Lol your delivery is way off and you try to fit way to many words in one bar, the lyrics are ok but could be a lot better, I mean dine and wine? I feel like you're trying way to hard on your metaphors and trying to act clever, lets stay in our lanes now. You can't have mediocre lyrics and super clever metaphors, similes and allusions. It just doesn't work that way but moving on. The way you mispronounce words to make it rhyme or fit is amateuristic(not a word btw, it should be though lel)and doesn't flow.
Your songwriting is fine and the beat is fire but work on yourself as rapper, that includes but not limited to; flow,delivery(definitely needs work),punchlines, use of metaphors, similes, allusion and just overall confidence(which you have a little too much)
But thats just my opinion, you can get offended if you want and listen to all the people that are hyping you up only to fail down the road. Or you could take a little advice now on how to better yourself as an artist and rapper.