copy ninja of konoha part 7

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Copy ninja of konoha chapter 7
We see Naruto standing in a courtyard looking place in a house there are many stone statues in front of him. Naruto is not wearing his jumpsuit rather he is just in the orange jacket like thing he will wear in the shippuden series.
Naruto: (making two clones at a time) ‘rasengan’
Two orbs of chakra appeared at both of his hands and as he lunged forward to strike the clones vanished, the rasengans hit the stone.
Jiriaya: congratulation Naruto that was really fast but you need to get faster and instead of just lunging forward send the clones and gather Intel then charge yourself.
Naruto: yes sensei “shadow clones jutsu”
Two clones of Naruto appeared and vanished as Naruto sank to the ground
Jiriaya: Naruto its time ask for the chakra from kyuubi enter your subconscious.
Naruto closed his eyes red aura of chakra started to surround him he could feel the powers of the demon fox entering him.
……….meanwhile……….
Kakashi stepped inside the temple of the Uchichas a chilling feeling moved through his spine.
Kakashi: what was that? It feels like I am being watched. Then it’s time to give the test I think.
He pulled his headband up to reveal his sharingan. At once thousands of kunai came at him.
Kakashi: I can see them with my eyes but not with sharingan how is that possible is it some kind of illusion. Very well I will trust the sharingan then,
He stood still the kunais disappeared but at the same time two of the statues yielding the heavy axes came to life. They started swinging the axes but Kakashi was able to predict every move of the statues with his sharingan.
Kakashi: damn like this I can’t progress it’s time to destroy these statues, “raikiri”
The axe came swinging at him, Kakashi jumped to dodge it but instead of moving away this time he attacked the other statue that was coming at him. Raikiri cut through the statue as it fell down. Before the other statue could move raikiri moved through that as well.
Kakashi: now to the next room I wonder what it has in store for me.
Scene changes to a dark room where Danzo is seen sitting a candle is burning just in front of him but the glow is able to only enlighten Danzo.
Mysterious speaker: lord Danzo the copy ninja has entered the temple sometimes ago I am still keeping an eye over the entrance.
Danzo: excellent the plan is falling to places if Kakashi is able to awaken his mangekyo sharingan then the rest of the plan will be complete as well.
Scene changes to a forest where we see a team of leaf shinobi in the defensive line.
First shinobi: be careful make sure they cannot find a blind spot.
Suddenly the area is covered with a dense mist.
Second shinobi: what the hell who is casting this jut...
Rests of his words were never complete as a great sword cleaved his body in to two. We see suigetsu jumping out of the mist with zabuza’s sword in his hand.
The remainder of the konoha shinobis looked bewildered
The third shinobi: you guys go while I handle this brat he drew his kunai and lunged at suigetsu.
Suigetsu lunged as well their stroke connected and could of dust was formed the konoha nin was pressed in the ground as the impact form their strike had created a crater.
Shinobi: you will not win lap dog of orochimaru.
At once two flaming shuriken came at suigetsu from his back. But was blocked by the water clone of suigetsu.
Suigetsu: now witness the true power of the swords man of mist.
The shinobi jumped back to avoid the strikes of suigetsu’s sword. His feet touched a drop of water and suddenly a dome of water surrounded him.
Suigetsu: hope you like my powers my dear leaf shinobi in this dome you will die from the lack of oxygen. So enjoy the last bath of your life.
While the two remaining shinobi was in grave danger as well because blocking their path stood none other than Sauske Uchicha.
Sauske: you seem to have chosen a wrong path,
The two shinobi looked in horror as the path behind them had suddenly caught fire the fire was spreading in circle closing in towards them.
The shinobis waited for a split second and then lunged at Sauske who drew his sword suddenly a sword went through the throat of one of them and a lighting infused hand pierced another from the back.
Sauske: what piece of shit konoha has become? Sending shinobis who cannot even see through a little genjutsu.
Some where in a hut near the village hidden in the waterfalls
We see two figures in black cloak watching the training of Naruto with Jiriaya.
Kakuzu: it’s time to lead our attack I will handle the old man you take out the kyuubi kid.
Suddenly they were startled by the voice that came from behind
Jiriaya: I think it’s going to be tougher than that akatsuki.
Next chapter Jiriaya vs. Kakuzu
part 7:
part 6:
chapter 5:
chapter 4:
chapter 3:
chapter 2:
chapter 1:
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This was a great chapter for you my friend. I'm looking forward to the battle between Kakuzu and Jiraiya, although I'm curious as to what you're going to do with Hidan (if you're going to have him fight with Naruto, or along side his partner...or Hidan might not even be the other person, you never specified lol)

