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Name: Kiyoshi Mizu
Nickname: White Wolf
Gender: Male
Age: 18
Clan: None[/center]

Looks

With his white hair and the yellow glow in his eyes, Kiyoshi looks like a sharp white wolf. He has a tattoo above his right eye, a scar along his nose, and usually wears his red scarf at an adequate level to mask the lower part of his face. For the rest, he wears clothes which are mostly dark in order to enhance stealth, and tight enough to prevent any inhibitions to rapid movements.

Personality

Kiyoshi is the silent type of guy who likes nature, peace and harmony rather than interacting with people. Thus, he is somewhat cold and distant towards people. He likes music and often visits establishments that offer such entertainments. His favorite food is potato in all its forms; fried potatoes, mashed potatoes, etc…

Kiyoshi is very sharp in combat and never lets his fears and doubts show. He likes to devise strategies to restrain his opponents before that one can make any moves as he believes “prevention is better than cure”.

Village Info

Village of Birth: Amegakure
Village of Alliance: Iwagakure

Rank//Chakra Info

Ninja Rank: Sage
Specialty: Suiton and Doton (Aiming for Rain with this updated bio)
Elements: Suiton, Doton, Raiton, Fuuton and Katon

Your Ninjutsu

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Background Info

History Part 1: Growing up

Kiyoshi was born and lived on the east border of Amegakure. When he was 10 years old, his little brother of 8 years old, Toshiro, was kidnapped by the Order of the Phoenix, led by the mystic Shinpi. His father was killed while attempting to fight back the kidnapping and ever since that, he’s lived alone with his mother.

Growing up, he was a very dependable child who abandoned his studies at the ninja academy in order to work and help his mother overcome the hardships of life, although he was a very talented and gifted fighter who had already mastered a number of techniques.

At age 14, Kiyoshi and his mother were able to lead a fairly comfortable life. However, he could still hear his mother cry over the loss of his father and brother every night. So he decided to leave home in order to look for his little brother as he believed that finding him would lessen the sorrow of his mother.

Wandering around the world for two years, Kiyoshi was able to gather information on the Order of the Phoenix by joining mercenary and bandit groups. He learnt that the mystic Shinpi is able to see the potential in every person and had started kidnapping exceptional children in order to train them and form an army. His intention is to win over the five great nations with his army and rule over the shinobi world.

While he was hanging around in mercenary and bandit groups to collect information, Kiyoshi earned himself the title of White Wolf due to his hair color and the tactics he devised for missions, which made the group look like a fearsome and very organized wolf pack.

However, at age 16, Kiyoshi and his group faced defeat when they were opposed by a travelling sage named Ken and renowned for being one of the world’s most knowledgeable shinobi. As Kiyoshi fought till his last strength, Ken read through his motives and decided to take him under his wing rather than submitting him to the authorities.

Based on the information he had gathered, Kiyoshi was aware that he had a long way to go before he could face the Order of the Phoenix and its leader, the mystic Shinpi. Therefore, he accepted Ken’s proposal to train him and put him back on the right track.

History Part 2: Starting anew

Time went by but was not wasted, for Kiyoshi was a quick learner and his sensei lived up to his reputation. Soon enough, Kiyoshi became a full-fledged shinobi and Ken succeeded to use his influence in order to have Iwagakure enroll him in their shinobi forces. Ken did so as the village’s various missions would help him evaluate his student’s newly acquired skills in different kind of situations and therefore better evaluate his weaknesses as well.

Kiyoshi therefore started anew in Iwagakure, completing missions and moving up the ranks. He kept on like this until someday when he was 17; he was assigned to lead a chuunin squad in the protection of a small village. The villagers had spotted suspicious figures regularly crossing their village as if preying on something, and suspected that they were bandits who wanted to loot them. However, it turned out that these suspicious figures were none other than powerful henchmen of the Order of the Phoenix aiming to kidnap a child selected by their leader, similarly to what they did to Kiyoshi’s little brother. The henchmen were reputed on their own as they previously served a hidden village’s leader by assassinating any opposition to his authority, thus earning themselves the title of Thirteen Assassins Faction. Its thirteen members were all skilled jounins with a strong inclination for bloodlust, and were supposed to have disbanded and never been heard of again after the death of the hidden village’s leader which they served. However, it would seem that their group had reunited to serve the mystic Shinpi.

On that fateful day, Kiyoshi’s squad was outnumbered and, for most of his chuunin comrades, outskilled as well. However, the White Wolf proved his strategic abilities once more and led his squad efficiently. Moreover, his resolve inspired his six comrades to go beyond their limits and after an hour-long assault from the Thirteen Assassins Faction, Kiyoshi’s squad came out alive after defeating one opponent after the other. Most of his comrades were severely wounded but would survive. And amidst all that violence, Kiyoshi obtained some vital information on the Order of the Phoenix, which the leader of the Thirteen Assassins Faction resigned to share with him on death’s brink.

