Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act III: Revenge

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HELVETES GJENFØDELSE
[Infernal Rebirth]

Act III:

Revenge

Tiberiu: AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!

*Tiberiu panting*

Narrator: Emotions raged as a bluish-black aura awakens and begins to pour out of the pained vampiric male. Control over his mind is finally shattered as his will completely breaks him out of the shackles Lulian cast years ago.

[One Year Later]

[Setting: Lulian’s Castle Grounds, Nightfall]

Narrator: This year that has come to pass for Tiberiu was spent on harsh training with only one thought in mind; revenge. Within the year, he even found out by the pub’s employees that Lavinia was murdered in the worst possible way imaginable and he knew right away who was responsible.

Tiberiu: (In thought) You not only toyed and murdered my brother but you did the same to Lavinia...

Tiberiu: (In thought) You even planned for me to eventually find out so that my pain would double and you succeeded however, it only fuels my revenge...

Tiberiu: I believe it is time...

Accomplice I: You are the leader..if you say we are then we are

Accomplice II: I’m eager to test my new abilities..

Tiberiu: You must be wary of my former master...I recruited you both for I believe in your capabilities

Accomplice I: Thank you

Accomplice II: Yeah whatever..lets just get this over with already!

Narrator: More or less satisfied with his apprentices and his own improvements, they set off with their respective coffins strapped onto their bodies to achieve their leader’s purpose for living.

[Setting Change: Brasov City, Small Village]

Tiberiu: (In thought) I have finally caught onto your tainted stench..though is is faint...damn

Narrator: At first glance what is seen as they arrive is a small village that had been recently torched with the stench of rotting corpses of preyed victims.

Tiberiu: (In thought) Lulian.....I cannot allow you to take any more lives.

Tiberiu: Attila..Neculai scatter

[Accomplice I’s Identity Revealed]

[Main Character Insight: Attila]

Hair: Auburn, mid length, loose
Eyes: Green, blue (Heterochromia)
Weight: 201
Height: 5‘11
Ethnicity: Hungarian
Gender: Male
Age: 31 (When turned)

[Accomplice II’s Identity Revealed]

[Main Character Insight: Neculai]

Hair: Red, short, unkept
Eyes: Olive green
Weight: 132
Height: 5‘9
Ethnicity: Romanian
Gender: Male
Age: 23 (When turned)

Narrator: As the two dispersed, Tiberiu began making his way through the many corpses. He then catches onto faint breathing.

Tiberiu: (In thought) Someone may have survived..

Narrator: Weakened respirations lead him to the charred remains of a home.

Tiberiu: (In thought) This is not a human presence...

*Roaring sound*

Narrator: As Tiberiu enters, what he locates is something slouched over on the ground.

Tiberiu: (In thought) A...Lycanthrope

[Insight: Lycanthrope]

Description: Is one who is bitten by another Lycanthrope during a full moon and thus cursed. After the next full moon and their official transformation, they can then transform at will on any given time of day.

Origin: Europe.

Narrator: Sensing abnormalcy, the two appear shortly.

Tiberiu: (Shouts) You two stay back!

Attila: Yes young master

Neculai: Hmm...

Narrator: The beast-like creature towered at a height of around 6'5 to 7‘0 and an astonishing weight of about two hundred-fifty to three hundred pounds. A bulky body, silvery fur, long thick claws, large jaw, massive fangs, powerful mid to long length tail and huge hind legs in appearance.

Lycanthrope: (Deep tone) Kill me

Tiberiu: I can sense how close to death you truly are..

Lycanthrope: (Deep tone) I am hopeless...I am nothing

Tiberiu: I think not..in fact I may be of some help to you and do you not want for revenge?

Lycanthrope: .....

Tiberiu: Though I need something in return...

Lycanthrope: (Deep tone) ...Name your price

Tiberiu: Join me in accomplishing my objective..as it is yours as well...

Narrator: Neculai raises his eyebrows and Attila’s eyes widen as they hear their leader’s offer.

Neculai: (In thought) Is he serious?

Attila: (In thought) How bold..

Lycanthrope: (Deep tone) What do you mean?

Tiberiu: The man I seek is the same man who did this..

Tiberiu: You see..we’ve tracked his scent here and not only is he the kind who would do this but your village reeks of his and his follower’s pleasures

Lycanthrope: (Deep tone) ...So be it

Tiberiu: Tell me why he did this...after I help you

Lycanthrope: (Deep tone) If it is what you wish..

