Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act IX: Patience

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Note: I do apologize for the wait. Please feel free to check out the ending of Act VIII for a brief reminder of what has been unfolding:

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If your memory is in tact then be my guest ^.^ I would appreciate your feedback whether it is criticizing or not as it will only help me to better myself and my Fanfic.

-Thank you

Edit: As a request to a friend of mine who I thank very much for the insight I have created a section that will now be added to every Act released from now on: ^.^


[ Monster Encyclopedia ]

The text in bold is relevant to this Act:

Origin: Vampires originate in central and eastern Europe.

[Insight: Pureblood Vampire]

Description: Is the result of one born from a genuine vampire mother and father. Pure blooded vampires are rare and are considered high rank.

Appearance: Is one who has vampire ethnicity and is born into or owns great power and money. An aristocrat of sorts.

[Insight: Turned Vampire]

Description: Is the result of a human bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chooses to turn their victim thus is cursed and transforms sometime within the hour.

Appearance: Will usually be a human who cannot fend for themselves. A tramp or an unfortunate victim in the wrong place.

[Insight: Mutated Vampire]

Description: This occurrence is unique and the result of Tiberiu’s soul not being able to normally pass on as due others who are turned.

In Tiberiu's case, he was bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chose not to turn their victim thus at that time somehow a mutation occurred rather than death. The soul was imprisoned from continuing onto the afterlife and subdued into an enforced transformation. His form is unique as he died never turning into a vampire and was then forcefully given life again. He was re-birthed with vampire-like qualities. A mutated vampire has not been ranked due to this being the first of its kind.

Appearance: In the requirement for more power; Tiberiu undergoes a slight mutation in terms of his body becoming enveloped by a sphere of his own aura and a limb-like appendage that grew on his upper back; blood red in color. The next occurrence results in a second blood red colored limb to have risen and the initial limb has changed into a black color though his aura seems to take a longer time to retract. When the required power had been met it then retracts. The following time a third blood red colored limb rises while the previous limbs; the initial turning black and second retaining the blood red color and it has also taken an even longer time for his aura to retract. When the required power had been met it then withdraws.

[Insight: Lycanthrope]

Description: Is one who is bitten by another Lycanthrope during a full moon and thus cursed. After the next full moon and their official transformation, they can then transform at will on any given time of day.

Appearance: It usually has a height of around 6'5 to 7‘0 weighing of about two hundred-fifty to three hundred pounds. A bulky body, silvery fur, long thick claws, large jaw, massive fangs, powerful mid to long length tail and huge hind legs in appearance. It's origin is Europe.

[Insight: Hybrid Lycanthrope]

Description: Is a Lycanthrope who consumes blood of a differing ethnic creature. In Octavian’s case; he drinks the blood of a mutated vampire thus his form is unique.

Appearance: This pre-hybrid form invokes the Lycanthrope’s fur to malt, skin to turn a white color and the body becomes covered in opened cuts which is then stained red with the exposure to their blood.

[Insight: Lythimpir]

Description: Is a self named term Octavian gives himself and is unique to him as he transcended from that of a Lycanthrope by means of drinking the blood of a mutated vampire. It’s power differs by the vampire who offered his/her blood. This hybrid form is unique.

Appearance: His hybrid form is completed as his hair takes on a raven color and grows out above his lower back, bat-like ears replace the lycanthrope ears, the lycanthrope snout retracts creating a more humanoid visage, irises slit in two colored silver and raven which overlap each other resembling an x. He gains vampire fangs. His body from head to toe becomes silver colored and is elongated. The waist down is covered in raven colored fur. Bat-like wings; raven in color protrude one from the right arm and left leg located on the right side of his wrist and from the back of his ankle that spread with a wingspan of about six feet. His tail thinned out and grew several feet in length. His healing capabilities, strength and stamina have heightened.

[Insight: Mahr]

Description: Is a female goblin which rides on people's chests while they sleep inducing nightmares while their weight causes the victim to have difficulty breathing. It’s origin is Germany.

Appearance: Is a female spirit or goblin with a hideous visage. The goblin’s body is yellow-greenish in color, stout and when crawling on its victim which are usually female; will be in a sitting position on the chest area.

