Ok, I will kinda pause this training for a moment so I help you out when it comes to describing. It is quite good overall, although I would advise you to start using dots to separate your sentences. This will help both you and your opponent to understand the move. This way, there will be less arguments and people won't be able to use it against you as they understood something differently due to non-existence of punctuation. Big letters at the begining of the sentences, dots, comma etcetc. Basically I will re-write what you just wrote just with a punctuation as an example. It is not something that is hard, although it is something which will help you out grow as a role-player.
shikamaru run towards his opponent while focusing his chakra into his right hand as he reach the opponent he apply nature manipulation to change it into fire he also apply shape manipulation to make the fire burst around his hand then he throw a punch into his opponent face then he continue to focuses his chakra into his left hand than apply nature and shape manipulation to create fire a round his left hand then he puch into his fiery fist into the opponent stomach he then proceed to focuses his chakra into his left leg then apply nature and shape manipulation to create fire around his feet then he kick the into upper part of his opponent sending the opponent flying backwards while his opponent in mid air he quickly run towards his opponent while focusing his chakra into his feet he then jump towards his opponent while apply nature and shape manipulation to the chakra in his feet creating a fire around his feet then proceed to spin 360 degree while strething his fiery feet kicking his opponent in the rib sending it flying further.
Shikamaru runs towards his opponent while focusing his chakra into his right hand. As he reaches the opponent he applies nature manipulation to change it into fire
and he also applies shape manipulation to make the fire burst around his hand. Then he throws a punch into his opponent face
and then he continues to focus his chakra into his left hand. Appl
ying nature and shape manipulation
he create
s fire around his left hand
and then he puch
es his fiery fist into the opponent stomach. He proceeds to focus his chakra into his left leg
and then appl
ies nature and shape manipulation to create fire around his feet. He
makes a kicking motion directed towards upper part of his opponent, sending the opponent flying backwards.
Now, while his opponent
is in mid air he quickly runs towards his opponent while focusing his chakra into his feet. He then jumps towards his opponent while appl
ying nature and shape manipulation to the chakra in his feet creating a fire around his feet. He proceeds to spin 360 degree while strething his fiery feet kicking his opponent in the rib sending him flying further.
I didn't make any chages to the text itself except few grammer fixes and addition of punctuation. Tell me if you see any difference between the two and which sounds better when reading out loud. Which one is easier to understand and continue on from. Hope this helps a bit. If you don't have any questions we can continue!