Good but I'd like to improve on your taijutsu. You should include the movement of your body aswell, not just your limbs. (Like Alice regains balance by stopping herself with a right footing while leaning forward with his upper body and striking the dummy's chin with my right elbow.) Your opponents can take advantage of that. Like if you don't say that you stopped your momentum with your right leg, then they can pull you off balance etc. You did well explaining it but be more specific (right elbow or left elbow, right sweeping strike)Doing as told Alice gets from the ground and shakes her lazy feeling off. Once she could feel the chakra in her body pulsing she began to channel chakra around her body. She specifically channeled her earth chakra towards her elbows and knees. At the same moment she raised her arms towards her middle chest, elbows pointed outwards and crouching.
Taking a quick dash towards the enemy, Alice rammed her elbow directly to the chin of the clone with her left elbow. She then quickly raised her right knee and with a direct hit to the solarplex. The hardened knee assault left the enemy with hard bruise and winded on impact but Alice followed suit with another knee strike after quickly adjusting her stance.
The second knee strike to the face caused the clone to raise its face towards the sky only to collect a downward duel thrust from Alice’s hardened elbows.
(Nikui Kiwa) - Hard Edge
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: The user will take the stance with their arms pulled in tight and elbows pointing outwards. Crouching down slightly and concentrating earth chakra into their elbows and knees, they will then burst at the opponent to deliver a series of attacks. The first attack will be an elbow blow to the chin and then a knee strike to the solarplex to cause the target to become winded. As they fall forwards in the motion of being crippled, the user follows up with another knee strike to lift the opponent's head up where finally a dual elbow strike is applied to their face.
Alice simply did as told, and regaining her posture she begins channel a small amount of chakra into her legs. As she regulates it even more, she released it even more and with a hefty running start she dashes towards the clone. Closing the gap in a matter of seconds, she drops her weight into her legs as she appeared directly below the clone. She dropped onto both of her hands and into a hand spring she , presses them firmly onto the ground she rotates her body rapidly, quickly using her right leg as the medium of attack in order to kick the clone three times into the stomach before sending him into the sky.(Taba Ryuu Roppou Ashige) - Coiling Dragon Up Kick
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Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: The user charges their legs with chakra and then they quickly appear below the enemy and uses their hands to twist their body into a spinning motion to kick up at the enemy three times. This move then sets up for Dancing Crane Wheel Kick.
With this, you'll charge your leg with chakra as you're coming closer to your enemy and jump into a handstand and begin spinning your whole body using your hands in the same motion. As you're spinning, you'll be using your dominant leg or both legs to kick up at the enemy three times (probably kicking them up into the air)
Good. Next time make your description a bit more clear. Don't try to put everything into one sentence. Picture your move and tell it step by step. when you're done, you can add additional details into the parts of your body that aren't included like your balance and where if so put your hand that you're not using.Alice simply did as told, and regaining her posture she begins channel a small amount of chakra into her legs. As she regulates it even more, she released it even more and with a hefty running start she dashes towards the clone. Closing the gap in a matter of seconds, she drops her weight into her legs as she appeared directly below the clone. She dropped onto both of her hands and into a hand spring she , presses them firmly onto the ground she rotates her body rapidly, quickly using her right leg as the medium of attack in order to kick the clone three times into the stomach before sending him into the sky.
Nor much to say about them, pretty simple if you ask meGood. Next time make your description a bit more clear. Don't try to put everything into one sentence. Picture your move and tell it step by step. when you're done, you can add additional details into the parts of your body that aren't included like your balance and where if so put your hand that you're not using.
(Danshingu Kijuuki Kiruma Ashige) - Dancing Crane Wheel Kick
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: The user first charges their legs with chakra and then jumps up in the air above the enemy and attacks using multiple spinning kicks which are in the shape of a wheel. They then hit the enemy four times, smashing them into the ground with the last kick.
This is a simple charging your legs with chakra and jumping into your enemy from above to deal several spinning kicks. As you're kicking, spin around your axis to deal another kick (like how it says in the shape of a wheel.) Pretty simple. Lastly, kick them into the ground.
(Tora Kijuuki Ryousha Katachi Genkotsu) - Tiger Crane Paired Form Fist
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: The user charges both their fists with chakra to increase damage and then the user gets below the enemy and strikes the enemy twice. One blow towards the collarbone with a fist cracking the collar bone and the other a palm strike to the throat causing the enemy to be winded with one arm useless from the breaking of the collarbone.