Back to Iwagakure, the squad’s action was considered as an exceptional feat and they got promoted accordingly. Kiyoshi and his squad spent a lot of time in the hospital to recover from their wounds and once they did, they were assigned to track and bring down the Order of the Phoenix by using the information they had gathered. Thus, they all left the village and would only return after completing their mission.

Kiyoshi felt that he was getting closer to his little brother.

Other

Kiyoshi's skills with water manipulation is at the same level as that reached by Tobirama Senju, making him able to perform advanced water techniques with single hand seals.

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@ Alucard: Please note that I could not edit the previous thread anymore, so I am posting this new one for my bio's update. Below is the initial update and your review, and what I've removed has been highlighted in red.

Basic Information

Name: Kiyoshi Mizu
Nickname: White Wolf
Gender: Male
Age: 18
Clan: Mizu Clan

Looks

With his white hair and the yellow glow in his eyes, Kiyoshi looks like a sharp white wolf. He has a tattoo above his right eye, a scar along his nose, and usually wears his red scarf at an adequate level to mask the lower part of his face. For the rest, he wears clothes which are mostly dark in order to enhance stealth, and tight enough to prevent any inhibitions to rapid movements.

Personality

Kiyoshi is the silent type of guy who likes nature, peace and harmony rather than interacting with people. Thus, he is somewhat cold and distant towards people. He likes music and often visits establishments that offer such entertainments. His favorite food is potato in all its forms; fried potatoes, mashed potatoes, etc…

Kiyoshi is very sharp in combat and never lets his fears and doubts show. He likes to devise strategies to restrain his opponents before that one can make any moves as he believes “prevention is better than cure”.

Village Info

Village of Birth: Amegakure
Village of Alliance: Iwagakure

Rank//Chakra Info

Ninja Rank: Sage
Specialty: Suiton and Doton (Aiming for Rain with this updated bio)
Elements: Suiton, Doton, Raiton, Fuuton and Katon

Your Ninjutsu

Links to all jutsus which were learnt:

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Background Info

History Part 1: Growing up

Kiyoshi was born and lived on the east border of Amegakure. When he was 10 years old, his little brother of 8 years old, Toshiro, was kidnapped by the Order of the Phoenix, led by the mystic Shinpi. His father was killed while attempting to fight back the kidnapping and ever since that, he’s lived alone with his mother.

Growing up, he was a very dependable child who abandoned his studies at the ninja academy in order to work and help his mother overcome the hardships of life, although he was a very talented and gifted fighter who had already mastered a number of techniques.

At age 14, Kiyoshi and his mother were able to lead a fairly comfortable life. However, he could still hear his mother cry over the loss of his father and brother every night. So he decided to leave home in order to look for his little brother as he believed that finding him would lessen the sorrow of his mother.

Wandering around the world for two years, Kiyoshi was able to gather information on the Order of the Phoenix by joining mercenary and bandit groups. He learnt that the mystic Shinpi is able to see the potential in every person and had started kidnapping exceptional children in order to train them and form an army. His intention is to win over the five great nations with his army and rule over the shinobi world.

While he was hanging around in mercenary and bandit groups to collect information, Kiyoshi earned himself the title of White Wolf due to his hair color and the tactics he devised for missions, which made the group look like a fearsome and very organized wolf pack.

However, at age 16, Kiyoshi and his group faced defeat when they were opposed by a travelling sage named Ken and renowned for being one of the world’s most knowledgeable shinobi. As Kiyoshi fought till his last strength, Ken read through his motives and decided to take him under his wing rather than submitting him to the authorities.

Based on the information he had gathered, Kiyoshi was aware that he had a long way to go before he could face the Order of the Phoenix and its leader, the mystic Shinpi. Therefore, he accepted Ken’s proposal to train him and put him back on the right track.

History Part 2: Starting anew

Time went by but was not wasted, for Kiyoshi was a quick learner and his sensei lived up to his reputation. Soon enough, Kiyoshi became a full-fledged shinobi and Ken succeeded to use his influence in order to have Iwagakure enroll him in their shinobi forces. Ken did so as the village’s various missions would help him evaluate his student’s newly acquired skills in different kind of situations and therefore better evaluate his weaknesses as well.

Kiyoshi therefore started anew in Iwagakure, completing missions and moving up the ranks. He kept on like this until someday when he was 17; he was assigned to lead a chuunin squad in the protection of a small village. The villagers had spotted suspicious figures regularly crossing their village as if preying on something, and suspected that they were bandits who wanted to loot them. However, it turned out that these suspicious figures were none other than powerful henchmen of the Order of the Phoenix aiming to kidnap a child selected by their leader, similarly to what they did to Kiyoshi’s little brother. The henchmen were reputed on their own as they previously served a hidden village’s leader by assassinating any opposition to his authority, thus earning themselves the title of Thirteen Assassins Faction. Its thirteen members were all skilled jounins with a strong inclination for bloodlust, and were supposed to have disbanded and never been heard of again after the death of the hidden village’s leader which they served. However, it would seem that their group had reunited to serve the mystic Shinpi.