Tiberiu: ...I’m Tiberiu

Lycanthrope: (Deep tone) ...Octavian

[Lycanthrope’s Identity Revealed]

[Main Character Insight:
Octavian/Human Side]

Hair: Brownish-blonde, shoulder length, loose
Eyes: Steel-blue gray
Weight: 198
Height: 6‘3 1/2
Ethnicity: Romanian
Gender: Male
Age: 18

Tiberiu: And those two are Attila and Neculai...

Tiberiu: Now..I will feed you my blood

Attila: What!

Neculai: No way!

Tiberiu: Lay flat on the ground in case of involuntary self-injury through the transplant

Octavian: (Deep tone) Alright..

Narrator: Upon lying on the ground, Tiberiu makes an incision in the hand as the bestial opens his mouth and drinks the vampire blood while the two apprentices watch intrigued. Some moments later, the weakened male beings to have violent spasms, fur malts as his skin turns a white color and he becomes covered in opened cuts.

[Insight: Hybrid Lycanthrope]

Description: In Octavian's case; is a Lycanthrope who consumes vampire blood.

Tiberiu: (In thought) What will be birthed from this...

Octavian: Ahhhhh...ugh...ahhh...

*Octavian panting*

Narrator: Octavian’s body suddenly stiffens as his evolution comes to an end. He then stands up from the ground and disappears. In the next second, a shower of red.

Act III End

A wounded wolf is recruited, evolves, now bloodshed, what is the meaning of this?


[ Monster Encyclopedia ]

The text in bold is relevant to this Act:

Origin: Vampires originate in central and eastern Europe.

[Insight: Pureblood Vampire]

Description: Is the result of one born from a genuine vampire mother and father. Pure blooded vampires are rare.

Appearance: Is one who has vampire ethnicity and is born into or owns great power and money. An aristocrat of sorts.

[Insight: Turned Vampire]

Description: Is the result of a human bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chooses to turn their victim thus is cursed and transforms sometime within the hour.

Appearance: Will usually be a human who cannot fend for themselves. A tramp or an unfortunate victim in the wrong place.

[Insight: Mutated Vampire]

Description: This occurrence is unique and the result of Tiberiu’s soul not being able to normally pass on as due others who are turned.

In Tiberiu's case, he was bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chose not to turn their victim thus at that time somehow a mutation occurred rather than death. The soul was imprisoned from continuing onto the afterlife and subdued into an enforced transformation. His form is unique as he died never turning into a vampire and was then forcefully given life again. He was re-birthed with vampire-like qualities. A mutated vampire has not been ranked due to this being the first of its kind.

Lycanthrope]

† Description: Is one who is bitten by another Lycanthrope during a full moon and thus cursed. After the next full moon and their official transformation, they can then transform at will on any given time of day.

† Appearance: It usually has a height of around 6'5 to 7‘0 weighing of about two hundred-fifty to three hundred pounds. A bulky body, silvery fur, long thick claws, large jaw, massive fangs, powerful mid to long length tail and huge hind legs in appearance. It's origin is Europe.

[Insight: Hybrid Lycanthrope]

† Description: Is a Lycanthrope who consumes blood of a differing ethnic creature. In Octavian’s case; he drinks the blood of a mutated vampire thus his form is unique.

† Appearance: This pre-hybrid form invokes the Lycanthrope’s fur to malt, skin to turn a white color and the body becomes covered in opened cuts which is then stained red with the exposure to their blood.

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act III: Revenge

Ah, seems Tiberiu is soon going to catch up with Lulian. But I wonder what will happen to Octavian now :) Pity there's no way of predicting that, how cruel of you to take that away from me, lol xd (joking) :D Nice chapter, I am awaiting your next release eagerly :p
 

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A wounded wolf is recruited, evolves, now bloodshed, what is the meaning of this?[/CENTER][/FONT]
I don't know and I wanna know!xd...That was fascinating! I'm a little lost about the Lycanthrope, though. Did Lulian turn that person into a Lycanthrope or is that a Lycanthrope village that Lulian and his followers raided? I guess it's the latter?

What happened to Ocatavian after drinking Tiberiu's blood is a thing to look forward to!
 