Note: Can only be used twice
I feel like this is pretty self-explanatory from the description. Perform them both and tell me how the second technique differs from the first, talking about taking advantage of the human body's anatomy.
Well reading from the technique, you can pretty much control how you want to attack. Some of these techniques register you must use a specific foot or hand etc but that beats the purpose of having the freedom to user this. I can see a person being able to freeform some of their attacks after the initial attack if quick enough, then deal the final blow.(Wakai Ryuucho Hazumi) - Young Flowing Spring
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Mid - Long
Chakra cost: N/A
Damage points: 40
Description: The user charges their legs with chakra to increase damage and then begins by sending a flying kick straight towards the enemy's upper body, causing the enemy to guard the attack. After hitting the guard, the user then spins 360 degrees and brings their left foot up, breaking the guard and kicking the enemy with the right leg to the chin to send them into the air. Then the user lands on the ground and quickly uses a burst of chakra from their feet to launch themselves above the enemy and finish them off by hammer-kicking them into the ground.
This is a pretty interesting technique. It basically describes how the enemy will defend and everything but we both know it could end differently then by blocking. But still, how can you still take advantage of this technique?
(Ikazuchi Hirate Dageki) - Thunder Palm Strike
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user charges their hand with an electrical current and then strikes at the enemy's right shoulder. The electrical current discharges on contact and can numb the right arm for a short period of time, thus preventing the enemy from making any seals.
Note: Numbing affect lasts for one turn
Note: Can only be used three times
Okay, this uses electricity to numb the victim's limb. I mean apart from the obvious channeling lightning and punching the victim, what could you additionally add to this technique?
On the last part. Elemental Taijutsu isn't any different then using Elements. A-ranked lightning will still destroy an S-ranked Earth figure. I used S-ranked ligthning on Crutch S-ranked Wooden Forest but still. Elemental Taijutsu still follows the elemental strength ad weakness. Obviously when you cover only your hands in lets say water, it won't protect you from a tangible stream of fire. Like how Rasengan wouldn't defend you from a wind blast. Be reasonable right?Well reading from the technique, you can pretty much control how you want to attack. Some of these techniques register you must use a specific foot or hand etc but that beats the purpose of having the freedom to user this. I can see a person being able to freeform some of their attacks after the initial attack if quick enough, then deal the final blow.
The technique id assume with the right technique you can actually use the lightning clad hands to counter earth based techniques with the thrusts once its within reason. Mainly B ranked and lower to be exact.
Based on what I have read, the dummy strike as the description can be simply called a feint. Its an attack not intending to hit the enemy but to actually get a reaction out of them. While my right side which the leading part of the assault is in motion I can actually draw a weapon like a kunai with my her hand for example in order to start a sneak attack.On the last part. Elemental Taijutsu isn't any different then using Elements. A-ranked lightning will still destroy an S-ranked Earth figure. I used S-ranked ligthning on Crutch S-ranked Wooden Forest but still. Elemental Taijutsu still follows the elemental strength ad weakness. Obviously when you cover only your hands in lets say water, it won't protect you from a tangible stream of fire. Like how Rasengan wouldn't defend you from a wind blast. Be reasonable right?
Alright, moving on~
(Heru Tenma Zetsumei Nigiri) - Hell Demon Death Grip
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user will charge their right leg and right hand with earth chakra and then the user will attack the enemy sending a dummy strike at them with their leg in order to cause the enemy to guard. The leg will stride past and then by bringing it down onto the enemy's ankle, it will make them fall backwards for the user to follow through with an earth-charged chakra hand directly into their face and smashing their head down into the ground, creating a crater from the impact.
Alright, this brings up a cool idea. Took me a bit of a time to figure this one out but what does this technique mean by "attack the enemy sending a dummy strike" ? What else can you do with your other limbs while your right side is in play?
(Itami Tsuijuu no Jutsu) - Pain Compliance Technique
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user will dive into a forward roll at the enemy, rolling behind them to grab both arms by the wrist and at the same time leaning their foot into the enemy's back and pulling them down whilst charging chakra into their leg to break the enemy's arms.
This one you might be familiar of. Sasuke doing this on one of the Sound Shinobis at the chuunin tournaments and he'll break that guys arm who's face is covered. Tell me how, by the description, this jutsu will most likely get you killed.
