forgotten

[izinagi54]

once was world in years long gone
for it had fallen to history
erased through time
just like the hero's of old
who will be of bold
to suffer my cold beating heart
over my dead and broken soul

i lye awake half dead
have ever been so missled
instead of the night above
like the tigers upon its prey
i lay slain and razed

we are the forgotten
the lost and never found
why do we always follow the crowd
the once forgotten dreams
come loose in the seams
as the travesty falls runied
for the storm as taketh
my darkness

eligehate ies erigehate elikee deus aelemigehai emigehate abeoue tehae deoue

(light is right like god almighty might above the dove)


- christopher

 

[King Volcano]

Cool Rep+ haha. I love poetry!

 

[Killer Vision]

good one chris!

 

[MidKnight]

NICE! You never cease to amaze Chris xd

 

[Neji360]

+REP, that's sick

 

[izinagi54]

the bottom is latin

 

[Cerox0]

I just had to keep re-reading it, it was sick. +Rep bro

 

[izinagi54]

believe it or not it only took me 2 minutes to write all of that

 

[Neji360]

believe it or not it only took me 2 minutes to write all of that

You my friend is what they would call "A beast" U_U

 

[Cerox0]

believe it or not it only took me 2 minutes to write all of that

When you have it you have it,

As debating emits from me
Your strength lies in poetry

 

[Yuka]

very Beautiful Poem

 

[Sir Blades]

i like it +rep

 

[U Mad Bro]

Nice, +rep

 

[Rorasa]

awesome Chris, keep it up

 

[Supermacaquecool]

i lye awake half dead
have ever been so missled
instead of the night above
like the tigers upon its prey
i lay slain and razed

- christopher

This is my fav. stanza. In this one I could get sonority better.
Poetry is not really mi thing, I had to read it a few times to understand (In the first verse you used a different structure for the sentece instead of the easy one: Subject+verb+etc. It worked well, but requires, at least in my case, to be read more than once.). It was good though. I'm begging to form mental images with the verses.

 

[Don Roberto]

So deep ...

 

[Chatte]

Lovely!!