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act III: Revenge

Ah, seems Tiberiu is soon going to catch up with Lulian. But I wonder what will happen to Octavian now :) Pity there's no way of predicting that, how cruel of you to take that away from me, lol xd (joking) :D Nice chapter, I am awaiting your next release eagerly :p
Maybe so or maybe not lol Sorry about that but what I would say is allow your thoughts to unfurl over Octavian’s outcome! XD I am thrilled that you feel that way and thanks :)

I don't know and I wanna know!xd...That was fascinating! I'm a little lost about the Lycanthrope, though. Did Lulian turn that person into a Lycanthrope or is that a Lycanthrope village that Lulian and his followers raided? I guess it's the latter?

What happened to Ocatavian after drinking Tiberiu's blood is a thing to look forward to!
Thanks! ;) Well, I unfortunately cannot say whether or not your questions are correct. However, these questions may be answered in the future ^.^
 

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act III: Revenge

SWEEETTTT!!!! Definitely like this chapter :D Plus you integrated a Lycanthrope into it which is AWESOME!!! I love the thrill of the chase and the plot of revenge as well!! Can't WAIT til the next exciting edition!!
 

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act III: Revenge



Maybe so or maybe not lol Sorry about that but what I would say is allow your thoughts to unfurl over Octavian’s outcome! XD I am thrilled that you feel that way and thanks :)



Thanks! ;) Well, I unfortunately cannot say whether or not your questions are correct. However, these questions may be answered in the future ^.^
Ehehe, will do!:D
 

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act III: Revenge

SWEEETTTT!!!! Definitely like this chapter :D Plus you integrated a Lycanthrope into it which is AWESOME!!! I love the thrill of the chase and the plot of revenge as well!! Can't WAIT til the next exciting edition!!
Thanks and I'm glad to see that the readers are responding well to the Lycnathrope's involvement. Yeah, I was afraid of readers who would not agree/particularly like the revenge plot but it is nice to see that there are some that do ;)
Ehehe, will do!:D
:)
 

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act III: Revenge

So it turned out to be true then:p Nice work with the werewolf. I liked this chapter as I think it's the best so far. For some reason it's more easy to follow and more enjoyable to read and I like how the story develouped in this one and the way it's heading.

One thing though from what Sunny mentioned. He couldn't have been turned by Lulian as he's a vampire, meaning a werewolf attacked this village and turned this man? Or maybe Lulian has a werewolf under his command? A Vampired can't turn a man into a werewolf, so I guess it can't be his doing directly? As it seems in this chapter that Lulian was behind it, so in other word he must have an werewolf under his command or something?:D:p Also looks to me that this man Octavian will become a daywalker kind of like a guy, only with a mix of werewolf and vampire blood, like an ultimate creture?:p

Looking forward to the next one;)
 

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act III: Revenge

you got talent xd
Thank you for the compliment ;)

So it turned out to be true then:p Nice work with the werewolf. I liked this chapter as I think it's the best so far. For some reason it's more easy to follow and more enjoyable to read and I like how the story develouped in this one and the way it's heading.

One thing though from what Sunny mentioned. He couldn't have been turned by Lulian as he's a vampire, meaning a werewolf attacked this village and turned this man? Or maybe Lulian has a werewolf under his command? A Vampired can't turn a man into a werewolf, so I guess it can't be his doing directly? As it seems in this chapter that Lulian was behind it, so in other word he must have an werewolf under his command or something?:D:p Also looks to me that this man Octavian will become a daywalker kind of like a guy, only with a mix of werewolf and vampire blood, like an ultimate creture?:p

Looking forward to the next one;)
Yes it did and thanks ^.^ I am glad that you feel that way as I was beginning to think that this Fanfic was gradually losing its flame. Well, I wish I could say for sure but I do not want to spoil by any means necessary. Although, you make that difficult lol You have thought this through haven’t you ;) I really like your theories a lot ;p Or maybe he may be killed as he is out of control ;) Well, anyhow the answers will be on the next and I am looking forward to posting it ^.^
 
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Yes it did and thanks ^.^ I am glad that you feel that way as I was beginning to think that this Fanfic was gradually losing its flame. Well, I wish I could say for sure but I do not want to spoil by any means necessary. Although, you make that difficult lol You have thought this through haven’t you ;) I really like your theories a lot ;p Or maybe he may be killed as he is out of control ;) Well, anyhow the answers will be on the next and I am looking forward to posting it ^.^
Nah not at all, it's still going strong and it's only the beginning yet;)