(Fenikkusu Boshi Genkotsu) - Phoenix Eye Fist
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra cost: N/A
Damage points: 40
Description: The Phoenix Eye Fist is from the Bak Mei Kung Fu fighting style. The user carefully controls their breathing and charges their fists with chakra to maximize power in their attacks and then they deal a triple knuckle-shot to the throat, causing the enemy's breathing to become heavy.
Alright, simple strikes to the throat. Tell me what's the difference in this from the other two techniques above?
Well the description is really bad >_> but I get what it says. The thing that Id like to know is how long can that water remain in their clothing. If the water remained inside the clothing for a long time, if sure you can combo in a lightning technique to make the enemy be shocked severely by it. Over it’s a simple combination which with the right jutsu can be taken advantage of.Exactly. Moving on~
(Monsu-n Kobushi) – Monsoon Fist
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user charges their fists with water chakra and then attacks the opponent with a combo of five strikes. The first two are to the chest, lifting them off the ground slightly and then with a second blow, lifting them up into the air to follow through with a sweeping hi-kick to the chest, sending them through the air. Then the user will above the enemy and then finish them off with a drop-kick into the stomach, sending them crashing into the ground. All the water hits deposit water onto the target's clothes, creating a heaviness pressing on them from the density of the water. The water attacks cause the enemy to suffer heavy breathing.
Alright, simple charging your fists with water chakra and strike your opponent with your fist into their chest, lifting them into the air then finally kick further into the air. Then usually get behind the enemy and pummel them into the ground. I'm sure you'll get as far as having to charge your fists with water chakra. What's your opinion about this technique?
(Gosai Ryuu Yajuu Sora Tsuppari) – Yellow Dragon Beast Sky Thrusts
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user will charge his arms with lightning chakra and then appear below the enemy and strike up at the upper body of the target, hitting them a total of 12 times with the final strike in the chin. Each strike discharges the lightning chakra into the enemy's body and induces electrical burns and numbing of the areas of contact. The numbing makes the enemy unable to perform hand seals or concentrate chakra properly for a short period of time.
Note: Numbing lasts for one turn.
Alright, tell me the advantages of this technique!
(Kasshoku Ryuu Yajuu Iwa Hakaisha) – Brown Dragon Beast Earth Destroyer
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: By concentrating the user's chakra into their legs the user will first run and punch the enemy two times, lifting the enemy into the air. They will then jump at the enemy, grabbing their shoulders and swinging the enemy around in mid air like a somersault, throwing them into the ground face first to finish them off by then delivering a pounding of 18 punches into the ground on the enemy's back and causing a crater to appear from the release of earth chakra when the user pounds the enemy into the ground.
Alright, a simple lift then swing them into s a summersault then having them land on the ground face first. The deliver 18 punches into them. Another technique that you'll get to having just perform a simple punch. Just perform this one.
The monsoon fist deposits water into their body, not on their clothes o-o. Pushing water into their lungs, effectively drowning them (or in this technique, making them hard to breathe) but im sure their clothes will be wet too. Well depends if you even manage to land a hit to make their clothes wet. If you did manage to finish the technique, (since everyone is assumed to have K.O hits) they would be either injured to death or have a huge opening. But nevertheless, I'm pretty sure their clothes will be soaking wet for a few turns.Well the description is really bad >_> but I get what it says. The thing that Id like to know is how long can that water remain in their clothing. If the water remained inside the clothing for a long time, if sure you can combo in a lightning technique to make the enemy be shocked severely by it. Over it’s a simple combination which with the right jutsu can be taken advantage of.
Well the most obvious one is the numbing properties of the attack but it can be used to defend elemental attacks within reason. One thing I can see happening is that as long as it remains active and you don’t switch chakra natures, you can freeform the punches into other turns, making it much harder for the enemy to allow you to touch them.