[Insight: Dhampiresa]

Description: Is a type of vampire hybrid who is birthed from a vampire father and human mother. Thus is half vampire half human and the male counterpart is named Dhampir. They will usually be carrying weapons and are considered high rank in the vampire ethnicity. It's origin is Balkan.

Appearance: Her weapons are a crossbow with arrows made of silver and wooden stakes as well as a long pointed end sword made of silver; forged into a close appearance to that of a crucifix thus far have been revealed.

[Insight: Hybrid Dhampiresa]

Description: In Venera’s case, a Dhampiresa who consumed blood of a differing ethnic creature; a Lythimpir thus making this form unique.

Appearance: Venera’s pre-hybrid form causes her irises to gain two extra slits on the bottom perpendicular to each other appearing as an upside down T; glowing orchid color.

[Insight: Zombie]

Description: Is a corpse reanimated by a sorcerer through a spell. It’s origin is Haiti.

Appearance: The corpse is no one in particular as the sorcerer simply will cast their spell over any grave sight. However, the sorcerer is sure to use a fresh corpse as it will be much more sustainable for the commands than a decomposed body. Although, the corpse will become greatly disfigured through the spell’s process.

[Insight: Bokor]

Description: Is one who uses black and white magic to cast spells, curses or to create creatures. It’s origin is Haiti.

[Insight: Ghoul]

Description: Is a desert dwelling jinn possessing the ability to change its form into any animal or human. Their true form is that of a spirit. It’s origin is Arabia.


HELVETES GJENFØDELSE
[Infernal Rebirth]

Act IX

Patience

[Setting Change: Abrud Town Outskirts]

Narrator: Having arrived in the town’s outskirts as the twilight period quickly became dawn, the group prepared for the remainder of the day until the next nightfall.

Dhampiresa: (In thought) I will keep an eye on this creature..

Neculai: I’ll get Attila settled in his coffin before I am to hunt for our meal..

Tiberiu: *Pant* And Octavian?

Neculai: He asked the Ghoul to detour a little south of here where he was to rest..

Tiberiu: I see...*pant*

Tiberiu: Woman..before you are to leave.. *pant*

Dhampiresa: ...

Tiberiu: With the conflicts over...how about your name?

Dhampiresa: ...Right...I was about to say it when we were all interrupted by this demon and its pests..

Ghoul: Hey! This "demon" has a name as well

Dhampiresa: Hmm...as I was saying I am Venera..

[Woman’s Identity Revealed]

[Main Character Insight:
Venera]

Hair: Black, below shoulder length, wavy,
Eyes: Violet (Black before fed Lythimpir blood)
Weight: 136
Height: 5‘9
Ethnicity: Romani
Age: 24

Neculai: (In thought) What a beautiful name...

Narrator: He stated as sexual urges ensued.

Ghoul: And I’m Rahmah!

[Hooded Figure’s Identity Revealed]

[Main Character Insight:
Rahmah]

Hair: Varies while in humanoid form
Eyes: Varies while in humanoid form
Weight: Varies while in humanoid form
Height: Varies while in humanoid form
Ethnicity: Originated in Arabia
Age: Unknown

Venera: Did you just make that up?

Rahmah: Actually I came across the name by overhearing a group of travelers and was the reason among a few others why I lured away the beautiful owner of that name-

Rahmah: In a desert where I eventually devoured her...*snickers*

Tiberiu: *Pant* Now that we have settled that..make sure you both feed and rest up..

Neculai: Right master..

Venera: Well then...why don’t you reveal how you look to all of us?

Rahmah: If that is what the leader wants...

Tiberiu: Why not? *pant*

Neculai: I have to see this!

Narrator: Rahmah’s shroud suddenly collapses onto the ground with her missing.

Venera: Wher-

Narrator: Gold-colored mist appears and takes a form of a footless demon.

Rahmah: This is what I truly am however...

Narrator: Her ghastly form now began to change into a humanoid. A very beautiful naked woman with long blackish-brown thick curls that fell past her waistline, ruby-colored lips and full breasts reforms before the group.

