confuse her opponent, as she dashes she creates a clone perfectly in front of her to act as a double as she draws a Kunai. As she and the clone directly in front of her reach short range, Konan stabs through the clone into the chest of her unsuspecting opponent. The stunned opponent, being open to attack, would be in shock from this, and Konan takes advantage of this. She dashes to the back of her stunned opponent while focusing water chakra into her right hand, creating a sword with an edge, able to cut and stab as a normal sword. Konan then slices his ankle tendons with the sword, making him fall to his knees and disabling his movement. To finish him off, she releases 5 paper bombs from her sleeve into him, and walks away back turned to the magnificent explosion. "Pleased now, Deidara?" She says to herself.
Jutsu Used:

(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique
Rank: E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: A clone made of the user that can move but cannot use any Jutsu. This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.

(Suiton: Mizu Kuri No Yaiba) - Water Style: Sword of Draining
Rank: D
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 10
Damage Points: 20
Description: A technique that utilizes water to create a sword. The sword can be wielded in the normal fashion, allowing the ninja to cut and stab like with a normal blade.
Note: Doesn't require a water source.

OOC: I've highlighted some things in your move that promote power playing. Below I will leave a quote that explains what power playing is, and a link to the thread with other useful information that I incline you to read.

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Power playing

Power playing is another common occurence in the role play here. But it's also something that's incredibly easy to avoid in it's entirety. Below I will provide an example of power playing.

" Power playing occurs in role playing, and it's when you control someone else's character, as well as your own, without the other person's permission
Say that I play Bob, and someone else is Susie.

Bob watched Susie as she started to walk away. he ran up to her, the girl of his dreams, and yelled, "SUSIE, DON"T LEAVE ME!" She turned around, and glared at him, with resentment in her eyes, before walking up to him, slapping him, and then walking away again

As you can see, if this were a post, I'd be typing Bob's actions, as well as Susie's. The fact that I'm typing Susie's actions is power playing "

If you were to translate this in to the roleplay here and it's battle aspects. This simply applies to every single action that you make as a character, never ever ever try and control someone else's actions, never say your attack lands, never say how your opponent reacts. It's powerplaying.

Example: RPer A performs a kicking action at his opponent, he continues by explaining how the opponent will react to being kicked and makes it seem that his kick is successful.

This is powerplaying. You're not able to state these things as if they're set in stone. To perform this correctly your post should be something like.

"Should the attack land the opponent would possibly be knocked off balance the shock to the chin would potentially cause them to be momentarily stunned should their endurance be poor"

Notice, nothing is set in stone. Everything is open for your opponent to interpret even if they choose to be hit by the kick or counter incorrectly and are kicked.

Mangetsu takes note as the opponent creates a clone as they begin to close the distance between each other. As the clone gets within a short range distance, Mangetsu rises his right arm and places it parallel to the ground with an open palm facing the targets. While doing so, he channels his water chakra in order to materialize a shield that is big enough to cover his entire body. This would cause the illusionary clone to 'disperse' or simply continue onwards as the original runs into the water wall, unless something is done about it. Immediately after the target slams against the wall, if nothing is done to avoid it, Mangetsu proceeds to release a blast of water from the shield's own source, attempting to blast the target backwards in the process.

(Suiton No Jutsu) - Water technique x2

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Rank: D
Type: Supplementary/Attack/Defence
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 10
Damage Points:20
Description: Creates small waves of water,small blasts, and small shields of water.
Note: Doesn't require a water source but can be used to manipulate existing water.

OOC: I would like you to counter my move, and incorporate what you've learned regarding power-playing.

 

[Anbu Kirito]

As she is attacked by the blast of water, Konan pushes her hand and Palm outward towards the blast,using the water in the blast to make a shield of her own, incorporating some her chakra to, making the shield thick. She then smiles and rushes her opponent, bashing him with the shield. Then, taking advantage of the stunning effect this could give, she draws a Kunai and slits the enemy's throat.

Jutsu Used:
(Suiton No Jutsu) - Water technique
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary/Attack/Defence
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 10
Damage Points:20
Description: Creates small waves of water,small blasts, and small shields of water.
Note: Doesn't require a water source but can be used to manipulate existing water.

 

[ᴍᴏᴏғʏ]

As she is attacked by the blast of water, Konan pushes her hand and Palm outward towards the blast,using the water in the blast to make a shield of her own, incorporating some her chakra to, making the shield thick. She then smiles and rushes her opponent, bashing him with the shield. Then, taking advantage of the stunning effect this could give, she draws a Kunai and slits the enemy's throat.

Jutsu Used:
(Suiton No Jutsu) - Water technique
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary/Attack/Defence
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 10
Damage Points:20
Description: Creates small waves of water,small blasts, and small shields of water.
Note: Doesn't require a water source but can be used to manipulate existing water.

As Mangetsu is rushed by the target with a water shield, he simply allows himself to be hit, only to turn into a hydrifed state, phasing through his student and reforming behind him as they attempt to deal lethal damage with the kunai.

Good, I like how you used the source of water but you'd have to be hit by it first to then use it as a source as it still contains my chakra. Either way, it is a very low ranking technique so you'd be able to take the a hit and then use the source to counter attack. Now we will move to the C-Ranking techniques.

(Suiton: Suiben) - Water Release: Water whip
Rank: C
Type: Offensive, supplementary
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra cost: 15
Damage points: 30
Description: After the user performs a series of 3 hand seals Rat → Dog → Ox, the user creates a whip of water that can be used to strike the opponent with a lashing action or wrap around the target to bind them. This technique can also have lightning techniques channeled through when they have bound their victim with the water whip.

I want you to chain three hand signs together which will be the "Rat, Dog and Ox" ones. Using your chakra throughout your dominant hand you will materialize/release a small source of water from your hand. Using shape manipulation you will form it into a whip that can be used to deal lashing damage or event wrap around the target to hold them in place. The special trait about this technique is that it can be sustained for that turn so long as you perform another water-based technique that doesn't require hand signs. Although it mentions the lightning affinity, in our (RP) it wouldn't be allowed unless you used clones or something similar. I want you to perform the technique and strike one of the trees in a creative way. Then tell me a little bit that you experienced when performing the technique and what you noticed afterwards.

 

[Anbu Kirito]

Konan shifting her gaze to her hands, focuses chakra in her right hand. She then performs the hand seals of rat, dog, and Ox in quick succession. Using the concentrate water chakra this has made, Konan holds her right hand as if she was holding a handle, and from her palm, she fashions a whip of water. Throwing 5 small pieces of paper into the air, with blazing speed, she whips quickly between them, poking precise holes in each. She then prepares 50 paper bombs in her sleeve, and wraps the coil of the whip around a branch of the tree, which she then tugs on, pulling her over the branch. She then drapes her sleeve as she makes the arc over the branch, dropping paper bombs all over the tree. Konan then, using the momentum from the swing, pushes herself away from the tree, as the entire area near it explodes. Konan then courtsies.
Jutsu Used:

Suiton: Suiben) - Water Release: Water whip
Rank: C
Type: Offensive, supplementary
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra cost: 15
Damage points: 30
Description: After the user performs a series of 3 hand seals Rat → Dog → Ox, the user creates a whip of water that can be used to strike the opponent with a lashing action or wrap around the target to bind them. This technique can also have lightning techniques channeled through when they have bound their victim with the water whip.