Hehe I understand:p Hehexd Well that's what theorizing is for, right?:p
I'll check it out first thing in the morning, well almost at least:p;)
 

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Ah, pretty brief chapter, but still enough to keep me going. As soon as I saw 'Lycanthrope', I immediately began thinking for the 6-Star Beast-Warrior Ritual Monster from Yu-Gi-Oh, lol (I've been customizing decks all day, so that's mainly why); however, I'm curious as to what exactly happened to their furry ally after he ingested Tiberiu's blood - Guess I'll find out in the next chapter. (Y)
 

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Ah, pretty brief chapter, but still enough to keep me going. As soon as I saw 'Lycanthrope', I immediately began thinking for the 6-Star Beast-Warrior Ritual Monster from Yu-Gi-Oh, lol (I've been customizing decks all day, so that's mainly why); however, I'm curious as to what exactly happened to their furry ally after he ingested Tiberiu's blood - Guess I'll find out in the next chapter. (Y)
Yeah I know, looking back at it-the chapter was fairly small lol I know of the card you speak of xd Hopefully what happens next is to your liking lol ^.^
 

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Thoughts so far:

Well I must say I'm not a fan of the format. I myself am a huge fan of description, which this type of format leaves not much room for that. Also there are some parts I feel as if I'm reading a history book, though I understand it's for background information.

After reading this chapter though I must regret that I have to stop and walk away. There were a few things that upset me about it as I myself follow the lycan/vampire lore closely. (Too much to explain about that.) The whole lycan drinking the vampire's blood is a huge turn off for me. Especially since they have a supernatural healing factor and makes the vampire's blood useless. :|

Anyways I know it's a ff and I'm looking too much into things, which is why I need to take a break. lol Sometimes I take things too seriously. xd Your wording is superb when it comes to writing and I like that best about your work. Also to me it seems as if you are rushing, maybe due to the format, but things are happening way too quickly for my taste. Comparing to all the events that have occurred in all the chapters I have read already and the fact that I read three chapters in less than half an hour. lol

I do like the fact that you wrote about something other than Naruto or another anime. I didn't come across any grammar errors which is a nice change! =DD I will continue to read them once I collect my thoughts. Good job otherwise! ^_^ It would make a great show. To be able to see what was going on.
 
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Thoughts so far:

Well I must say I'm not a fan of the format. I myself am a huge fan of description, which this type of format leaves not much room for that. Also there are some parts I feel as if I'm reading a history book, though I understand it's for background information.

After reading this chapter though I must regret that I have to stop and walk away. There were a few things that upset me about it as I myself follow the lycan/vampire lore closely. (Too much to explain about that.) The whole lycan drinking the vampire's blood is a huge turn off for me. Especially since they have a supernatural healing factor and makes the vampire's blood useless. :|

Anyways I know it's a ff and I'm looking too much into things, which is why I need to take a break. lol Sometimes I take things too seriously. xd Your wording is superb when it comes to writing and I like that best about your work. Also to me it seems as if you are rushing, maybe due to the format, but things are happening way too quickly for my taste. Comparing to all the events that have occurred in all the chapters I have read already and the fact that I read three chapters in less than half an hour. lol

I do like the fact that you wrote about something other than Naruto or another anime. I didn't come across any grammar errors which is a nice change! =DD I will continue to read them once I collect my thoughts. Good job otherwise! ^_^ It would make a great show. To be able to see what was going on.
First of all, I apologize for taking a year to reply to your post.I think the reason why I didn’t respond back when I read it was due to you raising some interesting points.Which made me feel like there were many inconsistencies that needed to be addressed but could no longer edit my work due to the time gap.

I respect your feedback and thank you for your compliments. I would only like to address one thing. That would be the whole Lycan’s healing abilities canceling out Vampire blood. I will say that I went through much research and I believe that the Lycan being affected by Vampire blood concept in my story was related to Selene/Michael’s situation in Underworld-I suppose took that route. So if you take that into account maybe it could be a little more forgiving.

About the lack of description-I was actually criticized for incorporating too much detailing in the first Fanfiction I ever wrote. They stated it seemed more like a novelfic rather than a Fanfic and ever since, my Fanfics have been in this style.

This response of mine was not at all to remind you to continue where you last left off or anything of the like. I just wanted to address this and see your opinion ;)
 
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