My First FanFiction Part II

Gaarafan12

Active member
Regular
Joined
Aug 5, 2011
Messages
1,696
Kin
0💸
Kumi
0💴
Trait Points
0⚔️
“Quickly get them both inside and don’t let anyone in without questioning their identity, even me. I will go find Sakura and Hannah.” Kakashi yelled addressing Temari and Kankuro, and was gone. Kankuro and Gaara lifted Naruto’s bleeding body into the house and Temari bolted the door behind them, and went to the other doors to do the same.

“Ah crap, come on Naruto keep breathing.” Kankuro yelled at Naruto as he pulled the knives from his flesh. “Dang it that’s a lot of blood. Temari we need lots of towels and something to use as a turnicut!!”
Gaara had his sand cut off Naruto’s blood flow to this bleeding leg.” Hold pressure on the cut on his neck Gaara!” Temari entered with the towels then heard the sound of the door being pounded on by what sounded like a giant.

“That’s probably Sakura.” Temari huffed as she darted to the door. Looking out the window her assumption was confirmed and she quickly yelled out to her, “What team number is Team Kakashi?!”

“Team 7,! Now let me in!!” As soon as Temari reached the door she opened it and Sakura ran past her into the bloody scene. For half a moment she was overwhelmed by the sight of her friend, then resorted to her training with Tsunade and took control working quickly and efficiently. “How long has it been?”

“Two minutes at the most.” Temari answered as she re-entered the room. Sakura swore under her breath as she moved beside Naruto.

“What’s his worst injury?” She yelled at Kankuro and Gaara who were both holding towels to Naruto’s body.

“I would guess the cut on his neck it’s been bleeding really bad.” Kankuro yelled back although they were now inches from each other. Sakura instructed Gaara to remove the towel and Gaara moved a few feet back and watched with a muted sense of panic and anger. Temari moved beside Gaara for a moment before being instructed to get water from Temari.

After another 5 minutes of work, the sand sibling could sense a small sense of relief from Sakura. Shortly after, Naruto’s eyes opened and he looked blankly around the room. His eyes met Sakura’s and widened, he coughed and tried to speak. “Don’t talk,” Sakura said with finality, “there’s still a lot of blood in your lungs I have to remove.” Naruto looked at Kankuro questioningly who laughed.

“Don’t worry retard, it’s her. We questioned her, she’s not about to attack Gaara.” Gaara sighed with exasperation at the genuine relief that over took Naruto’s face. At that moment there was another knock at the door.

“That will be Kakashi.” Kankuro said moving to the front of the house to the door. Naruto moved to sit up and tried to cover the pain on his face with a smile.

He coughed again and laughed, “Don’t worry about it Sakura, you know how fast I heal!” Sakura grumbled something about him never listening to her when Kakashi and Hannah came in the room.

“Hey guys.” Naruto smiled and winked at Hannah, whose color began to return to her face.

Hannah’s eyes swept the room finally leaving Naruto and found Gaara. The expression he wore was one she had never seen before, and she never wanted to see again. It was a mixture of extreme pain and anger. The kind of emotions that only go together when someone close to you is hurt. She quietly moved to his side and yearned to comfort him. This confused her since Naruto was the one hurt, but her heart was telling her Gaara needed her more than him. She gently lifted her hand and let it rest on his elbow that was tensely tucking his other arm into a tight cross filled with stress.

At her touch Gaara’s arms tensed further, then relaxed as he looked down at his friend. She didn’t smile at him or tell him it would be ok. Gaara didn’t need that; he just needed someone to be there with him in that moment.
No one paid any attention to the exchange between the two, which held so much meaning to Gaara. With the slightest touch Hannah brought him back to reality and allowed him to find the strength to take charge.

He was angry, so angry at whoever had done this too his friend, and at the same time he was furious at Naruto for doing what he had done. But he came to the realization that he would have and did do the same for Temari, sacrificed his defense for his sister. Just as Naruto had done for his friend, he knew it was Naruto’s instinct, to always protect his friends before himself. That’s what made him so unpredictable on the battlefield.

“All right, while Sakura patches up Naruto’s back we need to figure out what our next course of action is.” Kakashi cool and collected voice instructed the group and faced the situation in a way forward.

“Hold up!” Naruto yelled. Everyone looked from Kakashi to Naruto, who was still looking pretty rough. “Multi-Shadow clone Jutsu!” Naruto yelled and 10 Naruto’s filled the room to full capacity. Naruto wavered slightly as the smoke cleared and kankuro held him up.

“You idiot!!” Sakura yelled as she hit Naruto on the head. “What do you think you’re doing? If I told you not to talk I probably didn’t want you to be doing a jutsu did I!!”

“Ow! Geeze Sakura give me a break!” The encounter lightened the mood in the room slightly.

“What could you possibly need ten clones for right now anyway!?” Sakura continued.
“Give me a sec and you’ll find out!” Naruto yelled back. Sakura gave him a look that threatened another punch to the face but Naruto turned from her to the clones and gave instructions. “I need you guys in pairs of two, one pair on each side of the house and one pair on the roof. One of the two on the roof I want to go into sage mode until I can and watch for anyone approaching. If you see anyone of us approaching the house with clone chakra attack it and let me know.” Naruto finish out of breath and sent the clones to their positions outside the house. They all left instantly.



Any comments or suggestions are welcome!!! And please let me know what you think!! ;)
 
Last edited:
  • Like
Reactions: naruto kyuubi

Zombie

Active member
Veteran
Joined
Oct 14, 2010
Messages
2,676
Kin
241💸
Kumi
6💴
Trait Points
0⚔️
Awards
I didn't actually read it (because I'm too tired right now) but it looks like it was written neatly. Paragraphs, quotations, punctuation, proper capitalization, etc.

Good job, I'll be sure to give it a read later.
 
Top