Venera: (In thought) What wouldn’t I give to kill this piece o-

Neculai: (In thought) Why does the one responsible for Attila almost dying have to be the most beautiful woman I’ve ever seen..

Narrator: He thought to himself as his overflowing temptations barely took control.

Rahmah: I will take this form from now on that is if you do not mind?

Narrator: She asked as she picked up her hooded shroud throwing it over herself as it for now would act as her only clothing.

Tiberiu: Be whatever you want to be...

Rahmah: Then it is settled

Venera: (In thought) This is an even bigger annoyance...

Tiberiu: I would like to begin our next plan and we can fill the oth-

Octavian: Start without me will you? *pant*

Narrator: Reverted back to his human self; Octavian joins in the group discussion.

Tiberiu: You clearly are not able to join us with your current state..

Octavian: As a result of my new form..I can heal exceptionally faster.....though I do not have complete control over it yet as I previously thought..

Tiberiu: I was told of this by-

Octavian: My female comrade..no?

Tiberiu: Yes and while you will have to train some more the healing is a great advantage indeed..

Tiberiu: Well...I can sense his scent even now..though it isn’t as strong as before..

Tiberiu: Your comrades need to rest within their coffins therefore we cannot continue until dusk..

Octavian: You forgot to include yourself leader..

Tiberiu: Actually..I did not...for I lately have noticed that I do not need sleep to feed or shelter from the sun any longer...

Narrator: Everyone’s eyes enlarge as they here the one they follow speak of something unheard of.

Venera: For a Vampire to not require sleep blood or protection from the rays of the sun can only mean that you are truly a h-

Tiberiu: That I do not know for a fact however, everything that has happened to me thus far definitely seems like I am an...abnormal vampire...

Tiberiu: I have no recollection from before I was bitten and so lies the unanswered questions but I would rather not speak anymore about it..

Rahmah: I for one will concede to your order as I am finally freed of my shackles..

Tiberiu: Yes..well we should rest before the next dusk offers another opportunity to hunt down our target..

Venera: I’m going for a walk to clear my thoughts and to feed-

Tiberiu: On what?

Venera: Animals..

Tiberiu: I see...so did I..

Rahmah: I’m getting hungry so I’ll be on my way...

Tiberiu: (In thought) I am against the killing of innocent victims however, it unfortunately seems her hunger cannot be curbed such as the other two..

Octavian: I’m going to hunt something down..eat..then train myself-

Tiberiu: You’ve just recently almost died and you-

Octavian: Like I said I am recovering at a much faster rate and so that means I can begin my training again..

Tiberiu: Do as you like but do not under any circumstances push yourself past your given limitations-

Tiberiu: As I cannot lose such a powerful ally such as yourself..

Octavian: As you wish...

Narrator: The group separates leaving their leader to rest on his own. Several hours begin to pass.

[Setting Change: Lair]

Bokor: My lord...through the black fire I can see the one you wish to torment out in the open daylight..

Lulian: What!

Lulian: How is this even poss-

Lulian: (In thought) Of course...I know it has already begun although it is happening a lot faster than expected.....

Lulian: Change of plan-

Lulian: Begin the teleportation!

Bokor: Yes my lord at once..

[Setting Change: Abrud Town Outskirts - South Area]

Narrator: As Octavian began to train his rabid form, he suddenly has a flashback when he initially trained his hybrid form.

*Flashback*

Octavian: (In thought) Yes...I am mastering this form more and more each day..all the more to fulfill my secondary vengeance..

*End of flashback*

Octavian: (In thought) Forgive me...leader but after we take him down..I will be hunting the one who cursed me as a Lycanthrope for I cannot allow anymore victims to become like me and I will not inform you of this..

Octavian: (In thought) That bloody beast may have granted me power and with this power I can help take on the man who had forsaken my village but I will not let this hang over my conscious for much longer...

[Setting Change: Abrud Town Outskirts - Center Area]

Venera: (In thought) He is alone..maybe I can-

Tiberiu: Why not human blood?

Narrator: His eyes shifted to the left sensing her as he laid behind a tree ..

