copy ninja of konoha part 2

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COPY NINJA OF KONOHA CHAPTER 2

We see an opening in the thick outgrow of the forest ,the sound of river flow can be heard from the clearing ahead upon the branch of a tree near by a konoha shinobi can be seen, while two more shinobi wait on the ground. After a while the shinobi jumps down on he has jet black hair a cut in mark of x on his left cheek. He speaks in a hushed voice” Rin we are close bye I can see him stopping finally, he is definitely alone its better if we intercept him now, I am sure we can defeat him. I know he is s class and all but we have the numbers on our side,”
Rin: we shall see that but first we need a strong strategy in battle field rushing headlong means only one thing death. I know that quite well, so I say first we plan then rush.
As she says this last line her mind plays the memory which has been haunting her for 19 years. It was 3rd shinobi war then she was part of team 7 with Obito and Kakashi, 4th hokage was their sensei. It was their first mission together without Minato and it was their last as well.
Flashback: A young Kakashi, Rin with another boy is seen, Kakashi still has his both eyes. The new boy wore sunglasses and had jet black hair he was Obito Uchicha. Their mission was to go into the enemy territory and blow up a bridge that provided reinforcement to the shinobi’s of hidden rock village. They were crossing a river everything was smooth.
Rin: this job is just too easy I wonder why sensei was so serious about this mission till now we have not met even a single threat at all.
Obito: it’s just easiest task I am going finish it myself Uchicha name is strong enough to strike fear into any we encounter.
Kakashi: wait this is a trap….
Suddenly a huge ball of fire comes their way Rin just managed to dodge it somehow. Next she felt the cold edge of a blade near her neck
Flash back ends.
“Rin we are going to attack all out “said Toushiro a young male with brown hair.
Rin: ok then I am with you lets charge,Kai you will begin the attack all we know about this target is that he uses water and wind type jutsus.in this fight we will need your fire style jutsu,Toushiro you will provide back up with your earth style jutsu will take the rear. But be careful don’t underestimate this guy, he is a legend
Toushiro: roger, let’s go Kai
Kai dashed into the opening making some quick hand signs cried out “fire style great fireball jutsu huge ball of fire raged to the target, but Saban managed to dodge the attack easily, he had a mask on his face a black mask that hid everything save his eyes,
Saban: so it begins bring it on kid show me what u got (takes out a huge sword)
Kai: you got it bastard, no one messes with konoha still manages to get off, dodge this you shit head “fire style: twin serpent”
Two snakes of fire comes out of two sides and attack Saban
Saban: water style water barrier,
Great barrier of water rose of one side and blocked one of the snakes while Saban cut down the remaining serpent using his sword infused with water chakra,
Saban: now it’s my turn
He rushed forward with sword which now was gleaming blue with wind chakra.Kai used his kunai to block the attack but he was thrown back from the Impact of the clash with his kunai broken.
Saban: now you die.
He charged again but this time a large rock rose from the ground to stop his attack
Toushiro: earth style rock barrier
Saban: now it’s getting interesting “wind style great wind vortex”
A vortex of wind was formed around him that charged straight with massive force
Toushiro: Kai get ready I will weaken his attack then it’s our chance to take him down “earth style: great rock barrier”
Rocks rose form ground blocking the path of Saban’s jutsu but the rocks shattered in many pieces
“Fire style: fire dragon jutsu” Kai took his chance but strangely his dragon of flame could not touch Saban
It just finished in the halfway.
Saban: fools the fire cannot burn without oxygen the wind vortex draws the wind out of the centre u cannot use fire style here
“He cannot but I can “Rin said “fire style: fire ball jutsu”
But Saban dodged it
Saban: face my wrath “tempest style: killing waves”
Waves of grey water charged forward hitting Kai,
Toushiro: its bad Rin take care of Kai I will hold him off
He used a smoke bomb to get close to Saban but before he could strike
“Tempest style: hand of death “Toushiro coughed blood as he staggered to stay on his foot but fell
Saban: now u will learn why I am feared. Even the third raikage couldn’t stop me
Rin’s eyes widened with fear when she heard it but before the blade with grey chakra touch her
“Raikiri” a lighting infused hand stopped the blade. Finally Kakashi is here.
Saban looked in disbelief as his sword is cracked in the middle
Next chapter Kakashi vs. the eyes of death


guys this is second part of my chapter hope u like it
 

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pretty good!! can i get a link to the first chapter?! and i liked the way how wind vortex absorbed the oxygen near by thus nullifying the fire attacks>>> pretty smart jutsu we got here!!
 

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nice chapter.but its toooo short. its took only 3-4 minuts 2 read. next time make it bigger.
its nice but not intresating.make it intresating also.
here r some points
1. use some large size words.
2. put the space between pergraphs
3. use colours 4 characters name
4. always put a link 2 all previous chapters

i like that you use science in ur story. fight scence r good but still need some work. Over all good job. Keep it up.:)
 

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nice chapter.but its toooo short. its took only 3-4 minuts 2 read. next time make it bigger.
its nice but not intresating.make it intresating also.
here r some points
1. use some large size words.
2. put the space between pergraphs
3. use colours 4 characters name
4. always put a link 2 all previous chapters

i like that you use science in ur story. fight scence r good but still need some work. Over all good job. Keep it up.:)


will try to do it this time i tried to concentrate on the fight scene so the remaining chapter got bit bad i will try to rectify that
 

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It was good...entertaining, I just wish the ending, with Kakashi coming in, could've sounded more epic. But I liked the fight, and the end of the flashback in the beginning.
For the layout...you add quotations (") when people speak, which is good, but then you don't do it for every dialogue, so it seems sort of messy/unclear (to me anyway).
 

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the link doesn't work:( and carry on your work, you will get better as the time goes!!:)
It was good...entertaining, I just wish the ending, with Kakashi coming in, could've sounded more epic. But I liked the fight, and the end of the flashback in the beginning.
For the layout...you add quotations (") when people speak, which is good, but then you don't do it for every dialogue, so it seems sort of messy/unclear (to me anyway).
I will surely try to rectify these problems.but seems like a i have a lot of home work to do to make the story better
 

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OH then can u tell me how do i put the link
You can eddit your thread and put the links at the bottom. On your toolbar overhead where you have the options like bold, italics, unterline, and the allign buttons you're going to see a botton that says post link and then you're goint to need to post the URL to whatever you're trying to insert. The icon is going to look like a litte earth. I've persally just copy and pasted some things but people have said that doesn't always work so I use that.

Nice second chapter
 

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You can eddit your thread and put the links at the bottom. On your toolbar overhead where you have the options like bold, italics, unterline, and the allign buttons you're going to see a botton that says post link and then you're goint to need to post the URL to whatever you're trying to insert. The icon is going to look like a litte earth. I've persally just copy and pasted some things but people have said that doesn't always work so I use that.

Nice second chapter
thanx for the information,also thax for liking the story by the way when is ur next story is going to be released
 

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thanx for the information,also thax for liking the story by the way when is ur next story is going to be released
Working on it right now actually. If not tomorrow then thursday. Everybody's probably going to be talking about the Naruto Manga coming out tomorrow most likely but I'll still try to get it in by tomorrow.
 
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