Broken

[0neCrazyAngel]

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What if I have forgotten?

I have two unbearable sides.
Let me have my revenge.
I’ll taste my innocence
In the guilt I consume.

I’m sick.

I do not belong here anymore.

These years are fading.
I am enslaved
In my conscience.
I am a prisoner
To these scattered bones.

My spine leads to my mendacity.

I’m bent over, sheltered
By the woes of past remorse
I’d cut off every single inch
Of my pathetic being
To be whole again.

Just to be whole.

Shivering, trembling, I am nothing.
Eyes devour me
Eyes consume each pathetic inch
Of me.

Stare.

I am sane.
But insanity lives within.

My flesh is closed to a touch
Shrinking back in petulance
I am half a whole.
I am half a truth.
I am half a person.

Tell me where I can breathe.

I cannot fathom these words.
I am
A wreck of a heart break
I’m torn.

Who am I now?

Embrace this.
Embrace the chance to feel this.

I crawl through cold comfort.
Dissolution
Walking into splintered sunlight
Pierce me. Hurt me.
Tear me apart.

Stay with me.

What is missing from
My breath
Is irretrievable.
I cannot recollect.

Help me remember.

I’m unattached
To my misery.
My precious screams. Our despair
Haunts me inside sleeping sunlight.

Rusted keys will open
My nonchalant locked lips.
My skin is breathing for a touch.
Is beauty too much to ask for?

Our words are limitless
But our lives are boundaries.

 

[Hattake Ryuzaki]

Dark. i like it

 

[Uxellius]

My spine leads to my mendacity. was the best line :devil:
very nice +rep for :zonder: :ess

 

[iCuRiddY]

Great articulation, it flows perfectly from line to line. Amazing use of vocabulary, you are an amazing writer.

Keep on writing, I believe you have great insight. This poem is believable and it speaks from the heart which is what makes it great.

Really well written, bravo.

 

[NoNonaruto]

Deeeeeeeeeeeeeeep i likes et shit son

 

[NaruGoku]

lol, this is much more "you" than the one u sent me that you never posted. I'll get back to you on both later k? im actually at work right now but i wanted to check on NB real quick to see if anything interesting was happening. i saw the thread title and thought it might be you! lol.

 

[Yuka]

Excellent Work as usual

 

[Tsuki]

Wow o.o tbh I think it's one of the best poems you've made so far.
Making each link shorter sounds good aswell and the content is well written It's like... the reader is the 'narrator'.
Great poem ('dark' poems are good you know)! ^^

 

[PTR]

Nice poem.

 

[uzumaki antonia]

It's a cool poem I loved it

 

[Skylar Knight]

It's really dark, and that's something I like
...and it seems you like to write poems as dark as this, cause this is your best poem yet in my opinion ^^
You also write really good, and making short lines was a good idea..!

Keep it up Mia You really have talent

 

[The KleaNupGuy]

Oooh creepy, me like me creepy :3
AWESOMNESS Mia sama, thankiez a lot for sharing, Wayy to goh!!!!:ice:

 

[Thoth]

So beatiful. wease:

 

[Shinobi Train]

...I have nothing to critique...

No misspelled words even. It would take a better writer than myself, one more skilled with poetry, to critique this.

Good job, dark, but good. I'm not a huge fan of dark, but it certainly has its place. Been a little while since I thanked a post. I'm also presenting this special gif.

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[Enzup]

nice poem.. I like it..

 

[Unatural]

Nice Poem Mia

 

[〜Angel Reborn〜]

Its good my princess :hug: Mas mahal kita aking anghel <3 <3 Alam mo ba kung ano ang tinitibok ng puso ko :glomp^^

 

[Scooby Doo]

One of the best poems I've read on NB!!Congrats.