Only thing I found wrong with it is Naruto's calling Jiraiya "sensei" Naruto's attitude towards him isn't that of a "yes sensei" "very good sensei" type of thing. It's more of a complaining for a short moment, throwing the phrase "Pervy(ero) Sage(sennin)" in there and then Naruto acting stubborn and then doing what Jiraiya tells him to. Their relationship is like the constently bickering master and student with the, love, admiration, and respect all hidden underneath everything, yet they both know how they feel about each other and how the other feels (Naruto respects Jiraiya and cares for him deeply, as well as Jiraiya feels like Naruto is his grandson and cares about him. They both know that the other knows and the bickering is just their bit)

That wasn't really anything major though as it was one phrase basically. Although everything else was great. I like the Kakashi and Danzo thing in there. The Konoha-nin going after Sasuke was alright, but I definatly liked the Danzo and Kakashi training and your cliffhanger, and build up to Jiraiya and Kakuzu's fight.

"Thanked Post" :D
 

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This was a great chapter for you my friend. I'm looking forward to the battle between Kakuzu and Jiraiya, although I'm curious as to what you're going to do with Hidan (if you're going to have him fight with Naruto, or along side his partner...or Hidan might not even be the other person, you never specified lol)

Only thing I found wrong with it is Naruto's calling Jiraiya "sensei" Naruto's attitude towards him isn't that of a "yes sensei" "very good sensei" type of thing. It's more of a complaining for a short moment, throwing the phrase "Pervy(ero) Sage(sennin)" in there and then Naruto acting stubborn and then doing what Jiraiya tells him to. Their relationship is like the constently bickering master and student with the, love, admiration, and respect all hidden underneath everything, yet they both know how they feel about each other and how the other feels (Naruto respects Jiraiya and cares for him deeply, as well as Jiraiya feels like Naruto is his grandson and cares about him. They both know that the other knows and the bickering is just their bit)

That wasn't really anything major though as it was one phrase basically. Although everything else was great. I like the Kakashi and Danzo thing in there. The Konoha-nin going after Sasuke was alright, but I definatly liked the Danzo and Kakashi training and your cliffhanger, and build up to Jiraiya and Kakuzu's fight.

"Thanked Post" :D
thanx pal i wil be mr careful next time
 
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Re: This is My Attempt on a fan fic

this may not be everyones cup of tea i just getting an opinion thats all

The 6th Hokage
The is set quite a while after the 4th great ninja war

CHAPTER 1

Lady Tsunade was in her office sipping her sake, with the rising sun radiating. The incandescent sun definitely brought warmth unattained since quite long! Suddenly footsteps were heard and soon…
*knock knock*
the door opened, giving Tsunade the sight of Shizune with a pile of papers!

Tsunade: So is everything okay?

Shizune: Yes, the place is all set! However, the two counsellors want to see him but he’s not at his place!

Tsunade: Tell the two oldies to calm down! Besides, I know where he is and he has definitely awakened quickly today. His dream is going to come true.

Kakashi: Yes, even I know where he is!

Tsunade: I can see that even latecomers make effort on special days even if they also could have use the door.

Kakashi: Guess some habits still die hard.

Shizune: Eh, sorry to interrupt you two but if you know where he is, you could perhaps tell me. I need him to meet these two, then some rules, the All I… *interrupted*

Tsunade: Let it be. He’ll see all that later on and besides, he’s surely having taste of his best till date.

Kakashi: Not to forget, he’ll go some other place then to pay tribute.

Shizune: I see you all are supporting his ways but I maintain that he’s needed here.

Tsunade: I think I’ll support him since Nawaki and Dan’s dream are finally coming true.

Kakashi: I’ll see I’m not the only one whose habits die hard!

Tsunade: What do you mean by that?

Kakashi: With you stepping down, you finally get less jobs and taunts from the two elders.

Tsunade: Sharp as always, Kakashi.

With smile on her face, she continues appreciating her sake!
.....
Back in Konoha, Teuchi, seemingly very drowsy, was preparing ramen.

Teuchi: You definitely came very early today. Anxious?

Naruto: I was before coming here. So is it ready?

Teuchi: Yes, here it is.

Naruto: Finally….