On that fateful day, Kiyoshi’s squad was outnumbered and, for most of his chuunin comrades, outskilled as well. However, the White Wolf proved his strategic abilities once more and led his squad efficiently. Moreover, his resolve inspired his six comrades to go beyond their limits and after an hour-long assault from the Thirteen Assassins Faction, Kiyoshi’s squad came out alive after defeating one opponent after the other. Most of his comrades were severely wounded but would survive. And amidst all that violence, Kiyoshi obtained some vital information on the Order of the Phoenix, which the leader of the Thirteen Assassins Faction resigned to share with him on death’s brink.

Back to Iwagakure, the squad’s action was considered as an exceptional feat and they got promoted accordingly. Kiyoshi and his squad spent a lot of time in the hospital to recover from their wounds and once they did, they were assigned to track and bring down the Order of the Phoenix by using the information they had gathered. Thus, they all left the village and would only return after completing their mission.

Kiyoshi felt that he was getting closer to his little brother.

History Part 3: Setting things in motion

With the loss of the Thirteen Assassins Faction, the Order of the Phoenix restructured itself around some of the prodigies whom the mystic Shinpi had kidnapped, brainwashed and trained. Those selected few were the most capable out of all the children he had kidnapped, and each of them could have possibly handled the whole of the Thirteen Assassins Faction on his/her own. This new elite force was made exclusively of kage-level shinobis and counted ten members. They were called the Red Feathers.

Kiyoshi’s squad, code-named the Wolf Pack, stalked the Order of the Phoenix and would strike at any opportunity by capturing its members. These captured members were sent to Iwagakure in order to undo the brainwash on them and obtain useful information from them. Soon enough, the mystic Shinpi ordered the Red Feathers to deal with the nuisance. At first, only two members of the Red Feathers came after the Wolf Pack. Although they were powerful enough to beat Kiyoshi and his comrades, the Wolf Pack’s teamwork had the best of them. From that encounter, the Wolf Pack learnt just how dangerous the enemy could get. Thus, they trained harder each day in order to perfect their fighting skills, in expectation of a future encounter with the Red Feathers.

The Red Feathers didn’t take long to respond, sending out the rest of its available members after the Wolf Pack. This time, there were three of them and the Wolf Pack had a harder time dealing with its enemies. More importantly, tragedy befell them on that encounter, as two of Kiyoshi’s comrades died under the enemies’ attacks. With rage invading him, the White Wolf fought without strategy or teamwork for the first time, his resolution being strong enough to unleash unknown potential hidden within him. Blinded by his rage, he forgot that his enemies were victims who needed to be saved from Shinpi’s brainwashing, and stormed ruthlessly over them, killing the youngest member of the Red Feathers in the process. At the end of this tragic day, the White Wolf savored a bitter victory as he realized that, not only couldn’t he protect his comrades, but he turned into a senseless murderer himself.

At the news of a new loss, the five remaining and most powerful members of the Red Feathers, who were unavailable up to then as each of them was on a vital mission, gathered to deal with the Wolf Pack once and for all. When they finally located the surveillance base of the Wolf Pack, the final clash followed. It was clear that the Wolf Pack was no match for the Red Feathers unless Kiyoshi would demonstrate an outburst of power like he did during the last fight. However, Kiyoshi hesitated as so many questions plagued him ever since he killed that enemy kid. This led to the demise of his squad as the enemies didn’t wait for him to make up his mind and therefore his comrades fell under their attacks.

Kiyoshi cracked and gave way to his rage once more, only this time he was more powerful and that hidden potential within him materialized. For the first time, he realized his bloodline limit, one that was lost in memories. His element is that of dark water, source of all spiritual life forms, unlike regular water which is clear and is the source of all physical life forms. Some may refer to it as ectoplasma, and it is a substance that imbues fear and confusion upon contact, and can give life to sentient spiritual entities similarly to Tayuya’s techniques. With this newfound power, Kiyoshi was able to defeat all of the enemies except their leader. Unexpectedly, the latter also used dark water to counter his attacks, and it was then that Kiyoshi realized he was facing his little brother and snapped out of his blind rage.

