Dawn of The Cliffraiders

[Rorasa]

Very descriptive and nice way to end it, leaving you wanting more. Nice job and thanks for sharing.

 

[Hori]

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I want more please!!

btw I hope the next one would be longer than the first one

 

[Nimmy]

Oh I really like this! I find fanfics so much more enjoyable to read when they use English properly and have few to no grammatical errors, so I loved reading this! You use wonderful vocabulary, and your imagery is superb =D

As everyone said with the dialogue, you need to spread it out, but that doesn't make it any less of a great beginning to a story! I can't wait to read more =D

 

[Adachi]

Honestly, your imagery is amazing. I could imagine the interactions between the characters, and to be honest, I thought for a moment that you might have characterized Ethan after yourself.
And fantasy, eh? Looking forward to the epic plot twist and battles.

 

[Ndlovu]

Very descriptive and nice way to end it, leaving you wanting more. Nice job and thanks for sharing.

Thanks... No problem

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I was worried no-one would like it.

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I want more please!!

btw I hope the next one would be longer than the first one

It is longer don't worry.. =D

Oh I really like this! I find fanfics so much more enjoyable to read when they use English properly and have few to no grammatical errors, so I loved reading this! You use wonderful vocabulary, and your imagery is superb =D

As everyone said with the dialogue, you need to spread it out, but that doesn't make it any less of a great beginning to a story! I can't wait to read more =D

Thanks a lot I just hope you keep enjoying it...

Honestly, your imagery is amazing. I could imagine the interactions between the characters, and to be honest, I thought for a moment that you might have characterized Ethan after yourself.
And fantasy, eh? Looking forward to the epic plot twist and battles.

Thanks, I try to capture the moments and display them appropriately... Yea, it is fantasy... To be honest I didn't even think of catagory/genre when it came to me. Oh yes, I try to be as creative as possible without overdoing it; but you can expect a lot of unique things to happen. =D I really hope you enjoy the rest of the journey.. O_O

 

[Alice in Noodleland]

Good Job ND! I honestly Enjoyed reading it.
Bravo! Okay..Dont forget to send me the link for the upcoming Chapters okay.

 

[Lili-Chwan]

I like your descriptions, but I'm unsure of what the story is... You began by describing something that made me thing of a dirt and sand cliff, like the Grand-Canyon, and then you started speaking of snow-suits and the Everest and digging. Is it that they found a different world underneath the Everest?

 

[Ndlovu]

I like your descriptions, but I'm unsure of what the story is... You began by describing something that made me thing of a dirt and sand cliff, like the Grand-Canyon, and then you started speaking of snow-suits and the Everest and digging. Is it that they found a different world underneath the Everest?

Trying not to spoil too much, but essentailly yes it is underneath Mount Everest...Thanks for reading it by the way, I really appreciate it.. =D

 

[Vegeta]

Very interesting read, I'm waiting to see how the ambush by the Imps plays out!

 

[Ndlovu]

Very interesting read, I'm waiting to see how the ambush by the Imps plays out!

Thanks, I hope you enjoy the upcoming chapter...

 

[Vegeta]

Thanks, I hope you enjoy the upcoming chapter...

no doubt, hit my VM with the link when you get it ready

 

[Ndlovu]

no doubt, hit my VM with the link when you get it ready

Sure thing, will definitely do that =D