Venera: Out of respect to my human mother...

Narrator: She took a few steps and stood beside him, her back against the tree bark as she stared into the sunset.

Tiberiu: I see..

Venera: Why did you feed the same as me?

Narrator: He hesitated for a moment then choose to answer her question.

Tiberiu: I suppose it is the humanity that still lingers..

Venera: ...The sun will begin to set soon..

Tiberiu: I know...wait do you feel that?

Venera: I do

Tiberiu: It is heading straight for us...underground!

Act IX End

What can be targeting the two?

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Re: Helvetes Gjenfødselse [Infernal Rebirth] Act IX: Patience

Nice job once more.
I almost envy you how you beautifully describe your character's appearance and emotions. I'm barely able to do that properly. That's why your language really is awesome.

I'd like to re-request you to put that spoiler tag that I mentioned in my previous post on your chapter. It was much more easy to remember the characteristics while reading almost in a row but reading a new chapter after some time tends to confuse me a little.

I thought that there will be more of Lulian in this one but guess you want to hype his plan a bit more.
Octavian got my most attention in this one especially his flashback is intriguing.
I wonder if you'll spark a romantic side to the story between Venera and Tiberiu.

All-in-all, this one efficiently maintained the suspense and raised my attention more. Great job. Keep it up.
 

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Re: Helvetes Gjenfødselse [Infernal Rebirth] Act IX: Patience

Sorry for my lateness in reading your newest chapter, I barely had time to sleep this last week :D Finally you give us the Dhampir's name :p Wow, Tiberiu can walk out in the sun? That was unexpected, but I guess he'll have something else soon to amaze us again :) I wonder what is coming their way underground. Good chapter :)
 
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Work Review: It just came to me that I've marveled about how you give the characters names and I have not mentioned it, or have I already?xd Did you make most of them up? Naming the characters for me, takes a great part with the character's personality and you have made a really nice connection with those. And one thing I noticed is that you don't do much narrative descriptions. However, you are still able to make the scenarios come to life. It must be with how how you do the dialogues.

Snippets from the chapter: I'm a little confused about Octavian's thoughts after the flashback. The use of "You" and "we" is giving me an impression that there is another creature/being he was talking to or was he just referring to his alter ego?xd

Do you have a hidden history behind Tiberiu's turning into a hybrid vampire? Sounds to me like a good opportunity to be making a few twists and surprises for that part.:D If none, then it probably just have to do with his kind of a vampire, right? That is, that one would not know what would transform out of his kind, right.:D
 
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Re: Helvetes Gjenfødselse [Infernal Rebirth] Act IX: Patience

this one was awesome
Thanks! ;)

Nice job once more.
I almost envy you how you beautifully describe your character's appearance and emotions. I'm barely able to do that properly. That's why your language really is awesome.

I'd like to re-request you to put that spoiler tag that I mentioned in my previous post on your chapter. It was much more easy to remember the characteristics while reading almost in a row but reading a new chapter after some time tends to confuse me a little.

I thought that there will be more of Lulian in this one but guess you want to hype his plan a bit more.
Octavian got my most attention in this one especially his flashback is intriguing.
I wonder if you'll spark a romantic side to the story between Venera and Tiberiu.

All-in-all, this one efficiently maintained the suspense and raised my attention more. Great job. Keep it up.
Thank you, well I’m surprised that someone actually would compliment me on that. Exactly, Lulian is more behind the scenes for now I suppose lol Thanks, I didn’t originally intend to give Octavian’s character much backstory depth but I suppose his character is that likeable ^.^ That is an interesting concept about an attraction between the hybrid vamp/Dhampir however, whether I do decide to involve the two or not is yet to be said plus I will not spoil ;p I’m glad that this Act was successful at least in your eyes ;) I want to say thank you so very much for the whole spoiler character insight as I have taken your advice and edited it into this Act and the following ones after ^.^

Sorry for my lateness in reading your newest chapter, I barely had time to sleep this last week :D Finally you give us the Dhampir's name :p Wow, Tiberiu can walk out in the sun? That was unexpected, but I guess he'll have something else soon to amaze us again :) I wonder what is coming their way underground. Good chapter :)
Please, if I believe anyone to late it would be me lol Yes, and I will say that several characters have had there names changed o_O I’m just glad that I decided on the names I thought appropriate. There is much planned for Tiberiu and I can’t wait to get everybodies reaction to what will be revealed underground next Act ^.^ Thanks!

