My first poe

[Rougeninja91]

Never been my strongest suit but this is something i want to dedicate to my new girlfriend...i hope she likes it. <3


I dont know what id do without you

You are the world to me

You are everything to me i just wish you knew how much

You make my day with one single touch.

You are all i want in life Ill do anythng to be with you

I will love you until the moon doesnt glow and the wind doesnt blow


Please dont be too harsh...

 

[Kaneki Kun]

Change up the last stanza it feels a little out of place kk, but overall good job.

 

[Aurice]

Really good! But the last line does seem out of place. Either move it or add something to the end.

 

[SasukeUchiha910]

hmmmmm.....needs more flow

 

[Bi0hazard]

I LOVE IT :kisss: <3 xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

(night)

 

[shanee]

not bad. kinda plain but good for your first one.