*Running towards the enemy, Alice channeled chakra into her legs and ran faster. She took aim with her right fist first and punched the enemy into the gullet. Once down, her second hand struck the enemy in the chin doe to the natural reaction of being hit and launching them into the air. She jumped into the sky above them, grabbing their shoulders and tossing them into the ground. She land on the enemies back and delivering a powerful 18 strike combo into them leaving a massive crater*
Alright when it comes towards the wind one, the technique utilizes the arms and legs to present the slashing nature of wind. They are the resemblance of sword based combat with slashing motions of either continuous sword swiping or with the heavy but sharp hit of a thrusting sword or a downward smash from one.The monsoon fist deposits water into their body, not on their clothes o-o. Pushing water into their lungs, effectively drowning them (or in this technique, making them hard to breathe) but im sure their clothes will be wet too. Well depends if you even manage to land a hit to make their clothes wet. If you did manage to finish the technique, (since everyone is assumed to have K.O hits) they would be either injured to death or have a huge opening. But nevertheless, I'm pretty sure their clothes will be soaking wet for a few turns.
Alright, moving on~
(Aoi Ryuu Yajuu Suraisu Kichigai) – Green Dragon Beast Slicing Madness
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user will charge their fists and legs with wind chakra and begin attacking the enemy first with a kick to the chest, sending them backwards, and then continuously kicking and punching the enemy ten times, slicing their flesh and clothes from the charged wind chakra. Then the user finishes with a drop-kick in midair to the enemy's head and hitting them to the ground.
(Aoiro Ryuu Yajuu Shinseki Makai Rakka) – Blue Dragon Beast Drenching Hell Drop
Rank: A
Type: Offense
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user will first charge their fists and legs with water chakra and then by gaining a low stance below the enemy, deal a driving upper cut with their left hand into the abdomen and following up with a right hook into the stomach, lowering the enemy's stance. Then the user will jump up doing a full spin connecting four strike to the upper body with the last being a kick to the chin, knocking the enemy into the air slightly and raising their stance. The user will finish with jumping up, doing a spin again, but this time hitting the enemy in the collar bone with a double heel strike to send them into the ground.
(All hits to enemy cause heavy breathing from deposits of dense water chakra on their clothes, creating a suffocating feeling.)
(Akai Ryuu Yajuu Hyaku Nenshou Renda) – Red Dragon Beast Hundred Burning Barrage
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user will begin with charging their fists and legs with Fire chakra and then flip into the air doing a pike spin above the enemy to bring down their heels onto the enemy's shoulder. This drags their body down which then allows the user to jackhammer the enemy's head down and crash the enemy towards the ground where the user will then quickly appear below to begin striking into the enemy's stomach, lifting the enemy into the air. The user will then wrap his legs around the neck of the enemy and swing them down into the ground, landing a stomping strike into the back shoulder blades of the enemy.
(All attacks making contact with the enemy burns their skin when doing so.)
Well well well. Okay, these remaining techniques are three different elements, taking advantage of the properties of the elements. While the green dragon takes the wind, the blue dragon takes the water, the red dragon takes the fire. I want you to tell me, for each of these techniques, how does the element cooperate with the moves listed in the description. Why was fire choosen to perform the red dragon technique with?
Well in the situation vs a sword user for example can work with this because the wind chakra coating their arms can easily counter the strikes. Other then that in small tight pinches say if the enemy charges at me ; I can attain the stance and using it I can easily smash a person with my arms and deal high damage if I use it on the neck for example(Kamakiri Kata: Yaiba Kiwa ) - Mantis Style: Sword Edge
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user would attain the stance where they have their arms bent and their hands pointing down. They position their footing with their right foot slightly in front and their left foor in the same manner. This stance is to mimic the praying mantis. The user will concentrate their wind chakra into their entire forearms and then will strike at the opponent by extending their arms fully so that they mimic a sword's edge. The user will strike a total of six times and by using the wind-enhanced chakra, the springing action of the extension, and their body weight, they will then attack vital areas for maximum damage.
The last A-ranked technique! Tell me in what situations this technique would benefit you.
Well I picked the following three in the spoiler below because I feel they are some of the most beneficial in terms of the word play you can add into each of them. Five Animal Five Element Fist is my first pick because I feel it was the one that really had a lot of thought put into it by Zen in terms of the representation of the martial arts. The technique is special because it allows the user to utilize any of the elemental natures into it and represent the animal it shows. A really good technique as it can be used to counter a lot of techniques that under the right moment can be rendered useless by it. The only down side is it isn’t as good if it could have been with the legs or any part of the body, which could if made it more versatile.Nice, you can use the chakra to make contact with the blade of the victim. Alright, S-ranks! Pick three techniques out of the list and tell me why did you choose them? What's so special about them? Does the name match with what its description trying to say?