He began eating at his legendary eating pace.

Naruto: Aaah, this is the best taste I’ve had ever.

Teuchi: It’s the moment and the feeling. Your dream is coming true today.

Naruto: Another?

Teuchi: What you finished already?

An hour later, with satisfaction on his face…

Naruto: So here you are and sorry for awakening you that early.

Teuchi: It’s nothing. I’ll go for a little snooze later on.

Naruto: Still, don’t forget to come.

Teuchi: Of course.

Naruto: Okay then, got to go.

In an orange-flash, he suddenly disappeared.
...........
Somewhere else…

ANBU member: Go now and deliver the letter to the Hokage. Oh no, he’s coming.
He makes the jutsu sign to eliminate himself in order to leave no sign of him when suddenly he is stroked dead with a green flash.
........
Back in Konoha, Naruto pays tribute to Jiraiya’s tomb.

Naruto: Ero-Sennin, finally, I’ll be attaining one step closer to complete your unachieved dream. I hope I did not disappoint you. I still regret though, not to have learned much more from you, not to have learned much more from your Godfather’s point of view. Dad was right, you are the perfect model. You may be pervy but you’re the best teacher I could have dreamed of. I don’t know if I’ll be able to change this world but I’ll never back down. Nagato, Granny Chiyo, Sasuke, Dad, Mom and you all have put your last breaths to make me attain this day. I need to carry on your legacy, your hopes! I’ll fulfill my promise at whatever cost. This curse will be broken!

Naruto: closed his eyes to prevent tears but in vain. He saw everyone smiling to him, giving him an undescribed impulse. His desire to gloat was unstoppable and eventually, he smiled to everybody and said…

Naruto: Rest assured, I’ll never give up!
.........
Back to the Hokage’s office, the villagers have gathered all around to see the presentation of the new Hokage.

Sakura: What! He’s still not arrived?


Shikamaru: Really, that’s all him. His dream is becoming true and he does not even care to be punctual.

Kakashi: Come on, don’t blame him. He’ll be here.

Shikamaru: Oh, I guess it is useless to be surprised then. He just followed his sensei’s path.

Kakashi: Eh, what do you mean? You…*interrupted*

Shizune: Silence, Tsunade-sama is going to make her speech to the villagers

Tsunade: Welcome every one this is what I have to say since the Third’s death & the 4th Shinobi War, I was chosen to be your Hokage. While my decisions may sometimes go completely wrong, I hope that I did not disappoint you overall. The jewels that my ancestors kept throughout their lives were entrusted to me but they were protected by someone else mostly. Today, I’ll finally pass the torch to the next generation hero. I’ll present to you, the sixth Hokage…

Her body was chilled by the moment but using her firmness, she declared!

Tsunade: UZUMAKI NARUTO!

In a sudden flash, he appeared his back turned to all villagers! His orange-black coat was almost hanging till his feet. The Uzumaki sign was still present in broad yellow and his hair was grown a bit more! His determination was clearly seen in his eyes.

Hinata: Naruto-kun, your hat!

she then gave Naruto his official Hokage hat while handling their new-born son Jiraiya in her other hand and standing next to her was there 13 year old sons Minato & His twin brother Naruto they were gonna graduate from the academy next month and also standing next to her was there 12 year old daughter Kushina who was gonna start at the academy tomorrow Naruto took the hat and pointed it towards the Hokage Monument!


Naruto: You all will be astonished, believe me! I’ll be the best Hokage, so don’t expect me to disappoint you all!

He grinned a little and then turned back to give his Hokage speech to the village
Naruto: Thank you Tsunade I will accept the position of Hokage with an open heart and I will do my best to change things for the better & yes Since the Third’s death & 4th great Shinobi War you acted as Hokage yes your decisions may have sometimes gone wrong but you inspired many Shinobi & you did not disappoint any one we all looked up to you, you believed in me, & Yes The jewels of your ancestors were kept throughout their lives , yes they were entrusted to you but now your stepping down to entrust the village to a new Hokage and that is me I will do my best to protect this village like you did.
After his speech he turned around and saw Sai

the end soon to come Chapter 2

i may put a seconed chapter depends if i see the point depends on the replies i get
Bro ur chepter is nice,but this othr guy is tring 2 steal someones ff
You're gonna pay heavily for this rip-off! Mark my words.
LOL all right! And why did it have to be posted on someone else's FF? @#$%^&*!!!
 
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