Work Review: It just came to me that I've marveled about how you give the characters names and I have not mentioned it, or have I already?xd Did you make most of them up? Naming the characters for me, takes a great part with the character's personality and you have made a really nice connection with those. And one thing I noticed is that you don't do much narrative descriptions. However, you are still able to make the scenarios come to life. It must be with how how you do the dialogues.

Snippets from the chapter: I'm a little confused about Octavian's thoughts after the flashback. The use of "You" and "we" is giving me an impression that there is another creature/being he was talking to or was he just referring to his alter ego?xd

Do you have a hidden history behind Tiberiu's turning into a hybrid vampire? Sounds to me like a good opportunity to be making a few twists and surprises for that part.:D If none, then it probably just have to do with his kind of a vampire, right? That is, that one would not know what would transform out of his kind, right.:D
I believe that you have not yet commented over their names lol Well, actually what I did for each and everyone’s names was look into their individual origin and accordingly I choose a name that matched. Example I choose Tiberiu which is a Romanian name :) Thanks and I also feel the same way about the character’s names/descriptions ;) I know; with this Fanfic I was intending to lack on narrative descriptions, etc. however, I will add on some parts I feel needed lol I will elaborate for you about Octavian’s thoughts after the flashback. Well, on the first thought he refers to Tiberiu and the second is referred to the one who cursed him. Thanks to you pointing that out I made sure to go back and edit that part a little that way it would come off that way ^.^ Yes, there is a lot still planned for Tiberiu and his form is definitely unique. Thanks for your compliments/insight-they are always welcomed and very helpful ;)

Edit: I have added a detailed area for each character and will be doing so the following Acts as well so be sure to check it out! ;)
 
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I believe that you have not yet commented over their names lol Well, actually what I did for each and everyone’s names was look into their individual origin and accordingly I choose a name that matched. Example I choose Tiberiu which is a Romanian name :) Thanks and I also feel the same way about the character’s names/descriptions ;) I know; with this Fanfic I was intending to lack on narrative descriptions, etc. however, I will add on some parts I feel needed lol I will elaborate for you about Octavian’s thoughts after the flashback. Well, on the first thought he refers to Tiberiu and the second is referred to the one who cursed him. Thanks to you pointing that out I made sure to go back and edit that part a little that way it would come off that way ^.^ Yes, there is a lot still planned for Tiberiu and his form is definitely unique. Thanks for your compliments/insight-they are always welcomed and very helpful ;)


We both seem to be forgetfulxd So sorry as I was late in following up with my post. I reviewed that part and it seemed clear to me. I'm probably just brain-dead at the time I was reading this chapter.xd
 

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Ah, things are picking up - it seems like Venera's a tad jealous that a new attractive ally has joined the ranks, lol. And Neculai is becoming more and more like Kotetsu, aha. As I mentioned before, I'm new with the whole Vampire theme, but I must say, I'm enjoying it a lot.
 

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Ah, things are picking up - it seems like Venera's a tad jealous that a new attractive ally has joined the ranks, lol. And Neculai is becoming more and more like Kotetsu, aha. As I mentioned before, I'm new with the whole Vampire theme, but I must say, I'm enjoying it a lot.
I know, it may have seem like the story was heading downhill for a little there but it quickly began to pick up. Yes, a seemingly jealous Venera-wonder why...:zonder:
I hope Neculai's Kotetsu trait doesn't shun his character in your opinion as I thought it fit him very well. I see well if you'll check out the monster encyclopedia at the bottom of the chapter, you can get a better understanding as it contains info on each of the folkloric monsters I've included into my story ;)
 

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Oh No, Neculai's Character Is Fine, I Like That He Possessed That Trait, Actually - No Worries, Lol. It Was Just Something I Noticed While I Was Reading.
 
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