[Approved] First Bio constructive critism welcome! (also for approval)

[Aizen Tono]

Basic Information
Name:Aizen Tono
Nickname:The Prodigy
Gender:Male
Age:20
Clan:none

Looks:Younger version of Aizen from Bleach

Personality:Cold and Calculating

Village Info.Originally from Sunagakure
Village of Birth:Sunagakure
Village of Alliance:None

Rank//Chakra Info.Chuunin Rank and Stats
Ninja Rank:Chuunin
Specialty:none
Elements:Wind
Your ninjutsu:
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(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)
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(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.
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(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.
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(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.
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(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
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(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).
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(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)


Background Info.Outcast in Sunagakure for being different, envied for having great skill, and easily surpassing peers. Grew to hate the village structure, and single mindedness of the Kazekage. Left Sunagakure at the age of 16 to find my own path in life. Massive ego regarding skills in battle, and battlefield tactics, though when enraged will resort to brute force versus proper tactics and battlefield analysis. I have a strong belief in survival of the fittest, and eliminating weakness to bring about peace

History:Abandon by my family at a young age because of raw talent, and uncontrollable rage, I learned to survive on my own, and learned to observe my environment to take advantage of every opportunity. I became emotionally dead after being abandon by my family, thus learning to rely on myself and no one else, cold towards my peers and unwilling to work in a team environment. I learned to observe tactics at a young age to gain advantage against strong opponents thus becoming very logical and calculating every risk and scenario. I am willing to do whatever it takes to become the strongest, most powerful ninja in all the world, even if it means destroying my former allies/village.

Other

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Battles

Won:0
Lost:0

~Approved~

 

[Pineapple]

Give atlest a picture or a discriptive paragrapg about his looks...
and wins and losses should be 0.

 

[Dracule]

And add the basic ninjutsu. And if he has no clan then it should say "none" not "not yet"

 

[ekettune]

And put the first element you would like to learn.

 

[Aizen Tono]

quick question, how do i put a pic in

 

[Aizen Tono]

ok ready for approval please

 

[Pineapple]

add theme song

 

[Anduril]

And also your history shld be more detailed from the time u were born to your present state roughly what all happened in your life

 

[Aizen Tono]

add theme song

do I actually upload a MP3 or WMV file or do I post a link

 

[Black Butler]

And we don't approve it, Caliburn does.

 

[Aizen Tono]

And also your history shld be more detailed from the time u were born to your present state roughly what all happened in your life

I will take your suggestion and add more details and specific events. Thanks for the advice

 

[Black Butler]

do I actually upload a MP3 or WMV file or do I post a link

Link

 

[Aizen Tono]

And we don't approve it, Caliburn does.

do I need to send a PM or VM to Caliburn? to get approval

 

[Black Butler]

He'll come and approve it, just wait, because he doesn't get on for a few hours.

 

[Aizen Tono]

bump

 

[Aizen Tono]

sorry to keep doin this but......................
BUMP

 

[darknesscreater]

only 1 element for now, and add more history

 

[Caliburn]

Remove an element, you haven't learend two elements so only post the one you first want to learn. Also bumping in this section is useless or do you think it's normal to keep posting bump on the same day you posted it while the threads in this section are organized on date they were posted?

 

[-Haku Yuki-]

Its good but your element only have the first one you want to learn you can't have two yet after you've learned two and rank inporves in two months get it re appoved (update) puls I think you can't use wood yet

 

[JTjutsumaster]

also, you should use "SPOILERS"
Its basicallysomething that shortensyour sentence. Like you should use one in history,or personality, Etc.
This is a spoiler --->

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If you cannot find it, just type in [SPOILER ] (without space) then type in your sentence, then at the end, type in [/SPOILER]

So it should look like:

Spoiler

(Insert Data Here)

I hope this helped