Kiyoshi tried to talk Toshiro out of the combat, but it was useless. He tried to make him remember who he was and what was waiting for him, but it still vain. Toshiro wouldn’t accept the family and peaceful life that Kiyoshi was proposing him. He continued to attack his brother without once recognizing him. Kiyoshi therefore resolved that he would take him down, and that he would bring him to Iwagakure to undo Shinpi’s brainwashing. That was the only way. With his resolve, Kiyoshi became able to use the dark water element without being blinded by rage. The battle heated up. Although Toshiro was a prodigy who had trained non-stop over the last years, Kiyoshi was able to match him thanks to all the trainings and fights he had been through himself. The battled carried on flawlessly. Any mistake would lead to defeat.

After a while, both brothers were exhausted and were ready to end the battle in a final clash. As they did so, two shadows rushed out of nowhere and grabbed each of them, preventing them from carrying out their final attacks. As Kiyoshi looked at the one who stopped him, he saw Ken. He felt relieved then. On the other side, Kiyoshi could see that it was the mystic Shinpi who made an appearance to save his protégé. He wished he had enough energy left to take him down, but he didn’t.

Both Shinpi and Ken exchanged intense looks and finally, Shinpi gave in and said that he was not prepared to take on Ken at that moment. Shinpi retreated with Toshiro. Kiyoshi felt desperate, his brother had disappeared again. He was back to square one. Then his vision blurred and he lost consciousness.

When Kiyoshi woke up, he was back in Iwagakure, receiving treatment at the hospital. Later on, he would recover and visit his comrades’ graves, vowing to give their death meaning by taking down the Order of the Phoenix. He also returned to Amegakure and vowed again to his mother that he would bring back Toshiro.

History Part 4: New resolutions

3 months later, Kiyoshi has finally completed all his trainings with Ken. He has moved to Kirigakure in order to investigate a lead that suggested he was a descendant of a lost clan which existed there. Through his investigation, he is able to find the ruins of his clan’s quarters. Digging through these, Kiyoshi confirms his affiliation to the Mizu Clan and obtains in-depth knowledge of their abilities and philosophy. However, he also learns the dreadful truth about his clan; that due to their refusal to participate in the First Shinobi World War, they were branded as traitors and eliminated. This led the survivors to flee Kirigakure and establish themselves in other countries.

Kiyoshi later returns to Iwagakure, swearing to look for other descendants of the Mizu Clan, like himself and his brother, and to re-establish their clan. With the knowledge obtained on his powers, Kiyoshi trains further into mastering them and that helps him attain a whole new level that will help him take on the mystic Shinpi. Kiyoshi is now 18 years old.

Other

History of the Mizu Clan:

The Mizu Clan existed in Kirigakure for generations. It consisted of skillful fighters who were gifted with a particular bloodline limit, and who became renowned through their participation in cleansing the country from bandits and harmful organizations. The clan was particularly well organized and its philosophy was that of justice. Their quarters and members were easily recognizable by their crest, which is shown below.

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Before the First Shinobi World War, the Mizu Clan strongly admired Hashirama Senju’s efforts to create peace, and strived hard to perpetuate his vision. They also admired his younger brother, Tobirama Senju, whose mastery of water equaled theirs. When the war was declared, they were requested to provide their contribution, which they refused. However, they were victim of their reputation, as the military forces kept on harassing them despite their constant refusal. This eventually led the military forces to consider them as traitors and to take relevant actions. The Mizu Clan thus suffered attacks that took the lives of many of its members. The survivors decided to disband and to take refuge in other countries in order to sever their bonds with Kirigakure.

After the First Shinobi World War, the Mizu Clan never got to regroup and was lost. Until one day, a descendant of the clan, Kiyoshi Mizu, uncovered his powers. His destiny led him back to Kirigakure, where he found out more about the clan and decided to re-establish it after regrouping other scattered descendants of the clan.

Suiton Mastery:

Kiyoshi's skills with water manipulation is at the same level as that reached by Tobirama Senju, making him able to perform advanced water techniques with single hand seals.

He now knows that this is due to the Mizu Clan's inborn affinity to the water element. In fact, the Mizu Clan's rite of passage from childhood to adulthood consisted of performing Water Dragon Bullet Technique with only one hand seal, and the most skilled members of the clan could even use water molecules in the atmosphere to perform high level water techniques.

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Theme Song and Background Music: Linking Park - Faint

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Notes for the reviewer:

  • Sorry for the long post. I have put spoilers on the walls of text.
  • This submission is an update of the following bio:
  • The mention of the Mizu clan and it’s special abilities are for informational use only, I am not seeking approval for them in here. (But I do reserve the rights on these ideas since I had already submitted them as a CE before, and Nexus asked me to submit them as a custom clan’s abilities instead, which I cannot do yet because I am not an official sage.)


Remove Mizu clan, from your clan and any references you made about it, throughout your history
Also, remove you have a bloodline limit as you clearly don't have one, plus, that dark water thing. If you want, get it approved as a Cj, Ce, or create your own Custom Clan with that ability. Once you do that, you can update your bio with that info, but not for now
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