Chronicles of a Ninja Psychotherapist

Flash

Kage in the Making 👑
Legendary
Joined
Apr 22, 2012
Messages
11,350
Reaction score
148
Lol....it t was good to read something different than the regular ffs ;)
 

saaaaaadpanda

Sannin of the Scrolls 📜
Elite
Joined
May 17, 2012
Messages
8,710
Reaction score
1,191
Actually, that was fairly entertaining. If I were to provide some constructive criticism, I would say it's a little drawn out. I also would've found it more humorous if the doctor was more ignorant of the ninja world and its workings, i.e. she shouldn't know what the sharingan is. Another random detail is that your doctor seems to not know basic psych. or much about medicine. You might want to do some background research for a more grounded work.

Additionally, as I almost always say to writers of fan fics, it wouldn't hurt to have someone proofread your work to catch grammatical mistakes. You have a few.

Regardless, this is one of the better fan fics I've read. Good work.
 

SashaUchiha

Jōnin Strategist 🧠
Veteran
Joined
Feb 13, 2012
Messages
2,229
Reaction score
287
Actually, that was fairly entertaining. If I were to provide some constructive criticism, I would say it's a little drawn out. I also would've found it more humorous if the doctor was more ignorant of the ninja world and its workings, i.e. she shouldn't know what the sharingan is. Another random detail is that your doctor seems to not know basic psych. or much about medicine. You might want to do some background research for a more grounded work.

Additionally, as I almost always say to writers of fan fics, it wouldn't hurt to have someone proofread your work to catch grammatical mistakes. You have a few.

Regardless, this is one of the better fan fics I've read. Good work.

For a non-reader thats quite a lot :p Thanks ^_^

Although I don't intend to write much I'd make a few notes... :y
 

Tsuki

Legendary Shinobi 🐸
Supreme
Joined
Apr 27, 2012
Messages
38,847
Reaction score
1,808
Sasha! this was very unique and awesome! I really loved reading it! :scorps:
 

~Sky~

Sannin of the Scrolls 📜
Elite
Joined
Jul 19, 2012
Messages
6,871
Reaction score
600
This was very entertaining xd

It really wasn't that long either, it seemed just right to me

+rep
 

SashaUchiha

Jōnin Strategist 🧠
Veteran
Joined
Feb 13, 2012
Messages
2,229
Reaction score
287

Vex

Kage in the Making 👑
Legendary
Joined
Jul 18, 2012
Messages
12,545
Reaction score
518
Wow I laughed at this part
Dr. Sasha: I mean I had a cat. He died. But after some weeks I started seeing him again. Nobody believed me. But then I got video evidence. But someone stole the tapes. I know how you feel
 

SashaUchiha

Jōnin Strategist 🧠
Veteran
Joined
Feb 13, 2012
Messages
2,229
Reaction score
287
Wow I laughed at this part
Dr. Sasha: I mean I had a cat. He died. But after some weeks I started seeing him again. Nobody believed me. But then I got video evidence. But someone stole the tapes. I know how you feel

:D thanks... and double thanks for reading it carefully! :hug:
 
Top