Chapter 1:Birth of the Greatest ninja ever (besides Naruto)

Pokeblah

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This is after Naruto dies but I'm not sure if that's gonna happen so this is my fan-fiction story, but it's a short one at first.

Within the walls of Konoha, there is a married couple, the man's name is Gaiku the Hokage and the woman's name is Hokara and Hokara is pregnant, but is about to give birth.When the newborn baby was already in her arms they saw that the baby was a boy, then they named him Kazeku.Then an unknown 11 tailed beast appears from no where, Gaiku goes into sage mode then uses Mayfly to get close to the tailed beast, then, he uses water clone jutsu and hits the tailed beast with a rasenshuriken.After the battle with the tailed beast he sealed it in Kazeku.
 
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It could be better, age has nothing to do with it (a 2 year old published a book), but work on your sentence structure and grammar and try to be more creative like it's a movie in your head, and 11 what happened to 10.
 
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